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Geez, the muse shows up so rarely that I have to follow her  I nicked the title from Ray Bradbury's book of the same name - a recent sequel to Dandelion Wine that I read this summer. Not a stand-alone song - at best, a track on next year's themed CD  Any suggestions welcomed - including to find a new muse The song, Farewell Summer is here: http://www.soundclick.com/bands/page_songInfo.cfm?bandID=377550&songID=6748954And the lyric is below. Thanks Scott Farewell Summer (c) 2008 by S.W. Campbell Farewell summer say the kites to the sky Thanks for letting us fly so high And leaving us free of wires and trees Farewell summer says the mower to the grass I’m really glad you’ve stopped growing so fast My blades gone dull, so here’s to fall And farewell summer Farewell summer say the boys to the stream That wound its way through their summertime dreams But the swimming hole has grown too cold Farewell summer say the sneakers to the feet We made you so fast and fleet Now our magic’s gone, you’re on your own Farewell summer Farewell summer say the fireworks to the night We sure had us a bang-up time Remember those booms when December looms Farewell summer say the leaves to the trees Thanks for all the memories We won’t mourn that our welcome’s worn Farewell summer Days so long, yet blink and they’re gone Farewell summer
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Wow, what a lyric...maybe you swayed me, but it reminds me of Bradbury in his poetic mode, and of a lot of 20th century American poetry and prose. Really grabbed me and made me wonder once again why we always always write about relationships, desire and booze in popular song? Especially when there's a whole world out there to consider. Love the perspective of this one...I get very bored of "spoken" narratives...this one reminds me more of thought instead of speech, and those are marvelous thoughts. Like an eye that can zoom anywhere at all. "We sure had us a bang-up time" Great lyric...look forward to listening later. -Mark
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Hey brother Scott,
Another nice one. Kind of a light and breezy feel if that makes sense and I rarely do, LOL. Harmonies sounded good and a nice lyric. Some good lines in there.
Farewell summer say the fireworks to the night
We sure had us a bang-up time
Just one of many favorite lines. Damn your good when you're on your game which of course is always. Kudos.
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Well, now I like it even more...just a guitar and voices that add harmonies as it goes. What a great closer to an album.
Scott, all of your songs have a sort of anthem quality to them, or hymn-like quality. That's a very cool thing.
Someday, some "major" needs to try one of your songs on for size. It would be like Cinderella's glass slipper for some daring celebrity...everyone would ask where that song came from.
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Wow, what a lyric...maybe you swayed me, but it reminds me of Bradbury in his poetic mode, and of a lot of 20th century American poetry and prose. Really grabbed me and made me wonder once again why we always always write about relationships, desire and booze in popular song? Well, they do comprise the magic trio Thanks Mark - I don't write much about those because I find I'm hard pressed to say something about them in a new way This was definitely inspired by Bradbury - even beyond the title. One of my favorite sections of Dandelion Wine is when he talks about the magic in a new pair of tennis shoes and how it all leaks out by the end of the summer. Glad you liked it! "We sure had us a bang-up time" I couldn't resist Scott
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Hey brother Scott,
Another nice one. Kind of a light and breezy feel if that makes sense and I rarely do, LOL. Harmonies sounded good and a nice lyric. Some good lines in there.
Farewell summer say the fireworks to the night
We sure had us a bang-up time
Just one of many favorite lines. Damn your good when you're on your game which of course is always. Kudos.
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Steve Thanks Buddy! You're too kind I had to drive up to my mom's in Ohio last weekend. I go there every Christmas but this is the first time I have been back in summer in about 15 years. That, combined with just having read the Bradbury book, combined with contemplating turning 50, all worked together, I reckon Scott
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Well, now I like it even more...just a guitar and voices that add harmonies as it goes. What a great closer to an album.
Scott, all of your songs have a sort of anthem quality to them, or hymn-like quality. That's a very cool thing.
Someday, some "major" needs to try one of your songs on for size. It would be like Cinderella's glass slipper for some daring celebrity...everyone would ask where that song came from. Thanks for coming back to listen, Mark. I know what you mean about the hymn thing - I don't know whether it's from a folk music influence or whether it was from going to church when I was young. That would be one daring celebrity! Have to admit it would be way cool though. Thanks again, Mark! Scott
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Love it Scott... especially "Farewell summer says the mower to the grass I’m really glad you’ve stopped growing so fast" My favorite part really nice harmony your singing..
http://www.soundclick.com/louistwinn"If a man does not keep pace with his companions, perhaps it is because he hears a different drummer. Let him step to the music which he hears, however measured or far away." Thoreau
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Thanks Louis. I like when the grass slows down too Scott
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Morning Scooter, Such a nice wistful contemplative feel to this one. But it also makes me sad....way too early in the summer to be thinking about these things.  Neverthless, the POV really sells this one. And the harmonies fit everything into place. Reminds me a bit of Crosby, Stills & Nash... BTW, you may believe your Muse is on stand-by a lot -- but remember, quality not quantity. And you are WAY AHEAD in the first category... Keep up the good work... Beth
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This is so sweet. Very nice harmonies. We always call the fireworks boom booms. I really like this. The melody is perfect.
