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by Gary E. Andrews - 06/21/26 10:51 PM
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Hard-Fi
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/19/26 06:43 PM
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I wrote this in honor of my husband of almost 28 years. (don't let that affect your comments on it, please) I hope others can relate to it when your special someone looks at you. Please let me know how you feel about the melody, lyrics, phrasing, etc. My vocals are what they are, not professional, but it is all I have now.  It was done (the music) through Jam Studios. Thanks guys!!! http://soundclick.com/share?songid=8584240You Look at MeYou touch me, baby, you know the right places you stand by me Because you really care Sometimes you study me like you’re healing past heartaches... but when you look at me... I walk on air Chorus 1 'Cause you, you see,... the real woman inside You love me without strings or compromise You honor me, teach me you treat me like a queen My little world’s right when you look at me You hold me tight because you know my insecurities You hurt for me ‘Cause you’ve seen how raw I was inside.. and you laugh with me, like you’re feeling every moment and when you look at me, I can’t hide Bridge Your blue eyes tell stories to mine Fairytales, and sweet lullabies and there’s no mountain we can’t climb Cause our love still grows through time Chorus 2 'Cause you see ... the real woman inside You love me without strings or compromise You honor me, teach me With every word, every deed My little world’s right when, you look at me Tag when you look at me © 2010 Kimberly Hales Kime Little Ike Publishing
Last edited by Kimberlyinnc; 01/08/10 05:47 PM.
*Always open to collaborations on my lyrics.. with singers and musicians, but PLEASE contact me before putting work into one--in case someone else has it..thanks!!** BMI Member All Rights Reserved http://www.littleikepublishing.com Email for Song Business Only littleikeproductions@hotmail.com
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Hi Kim
I like what you are doing musically nice hooky accompaniment.
I like the pause after 'You' and wonder - IF you should leave that pause for JUST the 'You' throughout the song. Anyway -- well done. jm
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Kimberly, the lyric has feeling, well and lovingly written, the
melody has a charm that matches the lyric well, it's catchy and
sort of carefree and well produced, the only nit I'd have is
the chorus needs to stand apart more from the verses,
a little change or lift might help there, that aside it's good
and I enjoyed it very much, including your vocal,
Tony.
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Joice, thank you for listening. Do you mean to always pause it between the you's on the whole song? I was thinking of that but wondered if it would be conversational? I will think more on it and thanks again for listening and the kind words of encourgement:) Kim
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Tony, thank you for listening. I will look into change the chorus more, it is hard for me to vocally lift it much as I dont have much of a range...but I will look into it. Thanks!!
Kim
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Kim ...
I think I have the same problems as you...my songs are dated, and try as I do, I can't make it sound young like the youthful writers of today!
This song is really pretty. Perhaps if you soar in your chorus it may sound less dated.
...maybe it's the midi backing!
Stan
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I think changing the lyrics from third person works well (he to you).
The music has a hint of reggae about it - might be worth trying a full reggae version.
There is definitely a lot of room for harmonies which would help differentiate the chorus.
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This is the best vocal recording I've heard from you -- the vocals are at a decent volume level (though they could even be more upfront). Glad to see that jam studio is working out for you, the music is pretty good here! Nice tribute tune.
Kevin
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Wow - you are really moving on creating music tracks, Kim! If someone wrote something like this for me, I'd consider it the best gift I ever received. Agree with Kevin that the vocal should be more up front. If you're like I was, you might have a subconscious (or even conscious) desire to keep them low. Possibly because you don't like the sound of your own voice. A lot of folks don't when they are just starting - because it sounds so different than they expect. It's all in their head though. I like the sound of your voice on this and want to hear it better! I didn't feel that the verses and chorus were too similar. What DID seem a little too consistent though was the phrasing throughout. You use a lot of pauses - which is effective. But it might be more effective if you use them in either the verse or chorus but not both. Would give a little more dynamics to the song if you changed that up a little. All one opinion of course - and I'm no pro. Bet your husband has a big smile on his face though Scott
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Hi Stan....yes this one is a bit more dated, love song. I may try to reve it up some...make it county. Thank you for listening. I am limited to the music that is available, the riffs etc on Jam Studios until perhaps I purchase band in a box.. Kim
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Hi Colin...I may end up trying to countrify it..LOL. I am not sure. still playing with it. I may try to work on the chorus more, to make it even more different. It is hard, not being a player to know what chords work well in progression...
