I came up with a melody and this title a few days ago as I was waking up.
I started this one by just writing a chorus.
Be honest; is this title or chorus strong enough to compete in the current commercial markets?
Any nits?

TELL ME I DID SOMETHING WRONG
(C) Cal Skomski 2006

chorus
Tell me I did something wrong
Tell me I’m mistaken
Is there a new love waiting
I feel a bit [contrite] so slighted uninvited
Every day without you makes me feel so sad
Tell me I did something wrong
Then I won’t feel so bad

I need a push sometimes to get going.

Cal


"Contrite" wil be removed on the re-write;
and the line re-written.

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[This message has been edited by Cal (edited 02-11-2006).]

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