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a little love song inspired by my wife. produced by steven cooper at songwriters studio. sung by bubba hudson. http://www.murreytunes.com/mp3s/madly%20in%20love.mp3madly in love when you blow in my ear or tickle my feet just to get me awake i fuss and fume throw pillows ‘cross the room, but i can’t be mad at you you throw ice water in the shower and laugh, just to hear me scream i fuss and fume throw soap ‘cross the room, but i can’t be mad at you ‘cause when i see your eyes and that beautiful smile i remember why i said i do we play this game and it’s always the same i’m madly in love with you you hand me the phone, it‘s that d.j., who says i won a million bucks when i start to choke, you tell me it’s a joke, but i can’t be mad at you you vacuum in front of the big game at the end of overtime i couldn’t see the play that won the day, but i can’t be mad at you ‘cause when i see your eyes and that body so hot i remember why i said i do we play this game and it’s always the same i’m madly in love with you you give me your hand and say i’m yours forever and today this is when i know, there’s nothing more to show i’ll always be in love with you ‘cause when i see you dance and hear your laugh i remember why i said i do we play this game and it’s always the same i’m madly in love with you ©richard murrey, b.m.i.
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Hey Richard, I couldn't play your song, so I'll just comment on the lyric. Comments below, keep, or sweep Your title is "Madly In Love", but it's fighting for the title position with "I Can't Be Mad At You" in your verses. It's usually better to make the title obvious to the listeners so they can call the radio stations and request it or go to the store and ask for it. Also, I believe you can improve lines 2 and 4 in verse 1, since they are identical except for one word.On a positive note, you have some excellent visual images!when you blow in my ear or tickle my feet just to get me awake i fuss and fume throw pillows ‘cross the room, but i can’t be mad at youyou throw ice water in the shower and laugh, just to hear me scream i fuss and fume throw soap ‘cross the room, but i can’t be mad at you‘cause when i see your eyes and that beautiful smile i remember why i said i do we play this game and it’s always the same i’m madly in love with you you hand me the phone, it‘s that d.j., who says i won a million bucks when i start to choke, you tell me it’s a joke, but i can’t be mad at youyou vacuum in front of the big game at the end of overtime i couldn’t see the play that won the day, but i can’t be mad at you‘cause when i see your eyes and that body so hot i remember why i said i do we play this game and it’s always the same i’m madly in love with you
“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard
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Richard! Whoa, thats nice. Great melody and harmonies. I also like choruses that contribute telling the story a bit by changing the subject slightly yet keeping the hook line. You have done this well as I've seen many times choruses can get a little boring and sometimes they are too detailed in telling the story and become really another verse that repeats itself. You've avoided that mistake. I seldom desagree with Shayne, and I can see where Shayne, by seeing just the lyrics and not hearing the music, could see confusion concerning the best title-(once he hears it, the hook line comes through well enough to claim the title of the song). You might want to consider the title to be "I'm madly in love with you." Why not use the whole line, it even feels more complete as a name. I'm very impressed with your composing, only small thing I might like to see is for the lead vocal to exude a little more emotion at the Bridge. Well done. steady-eddie.
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steady-eddie... thanks for the very nice synopsis! glad you dug it. i have a "hold" on the tune with a publisher overseas... we'll see what happens! rock on, r.
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rich.... i clicked on your link but it didn't come up... i'll try again later. :))) scotty
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Hey Richard,
Just a dynamite tune, a heartwarming hook, a nice demo.
It feels like it's written to one specific person, which is always a nice plus, in a love song.
Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon) from the song "Songs of Love" from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Hi Richard,
The link doens't work for me either. Is there another link you can post?
Dottie
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Hey Richard
Long time no "hear". Glad you posted this one.
I alway enjoy your musical ideas and presentation and the chorus served as your glue.
Doug
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