Hi, Blake!

I would like to hear how they met instead of this part:

She’s all of nineteen
And a barrel racer
While I’m getting by
As a blue collar glazer

If you decide to keep those lines and the glazing that's involved has to do specifically with replacing windows and no other kind of glazing, I think the word may be glazier.

I would also like to hear why she is special enough to inspire him to drive such a long way. I would like to see his feelings for her to be expressed more dramatically. Maybe have him counting the miles and thoughts of her jumping in when he passes certain points. Maybe he has to be careful because there is a speed trap on the way, stuff like that.

Good luck with this.

JeanB


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