blake, the hookline seems kinda weak and so does the theme. and the vss need one good line or image to make the lyric live. also vs 1 doesn't appear to rhyme. I was able to find a few half rhymes in the rest of it. it's good to at least open with a decent rhyme if you're going to let them slide for the rest of the song. as always JMO... [Linked Image]


Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love