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Hey Nigel,

I'm tempted to say something about enjoying being on top, but I figure that'll get me in a heap of trouble....so let me leave it at THANKS!!

Later,
Beth

Top, bottom, it's ALL good.

I love how Wendy sings thang. That bridge is my favorite part of the song, so so fine. It's so interesting how different people "hear" different lyrics...I liked this one and couldn't find the music, but I knew it was there. Hearing this, I think Duh! Why couldn't I hear that? It needed Wendy. I think a lot of us are finding really good matches on this exercise! Maybe it will help us all look at lyrics just a bit differently...those of us who write music might now be looking with just a little more of a gleam in our eyes, wondering hmmm, is this a good one for me, or for someone else...?

Great great collab!

Cool lyric!

Well Done!

Hi again Mike,

Didn't want you to feel left out over here since you were kind enough to post twice. So let me do you the same for you ....

Trying to sneak in a quick post before kids get in (they're late !)....

First of all, I won't speak on Wendy's behalf....I'll just echo your comments: she sounds exquisite!!

As for my lyric, I'm so glad you enjoyed it. This is actually one of my favorites, and I was so happy when Wendy offered to musicate it for me. And with such a great result!! How lucky am I???

I also appreciate the intuitive and comprehensive approach you take to giving feedback -- I'm always thinking, "What? I did THAT? Cool!!"

Finally, I am thrilled you're going to put this on your playlist -- and at the top, no less! I think it would be fair to say WE are honored! I'm sure it'll love the view!

Thank you again for listening and commenting so kindly.

Cheers,
Beth

Hi again Calvin,

Thanks a lot for taking the time to post another groovy response over here.

I'm sure Wendy appreciates your choice of adjectives as much as I do:

very pretty/sad/cool

The tenderness quotient is strictly Wendy's territory though!! Her voice is magical....

See ya around...
Beth

Oh Ricki, Ricki, Ricki....

How well you know me !!!! And thank goodness for Wendy! If it weren't for her (and you for that matter), bringing them to life, my sad songs would just be eating me up inside....

Sniffle, sniffle, I'm hoping to post a goofy tune soon....but not til I'm thru crying---OH WOE IS ME!!

Seriously, thanks for such a sweet post. You know how I feel about what your talent, so accordingly, your accolades mean all the more....

Have a good one!
Beth

Hi Letha,

FINALLY, another cry-baby like me!! Absolutely the lyrics are meant to tug at the heart strings, but Wendy's performance just rips them to shreds!!

I'm so pleased she was inspired to work on this one -- and that everyone has been able to experience the incredible musication she came up with.

Thank you so much Letha for your very generous and emotional comments. I've been waiting for someone like you to come along ! (Should I clarify that??? )

Seriously, I'm thrilled you enjoyed it -- and thanks for sharing in the tears....

Have wonderful day,
Beth

Hi Randy - thanks for your kind words - It's funny that you made the above typo because that's what I kept singing by mistake! - so I had to give myself a slap

Nigel that is Tooo funny...

Hey Mark,

I picked out a couple of my favorite comments you made about "A Million Tears Ago"....and I love 'em all. THANK YOU.

I think the most intuitive remark you made, though, was that this lyric basically "needed Wendy" to bring it to life. And I agree!! As much as we've been doing different versions of the same song, it does appear certain lyrics immediately speak to certain musician -- and I'm so grateful this one spoke to Wendy.

And yes, these challenges have been a rewarding experience on all fronts.

So thanks for help kicking these off -- this one in particular of course!!

Have a good night,
Beth

Just got to hear Half Hearted, Fie Breathing Female, and A Million Tears Ago. Poignant, rocking, and sad respectively. really well done folks.

keep having fun,
John

HI ALL

HERE's My version of John Hoffman's LOUD & CLEAR TONIGHT

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7545217

Thanks for listening ! and Thanks John for letting me play with this
jm

My attempt at musication of Rick Maines' beautiful lyrics. I wrote the music yesterday. The recording could be better, but I've already kicked this horse quite a bit. On with the song!
Probably best with headphones.