thanks for listening..and the advice..:) KIM
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Kevin, thank you for your kind words. I am not sure what to do to make them more upfront. Maybe there is a trick on audicity I am missing...:) I appreciate your listening and your kind words..:)
Kim
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Wow - you are really moving on creating music tracks, Kim! Thanks Scott...I am working hard on them, and I suppose progressing is better than going backwards..LOLIf someone wrote something like this for me, I'd consider it the best gift I ever received. My husband liked it. I had to sing it over and over. The first few times I would tear up and had to quite...especially on the line..you honor me, teach me with every word, every deed...cause he always has.Agree with Kevin that the vocal should be more up front. If you're like I was, you might have a subconscious (or even conscious) desire to keep them low. I probably do but I also try to sing loudly and also not sure how to make them more upfront with audicity..any suggies??? Possibly because you don't like the sound of your own voice. I am not wild about it...LOL A lot of folks don't when they are just starting - because it sounds so different than they expect. It's all in their head though. I like the sound of your voice on this and want to hear it better! Thank you Scott...if you have time check out my newest song on the board...make you change. It is more, lady Gaga, stying...hahaI didn't feel that the verses and chorus were too similar. What DID seem a little too consistent though was the phrasing throughout. You use a lot of pauses - which is effective. But it might be more effective if you use them in either the verse or chorus but not both. Would give a little more dynamics to the song if you changed that up a little. All one opinion of course - and I'm no pro. I may consider that. I did the pauses mostly to add to the meaning and how one may naturally speak, of course the music made need for more pausing, in placesBet your husband has a big smile on his face though Thanks Scott. I did it for him for Christmas. He deserves so much more. Scott
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Hi Colin...I may end up trying to countrify it..LOL. I am not sure. still playing with it. I may try to work on the chorus more, to make it even more different. It is hard, not being a player to know what chords work well in progression...
thanks for listening..and the advice..:) KIM One thing to try is to Google for chords to familiar songs that might be similar to what you are aiming at and look at the chords used.
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Kevin, thank you for your kind words. I am not sure what to do to make them more upfront. Maybe there is a trick on audicity I am missing...:) I appreciate your listening and your kind words..:)
Kim No trick required - just look at the left end of the instrumental track and move the -____0____+ slider to the left to turn down the instrument volume. Then make another mp3.
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Hi Kimber Keep working at it Kimber, you'll get it. Yeah, go the Girl's.  You got lots of helpers here, that's great. All the best for 2010.  Hugs Michele
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Kim, I absolutely LOVE this! What a beautiful song. Hope your hubby appreciated it! The lyric is just so heartfelt, every word.
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Colin, thank you, I will take that into mind and try it. Michelle, good to see you around and thanks for listening and your kind words:) Polly, thank you for listening, I am glad you liked it.:) Kim
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Howdy Kim, I just realized that I had commented on this Lyric
in forum #3, having mentioned remembering when you first posted it
I'm glad you changed it to "YOU", seems to work best...Gus
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Hi Kim,
I really like this one - and I'm not a big fan of love songs. ;-) The rhythm and the guitar sounds are really great. Maybe the vocals could use a bit reverb - and the end of the song come kinda surprising to me.
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Thanks Gus for taking a listen..:) Have a great day!
Kim
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Jimmy. Thank you for listening and I am glad you liked it.:)I will take your comments into consideration and thanks again:) Kim
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Kim
this is beautiful, just beautiful wow you are on a roll girl
wonderful
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Hi Dan, well thank you very much!! That is too kind of you. Kim:)
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