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TV Drama
by Gary E. Andrews - 08/26/26 03:19 PM
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TV Drama
by Raymond Byabazaire - 08/26/26 12:29 AM
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Wendy Woo
by Gary E. Andrews - 08/22/26 12:36 AM
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John Eddy
by Gary E. Andrews - 08/21/26 03:25 PM
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SHINE
by Rob B. - 08/20/26 02:34 PM
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Joined: Nov 2011
Posts: 4,029 Likes: 28
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Kay-lynn,
Well it looks like a top 200 poster came out of hibernation? Hey, I think your song is clever and has a great melody! I'd keep it leaning toward country, and production can easily keep it there. Your vocals lend towards country IMO as well.
I think you have a lot of potential with the song, but that you certainly could make some tweaks to improve upon it. I was looking at 2nd vs and thinking maybe not having both lines end in "her"--should be an easy lyric tweak. I would also recommend lengthening the bridge exclamation line by doubling it (adding one new line) and then keeping the last resolving line.
Ex: Somewhere over the rainbow, da-da, da-da-da-dah Somewhere there's a da-da-da, Yes and I know its there
IMO, you will then allow this exclamatory section have more power and identity--which is important since its not a chorus driven song.
I love your vocal tone. I know you have a raw recording here, but with some really good music tracks and your sweet vocals, this could be a very good song. I'd look to polish a few lyrics perhaps, but your foundation melody is very sound and solid.
Enjoyed your song!
steady-eddie
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