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The goal of our "Song Challenges" is to write songs/lyrics on demand within set parameters. We don't critique each other's songs in this thread (but you can say you like someone's song if you want to.) Please post your original works. If you have already written a song/lyric that fits within the parameters, please feel free to post it.

The new challenge is to write a song that mentions some variation of the word "sin." (sins, sinner, sinning, sinned, etc.) The song could be humorous, sad, repentant, religious - whatever you want it to be.


Good luck to you!

Hi Jean,

I saw this new challenge using the word sin (you will find "sins" as well as "sinned" in verse 2). I wrote this song quite a few years ago.

Gail

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SOME KIND OF MIRACLE

(C)1987 CG King


I'll never understand
How someone like me
Can receive so much love
And receive it so free

I've sinned and fallen short
In so much I have done
But God has forgiven
My sins every one

(Chorus)
Oh, it's some kind of miracle
What God can do
He didn't do it just for me
Oh, He'll do it for you
Take all of the pieces
Of your broken soul
Put them back together
And He'll make you whole

It's some kind of miracle
What God did for me
My life was in bondage
And then He set me free

It's some kind of miracle
How with just one prayer
He heard my crying heart
And showed me He cares

(Chorus)
Oh, it's some kind of miracle
What God can do
He didn't do it just for me
Oh, He'll do it for you
Take all of the pieces
Of your broken soul
Put them back together
And He'll make you whole

...Some kind of miracle
Can be yours too
Yes, some kind of miracle
Can happen to you

Hi Jean - I think this should be challenge #28 - we've had two #27's already

btw did you know you can delete your own posts? So if you do make a double post (like with challenge #27) just go into edit and use the delete option

Cheers

Nige

Crucible I Gave Your All Your Sins

(sorry Jean, I've been shown I'm still fawmin when I write 2 or 3 songs a night, but I think it's OK for the challenge, so here goes.....


Verse 1
Here we are, caught up and tangled again.
Web of deception and sin,
Still we play the part,
For so long.

Verse 2
Will we let it go, it's gone way to far,
Sin verses Gods shining star,
Why we bleed his scars,
I don't know.

Chorus
Sin is like a brother and a sister to this world,
Help us Lord we're taken in again,
How did we get this way, Jesus give us vision,
Pray we find the day, we help you with this mission,

(you teach)," Believe in me with all you have within,
I took you to the cross, life will never end,
Hold on to this new start and begin,
Crucible I gave for all your sins".

Bridge
We are here for them, voices of the spirit,
Help them find the way, God's love let them hear it.

Chorus
Sin is like a brother and a sister to this world,
Help us Lord we're taken in again,
How did we get this way, Jesus give us vision,
Pray we find the day, we help you with this mission,

(you teach)," Believe in me with all you have within,
I took you to the cross, life will never end,
Hold on to this new start and begin,
Crucible I gave for all your sins".

Tag
I pray you persevere and wait for them,
While you died to cover all their sins.

Jean (I like these challenges) I've had something in my head for awhile now about sin so I made myself sit down and right something for this challenge.

I am Forgiven
© Vicki Ferloin-Shields-2009

I’ve done things I’m not proud of
I have my fair share of regret
But when I open my Bible
I’m reminded not to forget

Jesus Christ gave his life
For me up on that cross
even though I have sinned
I will not be lost
He will leave the ninety-nine
To come find me
Though I sin time and time again
I am forgiven
I am forgiven

Lord, the gift you gave to me
I will pass on to others too
Forgiveness is a gift
I’m called to give back to you

Jesus Christ gave his life
For me up on that cross
even though I have sinned
I will not be lost
He will leave the ninety-nine
To come find me
Though I sin time and time again
I am forgiven
I am forgiven

Sometimes I stray He still lays His hands upon my heart
no matter what my troubles are He will never part

Jesus Christ gave his life
For me up on that cross
even though I have sinned
I will not be lost
He will leave the ninety-nine
To come find me
Though I sin time and time again
I am forgiven
I a forgiven

vicki

Hi Jean,

I have two already written that meet your criteria. Here's one w/music that was a cowrite w/Kaley and the word "sins" is in the last verse:

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=6113579

“Gethsemane”
(c)2007 Kaley Willow
(c)2008 Lynn Orloff/Kaley Willow

A garden long ago
Bathed in a moonlit glow
A peaceful place where silence would be broken
Jesus fell on His knees
God heard the prayer He breathed
My Father will you take this cup away from me

