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try and try, i do .
to make my heart, forget you .
uneasy, it's so hard to do .
baby, i just can't get over you !

( chours )
oh, your loving, it's special .
yeah, and your touch, ooh it's incredible,
i fall, i melt, im yours .

hold me forever, take my heart if it breaks
yeah, and put it back together .
take care of me, keep me alive .
make my dreams come alive .

( chours )
oh, your loving, it's special .
yeah, and your touch, ooh it's incredible,
i fall, i melt, im yours .
once more :: ( chours )
yeah, and your mine !

[This message has been edited by nikkigal201 (edited 07-10-2003).]

Nikki ~
You're getting the "you're" and "your" mixed up! *S* But this is a very nice, simple song. I'm having a hard time with the opening though.

try and try, i do .
to make my heart, forget you .
uneasy, it's so hard to do .
baby, i just can't get over you.

hmmmm...what do you think? Not totally satisfied. I'm a little hung up on the first "forget you." I don't think it needs to be said twice in the same verse, however, so I changed line 4.
Keep it up Nikki.
Nice job!

thanks i like the change better !
i hate the your and the you're too confusing to me !!!! ahh ok j/k

Think of it this way:
You're = you are
But now that I re-read what you wrote I may be misinterpreting what you're saying in the chorus. Is it your loving, it's special
or are you saying you are loving (where it would be you're loving)?
Hey.....don't mind me! hehe Just keep writing because you're good! *S*
Take care

I DUNNO !!!! AHHHHhhhh
their love, not mine lol

Only thing that I didn't care for was the use of alive twice in the last two lines of verse two. I don't really have any suggestions to change it, I'm not really good at them. But I still agree that you are writing very well, despite the mispellings and punctuation or whatever, i can read the things fine

Josh Packard