Originally Posted by Gavin Sinclair
I think your chorus should rhyme. Choruses should be fun to sing, independently from their meaning, and that's where rhyme comes in. All you have to do is change the order of the lines. Depending on the melody, you can either keep or drop the "or two." If I was writing the melody, I'd keep it, stress the word "song" and sing "or two" as part of the next line, but a different melody might benefit from dropping it.

I'm keeping it cool
Singing a song, or two
Keeping it cool
Just Breezing along

Good luck with your show!

Yes thanks for that suggestion Gavin. I DO want the chorus to be fun to sing w catch melody with rhyming. I need to work on the music now to test the rhymes.

One thing I noticed reading through various lyrics here and elsewhere is the use of a prechorus, to power into the chorus.
I could start the verses slow, then a prechorus like....pick it up, pick it up, pick it up....then full swing sing in the chorus.

Bill