It was His time to die
And as the hour drew nigh
His fervent prayers continued without ceasing
Though there was watch to keep
Disciples fell asleep
The fate of all humanity just hours away

Bridge:
Gethsemane, the garden echoes
Echoes each plea, Gethsemane
The weight of mankind's sin
Came crushing down on Him
Garden of prayer, Gethsemane, Gethsemane

The soldiers came with swords
A kiss betrayed the Lord
But Jesus struggled not as He was led away
He saw past Calvary
He saw eternity
He'd give His life to take my sins and set me free
He'd give His life to show how deep a love can be
________________________________________________________________

Here's another lyric recently written with the word "sin" in the last verse from one of your previous challenges.

“It’d Be A Shame”
©2009 Lynn Orloff

It’d be a shame to waste a moment when it’s such a perfect day
We could stroll through fields of flowers and I would pick you a bouquet
It’d be a shame if we don’t rearrange our schedule just for this
Just think of all we’d miss

It’d be a shame to miss the ocean hear the waves pound on the shore
We could run and feed the seagulls laugh when they would beg for more
It’d be a tragedy of sorts to shun this kind of bliss
Just think of all we’d miss

Bridge:
Oh what a shame if we dismiss, an opportunity like this
When Mother Nature’s painted such a scene
I’m making you an offer that I hope you won’t refuse
Who knows where all this playfulness will lead…

It’d be a shame to miss the stars tonight, let’s take a little walk
I’d love to watch the moonlight kiss your shoulders while we talk
To not take all this magic in, would surely be our biggest sin
So darling may I ask you one more time
For it would be a shame to pass it by

This is a good one. I have written lyrics concerning aspects of what is commonly referred to as sin, but if it doesn't have to be a fresh lyric I shall look through the archives and see if I can find one where I have actually used the word.

Hi Jean. I suppose this meets the criteria, what with the word SIN sprinkled in a couple places.


Born Into The Sin
© 2009 Greg C. Brown

To every man there comes a time
When prophecies and fate entwine.
The visions once behind his eyes
All come to pass.
They come to pass but awfully slow.

The gypsy in the darkened room,
Who sees tomorrow and its gloom,
Has mumbled something about a spoon
And food of life.
The food of life we eat so slow.

CHORUS
I ran across a holy man
Who clutched a bible in his hand
From which he read.
We are born into the sin
To live and die and live again,
That’s what he said. That’s what he read.

When clouds grow black and winds are blown,
The lightning strikes and thunder groans,
It’s every man who saves his own
Poor wretched soul.
His wretched soul belongs to God.

CHORUS
I ran into a beggar man
Who held a bottle in his hand
That smelled of wine.
“It isn’t just perchance we meet,”
He said as I began to weep.
I had no dime. He said, “take mine.”

The earth is scarred with wounds of fear,
Apocalypse is surely near,
You may have time for one last beer
Before you die.
Before you die remember this:

You were born into the sin,
She was born into the sin,
I was born into the sin,
We were born into the sin,
That’s what I’ve heard.

"I HAVEN'T DECIDED (IF THIS IS A SIN)" (C) 2009 by Stan Good, BMI


I haven't decided if this is a sin
Tho Mama warned me again-&-again
"Men have only ONE Thing On Their Minds"

But I'm Inclined to do this with you
Since you have promised Our Whole Lives Through
(Plus, if you don't do it "You'll Go Blind"...)

STILL, I haven't decided if this is a sin
Much as I have..enjoyed your skin
Brushing close to mine as we lie here...

And you have tipped my Inclination
To ignore Your Reputation
(And Your Reassurance dulls-my-fear...)

(CHORUS)
So I Guess This Is Love
And What-It's-Made-Of
(I'll Admit..The Feeling IS Sublime!)..
But, I haven't Made My Mind Up
IS This HOW I want to wind up:
"Feelin' GOOD..with-WORRIES..On My Mind"?

I haven't decided if this is a sin
But it's a DE-lightful Way To Begin
You sure made-up for ALL I have been-missin'!...

I got new tingles, North and South
Ever since you touched my mouth
(& Thank-You for The Joy of your First-Kissin'!)

(Maybe Repeat Chorus...or)
(TAG)
I got new tingles..North & South
Ever since you kissed my mouth
You have answered All that I've been wishing!

(All Rights Reserved.)

Hello Jean. Here is my take on the challenge. (Number 2 of my self proclaimed 14 songs in 14 days.)

