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I absolutely love this chorus. The verses are a good lead, great bridge, it's all great!!

Great song!

Ande, the demo has top-notch expensive production.
the lyric, though is really, really weak esp. that second verse. I'm being honest here...that second verse is painful.
you may be relying on production to make your song.

Good opportunity for the word "devil", "angel" or "heaven" somewhere... seriously. Hell is the hook, and there are more opportunities to mine...

Great production, sounds almost radio-ready. Since your hook relates to hell, so should your verses. First verse works, second verse only has the last line relating. I suggest rewriting these lines:

Feels like I’m catching a contagious case of lust
You’re strollin’ over here and my heart’s about to bust
Well I got a li’tle problem
You’re so drop dead awesome

In any case, good luck with it!

Hey Ande,

I'm going to go out on a limb here and agree with everyone else: The hook and the chorus are FAB, but I think the lyrics could use a little primping.

Because I don't think I've ever played around with one of your songs, I figured, what the HELL, this is as good a time as any, so that's what I've done. I hope you don't mind.

Needless to say, these sugs are totally keep or sweep.

ENJOY!!

Beth

"Hotter than the Hinges on the Gates of Hell"

The heatwave hasn't let up it, it's a quarter to nine
I'm hangin' at the corner bar, just chillin' for a while
I'm finally cooling off
And then a warm wave rolls in
I turn to see what's cookin and I see your devlish grin

CHORUS
YOU’RE HOTTER THAN THE HINGES ON THE GATES OF HELL
ALL OF MY RESISTANCE IS ABOUT TO MELT
MY TEMPERATURE’S RISIN’, AIN’T TOO SURPRISIN’
GOTTA PLAY IT COOL ‘FORE I MAKE A FOOL OF MYSELF
YOU’RE HOTTER THAN THE HINGES ON THE GATES OF HELL

Your red hot pants are smokin', you're no angel in disguise
I'd brave any inferno just to look into those eyes
Can feel heat from a distance
I'm the moth drawn to your flame
I don't know what comes next, but I am fired up just the same

CHORUS REPEAT

As we walk down to her door way, fear my feet are getting cold
But what the hell, for lesser things a man will sell his soul
She reads my thoughts "don't worry, pet
The devil made you do it”
And in a deeper voice, "I'm almost certain you'll live thru it."



This might be a bit scary for the youngin's...

It really builds well. Nice how you structure the song. The transitions really work well.

Also, thanks very much for the songwriting tips and your blog. Very insightful.

Tom

Ande: I want to suggest you consider this idea below for the first verse even though the first verse is really really clever. I will come back and tell you my reasons.
Regards...Paul

Seems like the Devil had a hand in your plans tonight
Now matter which way I turn, can’t get you outta my sight
Each glance I take I get warmer and warmer
It’s a damn sure bet you gonna lure me to your corner
Your driving me wild with your firery eyes

well, they keep tellin' us to give 'em tempos, great hook, strong chorus, pitch the heck out of this , don't take no for an answer, it's simply not an option write great, be well....moker

Hi Ande,

Don't think I want to critique it, just want to say I think it has a great hook, love the melody,music tempo and the singer has great vocals.

Enjoyed listening to it

Letha

Ande,

I don't know about this one. I've listened to both the demo and Brock's original version. I really like Brock's version, the produced one seems just a little over-done. I find the lyrics on the weak side -- which surprises me. But I realize that you might have come along late to this one.

I've been on this thread about 5 times, but I couldn't bring myself to comment -- it's tough to comment on a full demo that was paid for and of course, you've been doing this a lot longer than me.

I found Brock's version easier to listen to all the way through!!

Kevin

Hi Ande

Nice to see something of yours over here.... I will echo the others, I guess on the lyric. Best wishes. I'm sure it will be worth the effort. jm

Hi Again Ande

Just some thoughts here to prime the pumps...... take or leave, okay jm

The bartender’s blender is spinning red tonight
Doing all I can, to be cool under these hot lights
Your come on looks from the corner
Keep on making me warmer
And I can feel the heat from your fiery eyes

CHORUS
YOU’RE HOTTER THAN THE HINGES ON THE GATES OF HELL
Your're fanning my furnace, I'm ABOUT TO MELT
MY TEMPERATURE’S RISIN’, AIN’T TOO SURPRISIN’
GOTTA add some ice ‘FORE I MAKE A FOOL OF MYSELF
YOU’RE HOTTER THAN THE HINGES ON THE GATES OF HELL

Feel like I’m the mixer for an exotic drink
You slide a bit closer as the ice starts to clink
Well I got a li’tle notion
You’ve set into motion
My eyes are on you, your smoke makes me blink

Hi Ande,

Well you've got plenty of suggestions coming your way already so I would just like to say I love the hook & the bridge is special.
Good luck with your work.
Nice job.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Ande:

There are a lot of things to love about this song:

1. Great concept.
2. Great hook.
3. Excellent use of images of "hot" and "cool".
4. The melody of the song in general is catchy, smooth, singable and fun.
5. A lot of the lyrics are nicely crafted...good use of alliteration (i.e. Your come on looks from the corner...Keep on...) It doesn't call attention to itself but it sure makes the song "feel" good (especially if you're singing along.)
6. Great title.
7. Great first line.

I thought the lyrics in the second verse were not up to the standard of the rest of the song...except the last line, which was excellent.

I really enjoyed the original guitar demo, but that may be because it was my second listen and good songs seem to sound better the more you listen to them.

Mark