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7546197

Ever Never © 2009 Rick Maines/Barry Crannell ASCAP

I was only six years old,
and Hickman school was down the road,
and Daddy walked there side by side with me.
He paused there at the four-way stop,
and waited for me to get across.
Every step I took, I looked to see
if he was watching out for me.
I never dreamed he'd ever never be.

Freshman year was kinda tough,
but Becky was my one true love.
I'd wait all day long to hold her hand.
Walked her home from school most days,
but one day God just couldn't wait,
and Mom was there to help me understand.
Said she was always there for me.
I never dreamed she'd ever never be.

I had a dream the other night,
I made it to the other side,
Mom and Dad were there to welcome me.
I'd never dreamed they'd ever never be.

Winters come and winters go,
but one year it was bitter cold,
and Mom and Dad met Jesus in their sleep.
We buried them and shared some words,
shared some food, and shared the hurt,
Talked about our favorite memories
of life and love and everything
we never dreamed they'd ever never be.

I had a dream the other night,
I made it to the other side,
Mom and Dad were there to welcome me.
I'd never dreamed they'd ever never be.

I never ever dreamed, they'd ever never be.

Hi guys,

I'm HIGHLY impressed.
WONDERFUL SONGWRITING
WONDERFUL SINGING/PLAYING.

I'm totally jealous.
Thank you for sharing this HIT SOUNDING SONG !

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Thanks, Calvin! Barry did a wonderful job with this. I'm impressed and very pleased.

Barry ... I really appreciate what you did with this. Brought a tear, I'd have to admit. Bravo!

HI Rick and Barry

ThIS IS a beautiful song -- so well written Lyrically and musically..

I DO think that you should consider doing it

V
V
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music break
B section just Once <<<<< having it twice (before the final verse in particular) makes me say this.

No matter - it's great - nice work and match
jm

Thanks, jm. Once again, Barry worked magic with this. I love the way it's turned out. It'll be a blessing to me for some time, especially since there's a story behind it. I'm sure we'll be working more on it. I know Barry has a couple of ideas too. Thanks again.

I hear ya, Joice. It was my effort not to step on Rick's work too much too soon. We're still talking. :-)

Barry

Barry and Rick,

Beautiful song. Barry did a wonderful job painting the truth of this lyric in music. Where is the tissue box when you need one?

Wendy - You seem to have a bit of that going on these past couple days :-) We've done our jobs.

Thanks - any thoughts from you (or Tom) about LLS?

Thanks, Wendy. Barry knocked it outta the park. I may be a bit biased, but it sounds great!

Beautiful song and another tear jerker...please pass the tissues when you find them wendy...very well done,and imagine it will go very far..

Here’s the latest list of completed songs for this challenge:

Bottle of Jezebel - Michael Zaneski\Stag
Road Hog Gypsies - Nigel Quin\Frank n Furter
Now Is Forever - Now Is Forever
Half Hearted - Ricki E. Bellos\Joice Marie
Fire Breathin' Female - Scott Campbell\Wyman Lloyd
A Million Tears Ago - Wendy D\Beth G. Williams
Loud and Clear Tonight - John Hoffman\Joice Marie
Ever Never - Rick Maines\Barry Crannell

And you can here them all here at JPF Collab Challenge #3 - Radio Station

Thanks Nigel. Wish I could but I have no sound yet ...cant wait till it is fixed.

Hi Barry and Rick

Very nice, this song gave me goose bumps. That's how I can tell when a song hits me. (music and lyrics)
Just plain ole sweet.

be cool
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A Million Tears Ago - Wendy D\Beth G. Williams
Loud and Clear Tonight - John Hoffman\Joice Marie
Ever Never - Rick Maines\Barry Crannell

Wow!

Wendy, you have the sweetest sounding voice! I may have to press you into service on one of my lyrics.

Barry, as you know I have two of your CDs. You are an amazing writer and composer. If you don't record another CD with YOU doing all the singing, you're cheating the world out of something wonderful.

Joice, this is one of your nicer vocal performances (among many) . I also love the instrumentation.

Beth, John and Rick, your lyrics kick major booty!

Fine job, all around. I'm thrilled to know you.

Greg

Road Hog Gypsies,
cool country rocker, had me doin the head bob and foot tap thing.

Enjoyed it.
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Thanks a lot Calvin and Skip - really glad you liked it so much.

