Wow, Beth:

Double en'tendre's (sp?) in so many lines. Love the story behind the song and I hope it isn't your current status, LOL! This has a ton of potential and I hope you'll keep "whittling away" at it until it is perfect.

There are a couple of places here and there that might be difficult to sing but it's tough to judge that factor until the music is created... so I won't get into "crits" at this early stage.

"Green with Envy" might be a good title... LOL!

Regretfully, due to my recent illness, I'm not up to your challenge but we have so many talented writers at JPF, I'm sure you will snare a few for this effort. Best of luck.

All the best, my talented friend!

----Dave