Douglas

Forgive Me Lord (For I’ve Sinned)
(05/05/2009)

(Chorus)
Forgive me Lord for I have sinned.
The list she’s long, thick not thin.
I’ll list them here so you can see.
Forgive me Lord. Please forgive me.

(V)
Lets start with greed, I want it all.
The trophy wife, a crystal ball.
My motto is, “Give it! Give it! Give it now!”
I want the wealth, the scared cow. (Chorus)

(V)
Next dear Lord is gluttony.
Just like greed it controls me.
I’ll eat and eat and eat some more.
More scavenger than carnivore. (Chorus)

(V)
Lust! Oh! Lord! I lust allot.
“Just stop.” You’d say, but I cannot.
It’s like greed and gluttony.
I want. I need. Give it to me! (Chorus)

(V)
Envy and pride ya that’s me.
He has it all and so does she.
They seethe, “Pride before the fall.”
Well that’s not me. I have it all.

(B)
You’d feel my wrath, I’d let you know.
But I’m too lazy so let it go.

(Chorus)
Forgive me Lord for I have sinned.
The list she’s long, think not thin.
I’ll list them here so you can see.
Forgive me Lord. Please forgive me.

Copyright © 2009 by Douglas Murphy

This is one that I found in my 2006 repetoire that contains the word "sin". It was inspired by a trip I took with a lady I have known for years as a friend to see a play in downtown Chicago on a very cold and windy winter day, remembering the hair blowing up against her face. Thought this was something worth writing about, and this was the result.


YOU AND THE WIND

c2006 Brian Beecher



Seeing your hair in the wind had an impact
On my life wishing I could go back
To that winter day so long ago
When we were bundled up against the cold
And it would be easy to fall into sin
Just remembering you and the wind

Living up to commitments can stretch your time
Making you long for a simpler life
Seeing you just that way had a calming effect
You were at your very sexy best
And it would be easy to fall into sin
Just remembering you and the wind

Our trials may have reached a critical stage
Busy, stressed to turn another page
That day really helped to grease squeaky wheels
Amusement and relaxation at our heels
And it would be easy to fall into sin
Just remembering you and the wind

With our relationship at a crisis point
Suggesting we meet at some local joint
To be given the once-over yet again
To see if it is worth salvaging
And it would be easy to fall into sin
Just remembering you and the wind
Yes, it would be easy to fall into sin
Just remembering you and the wind

For the heck of it!
Nothing too worthy, just simple.
Trying to participate more

Chocolate Covered Sin
© 2007 B.B. Grey

v1
Your honeyed words
Are so cliche
I don't believe half the things
You came here to say
So take that heart-shaped box
The one tucked under your arm
'Cause I'm through with loving you
And conceding to your charm

Chorus
I know exactly where you've been
And my patience is wearing thin
Don't patronize me with your semi-sweet lies
It's no disguise, it's just . . . chocolate covered sin

v2
No, I'm not ready
To compromise
I've finally shined a light
Through your dark alibis
No way to sugarcoat
A hunger out of control
Tonight you want another bite
Candy for your soul

Chorus
But I know exactly where you've been
And my patience is wearing thin
Don't patronize me with your semi-sweet lies
It's no disguise, it's just . . . chocolate covered sin

bridge
You know I've got a sweet tooth, baby I won't deny
But you can't satisfy . . . me . . . anymore

Chorus
'Cause I know exactly where you've been
And my patience is wearing thin
Don't patronize me with your semi-sweet lies
It's no disguise, it's just . . . chocolate covered sin

tag
Chocolate covered sin
(And I won't give in)

Thanks, Nigel!

I changed the number in the topic.

Thanks for posting, Gail. Nicely done.

Nice approach, Nightengale! Thanks for posting!

Vicki, I love how you brought in the image of the Good Shepherd without even mentioning it. Thanks for posting.

Two for the price of one! Thanks Lynn. You also had sin in the bridge as well as the last verse. The Gethsemane story is one of my favorites in the Bible.

Here's an oldie. And to top it off, I use "debauchery and sin" - ha!