Barry

Greg - thank you so much. You're very generous with your accolades!

Okay here's Calvin Stewart's "Catwalk Candy".

It's a bit too ambitious for me to mix easily...it's gonna take a few more passes before I get everything coming through clearly. But whatever....let's hit the dancefloor!

http://soundclick.com/share?songid=7557143

Catwalk Candy

Soft leathers
Pink feathers
Catwalk Candy

Open blouse
Crowded house
Catwalk Candy

A sweet piece of sugar
But she's only there to view
Don't expect me to share
My, Candy with you
Catwalk Candy, lookin' fine
Catwalk Candy, she's all mine

Rockin' hips
Puffy lips
Catwalk Candy

You would melt
If you felt
Catwalk Candy

A sweet piece of sugar
But she's only there to view
Don't expect me to share
My, Candy with you
Catwalk Candy, lookin' fine
Catwalk Candy, she's all mine

Every man would love her
Half the women too
Tell me Mr. Preacher man
How bout' you
Would you like a taste of my Candy?

A sweet piece of sugar
But she's only there to view
Don't expect me to share
My, Candy with you
Catwalk Candy, lookin' fine
Catwalk Candy, she's all mine

Catwalk Candy, lookin' fine
Catwalk Candy, she's all mine


© words by C. Stewart ( April 30th, 2007 )

Ah ........... Mark and Calvin this is Rocking ! -- I can't wait to listen on head phones!

Nice !! -- who is doing the girl vocs... your daughter or wife ???? anyway They add so much !

oh man, you're too fun, thanks so much for all you do around here.

Calvin

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Nice one Mark – that’s not at all what I was expecting – interesting. Some of the harmonies are reminiscent of ‘Good Day Sunshine’

Heaven's To Betsy!

This was hands-down the most entertaining song I've heard in a long, long time!!! Lyrics terrif, musication phenomenal, LOVED the addition of the female vocal... you guys (and gal) really pulled this one off (hee hee hee) big time!

FLAVOR-wise, it reminded me a bit of Squeeze, the B-52's, and well, Calvin & Mark (BTW, I'm really digging your new avatar, Mark. You have sort of a Jim Morrison, Justin Timberlake, Charles Manson thing going on -- sexy!! )

Are you two prepared to top this number somehow???

Beth

I don't know why they cut this one from the final print of Rocky Horror... It belongs there... that was a load of fun! Nice work guys!

Pink feathers!!

Thanks y'all! The oddball vocals were from my wife and both daughters and I, just being weird in front of a mic last night for about 10 minutes. We were laughing our heads off! You should hear some of the outtakes. Later on I cut and pasted the bits that worked.

This one is going to be really hard to mix right...so much going on.

Greg, I'm hoping for another Zoolander film.

How do you look in a bustier, fishnets and stilettos?

Hideous!

Honestly, I could totally hear this in the soundtrack to that kind of film.

Well Mark, I'm totally enjoying this one the more I play it.

Tell the family I said "thanks" for participating.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Haha! Yes, that would be the brilliant young Madeline Kaufman, he said, beaming proudly, like a dad. The "I'm so hot" voice is the dazzling young Lucy Kaufman, and the "So perky they make me sick" voice is the vivacious heartthrob Teresa Wlaschin.

Thanks Randy!

Hi Mr.Kaufman,I just wanted to say,as an outsider looking in...You are unbelievably talented.And I must agree with Calvin,you contribute so much of your time and talent to your friends here at JPFS.I enjoy just coming to this thread everyday just to see what you guys are up to now,and I have a blast just watching you guys,and this isnt just for Mr.Kaufman,I'm talking about all of you that have participated in this and Mr.Kaufmans "Classic Christmas"lyric challenge...you guys are great and a joy to watch and learn from...I tried to come up with something for that particular challenge,and just found it way too hard for me....maybe next time...Take care....Michelle

Thanks Michelle! I'm just hoping to get on Brian's good side and not have him hate me for failing him as a music awards judge. That's really sweet of you, but you better stop calling me Mr. Kaufman or I'll have to think of some wild nickname for you...

Cheers!
-Mr. Kaufman

Ok..I will do that.....and I'm not sure if you could come up with one that I havent already been called....cuz I've been called pretty durn near everything....lol