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Beth,

Your lyric clearly shows your wit and sense of humor in full form! Your rhymes alone are "envy-worthy" lol and so clever. "stickers/critter/bitter", "staycation/aggravation/consternation". You should post it over in the crit forum in case people don't see it here. I like all the humorous lines throughout...easy to relate to:

I finally know what it means to go green
And it's nothing to do with the planet

Kudos to you on another fine write!

I can't help but add that during FAWM, they have these hourly challenges, just like this board here. I only did a couple because it depended on the title, and couldn't get them all to work within an hour's time. So I thought I'd set the timer and test myself with your "GREEN" challenge here. So, here's my 1/2 hour of labor for it...Have no real title, so just threw something in....it's all in testing the creativity...I don't expect crits on it! Thanks for the "push"!

Winter’s End

Snow has melted
And the cold subsides
I feel the sun’s presence
As the clouds divide

Spring soon enters
With a soft warm hand
I see the birds’ gather now
At the park’s bandstand

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And it’s green that signals
The winter’s end
Green that waves at us
Like an old lost friend
And we’ll walk with vigor
Thru the lime green grass
Watch some kites fly
With our dreams, at last

Days are longer
But my energy builds
Light brings more than time
To the foothills

Roads with repairs
Holes filled in like new
We can get outside
And be part of the view

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And it’s green that signals
The winter’s end
Green that waves at us
Like an old lost friend
And we’ll walk with vigor
Thru the lime green grass
Watch some kites fly
With our dreams, at last

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Our voices will travel
Our hearts beating fast
Cuz we know the seasons
Are always in the forecast

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