Kevin

MP3: http://soundclick.com/share?songid=5494697

Must Be All That Gin
(Lyrics: Kevin Emmrich, Music:Emmrich/Anderson)
© Kevin Emmrich 2007
Guest Lead Guitarist: ZeroG

I’ve been traveling about
Just wondering how you’ve been
I’ve heard tales and rumors
That you’re just about done in.
Yea, You don’t look so good
Must be all that gin

Hey Babe, I remember when you were young, sexy and hot.
You’d strut your stuff and knock the boys out
You were always looking good, down to your skin
It sad to see the shape you’re currently in
Yea, You don’t look so good
Must be all that gin

It’s not too late to make a new start
Some of the things you’re doing ain’t that smart
You gotta change your ways, ya know begin again
Give up this life of debauchery and sin
Yea, You don’t look so good
Must be all that gin

Hey now babe, I’ll take you on back
Maybe this time we’ll be on the same track
I’ll get you back to the top of your game
Just remember I might not do it again,
But ya know, you're starting to look pretty good
Must be all that gin

Hey babe, you’re starting to look pretty good
Must be all that gin

Sin Sisters © Joice Marie & Calvin Stewart may 3, 2009

Sliding down the bannister
Running though the halls
Stole cookies from the canister
Drove mom up the walls

They never stopped
Never apart
They were sinister
They were sinister

Twin sisters , sin sisters

Passed love notes in the classroom
Wesson oil parties
Their chatting made the teacher fume
Snakeskin smarties


They never stopped
Stole many hearts
They were sinister
They were sinister

Twin sisters , sin sisters

Just listen for the sweet hissing sound
A double dose of this will take you down

Twin sisters , sin sisters

It's hard to stop
Two wicked hearts
They're sinister
They're sinister

Twin sisters , sin sisters

Thanks, for posting, Kevin. Sounds like the singer isn't that opposed to gin after all.

Thanks for posting the Sssssssssssssssssister's song, Joice and Calvan.

Jean,

This is an unfinished a cappella spiritual I was writing. I asked Letha Allen to sing it for me. She did a fantastic job. It was over in the MP3 forum for a while, but I just noticed this challenge, so thought I would post it over here.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7570646

I'm just a sinner...
And I'm nothin'
without my Lord
I'm just a sinner...
And nothin'
without my Lord
I'll live eternally
Because up on Calvary
He died for this sinner
He died to save
my soul

You're just a sinner..
And you're nothin' without the Lord
You're just a sinner...
you're nothin' without the Lord
Unless you come to him
and confess your wicked sins
You'll die just a sinner
Among the faithless
horde

I'm just a sinner...
And I'm nothin'
without my Lord
I'm just a sinner...
And nothin'
without my Lord
I'll live eternally
Because up on Calvary
He died for this sinner
He died to save
my soul

Thanks for posting this, Wendy.

listen here..
http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Sin
© words and music by C. Stewart (May 3, 2009)


The movement of your skirt knocks me out
The front of my pants starts to shout
Let me in, Lets Sin

Has anybody kissed you where they should
Let me shine my light under your hood
Let me in, Lets sin

CHORUS...
Open up the gates a little wider
Let me stick my face into the fire
Let me in, Lets sin

Squeeze the golden trigger on my gun
Shower you with sweetness in the sun
Let me in, lets sin

CHORUS...
Open up the gates a little wider
Let me stick my face into your fire
Let me in, Lets sin

Bridge...
If this is what it's like to be bad, I'm comin' back

*INSTRUMENTAL BREAK *

CHORUS...
Open up the gates a little wider
Let me stick my face into your fire
Let me in, lets sin

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Thanks for posting, Calvin.

Jean:

I finally found the piece I told you I was going to post here, which probably fits the "sin" format better than the one I posted earlier, because it actually containes the word in the title. It was inspired by a magazine article I read about a town's effort to control vice.


STREET OF SIN

c1997 Brian Beecher



They talk people into parting with
More money than they intend
Even though they came with
A considerable amount to spend

This could backfire at a later date
The whores careful to manipulate
Not to be late
If they can avoid doing so

It happens on the street of sin
You don’t know where else they have been
They do it all because they know
That they have nowhere else to go
It seems you just can’t win
On the street of sin

Relationship aren’t congenial
They’re only there to wheel and deal
His loved one’s acting out of character
And so one night he winds up there

Matters he wouldn’t normally discuss
Nevertheless she makes a fuss
They seem to trust
So they go out to his car

It happens on the street of sin
You don’t know where else they have been
They do it all because they know
That they have nowhere else to go
It seems you just can’t win
On the street of sin

She said she owed a personal friend
Making an effort to pay him back
She took him for everything he had
And the next morning police found him dead




It happens on the street of sin
You don’t know where else they have been
They do it all because they know
That they have nowhere else to go
It seems you just can’t win
On the street of sin

Glad you found it, Brian. Thanks for posting.