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Morning Scooter, Such a nice wistful contemplative feel to this one. But it also makes me sad....way too early in the summer to be thinking about these things. Neverthless, the POV really sells this one. And the harmonies fit everything into place. Reminds me a bit of Crosby, Stills & Nash... BTW, you may believe your Muse is on stand-by a lot -- but remember, quality not quantity. And you are WAY AHEAD in the first category... Keep up the good work... Beth Sorry I made you sad, Beth. Here in FLA it's always summer (weather wise) so it wouldn't matter when I wrote it - it still wouldn't be the right time. Thanks for the nice words - I'll pass them on to my muse.... Scott
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This is so sweet. Very nice harmonies. We always call the fireworks boom booms. I really like this. The melody is perfect. Thanks Jean! Glad it all hung together for you. Was enjoyable to put this one together. I have crazy neighbors - down here they are boom boom boom boom boom boom boom boom boom booms. Scott
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Hi Scott,
Living in Florida, it's summer all the time for you, even when it's not, compared to the north. We have two seasons here, winter and july/august. This song is wistful, like Beth says, filled with good times that will soon enough be only memories. My husband and I are always saying to each other, "you won't be able to do that in December". So many good visuals of this time of year, and the harmonies set it off so well. Very nicely done.
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Hi Scott, Glad I stopped in for a listen. Your songwriting here is very hard to beat & your vocal/music is just as pleasant as it can be. This is a GREAT tune. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Liked the meloncoly feel to this!
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Hi Scott,
Living in Florida, it's summer all the time for you, even when it's not, compared to the north. We have two seasons here, winter and july/august. This song is wistful, like Beth says, filled with good times that will soon enough be only memories. My husband and I are always saying to each other, "you won't be able to do that in December". So many good visuals of this time of year, and the harmonies set it off so well. Very nicely done.
Ricki Hi Ricki: I lived in Chicago for five years so I have a feel for what you experience up there. I don't miss winter at all - but I do miss the sense of anticipation that spring brought and I even miss the melancholy feel of fall. Just not enough though Thanks! Scott
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Hi Scott,
Glad I stopped in for a listen.
Your songwriting here is very hard to beat & your vocal/music is just as pleasant as it can be.
This is a GREAT tune.
I'm glad you stopped by too, Calvin. Thanks - glad you liked it! Scott
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Liked the meloncoly feel to this! Thanks, Michael - that's what I was aiming for.... Scott
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Scott - this one started out like Hmmm then worked it's way quickly into a great place. I was feeling it!!
Farewell summer say the fireworks to the night
We sure had us a bang-up time
That's just great!
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Hi Scott I don't think I can say much, other then PERFECT! I think I will listen to this again, love the harmonies. Michele 
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I like the down to earth imagery - very clear painting of the picture. I can see the fading summer in the song and feel it coming through. I like the how the songs builds.
Tom
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Scott - this one started out like Hmmm then worked it's way quickly into a great place. I was feeling it!!
Farewell summer say the fireworks to the night
We sure had us a bang-up time
That's just great! Hey Sub! Yeah, I know what you mean - this one is not destined for Ourstage. Glad it grew on you Scott
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Hi Scott I don't think I can say much, other then PERFECT! I think I will listen to this again, love the harmonies. Michele Thanks Michele - cool that you could listen again! Glad you are feeling better - I missed reading all your enthusiastic posts. Scott
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I like the down to earth imagery - very clear painting of the picture. I can see the fading summer in the song and feel it coming through. I like the how the songs builds.
Tom Thanks, Tom - glad you felt what I was aiming for! Scott
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Hi Scott This one feels like a classic all the way to me... like it could have been around for a lot of time and will work for a long time to come.... I love every word Scott. Nice job ! jm
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Scott,
I guessed I missed this one along the way. Well I am glad I found it. Just a classic end of summer song. The viewpoints expressed by the inanimate objects were quite insightful -- OK, you had one animate thing in there: "...boys to the stream...".
Well played, well sung and just another great one. This will go just fine on your "Theme" CD.
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Hi Scott, This is just terrific - though a bit sad for me here in the Northeast where summers are very short - I'm not happy thinking about it ending . It really has a Bradbury feel to it. My favorite work of his is "Dandelion Wine" and this captures the feeling in that book. Wonderful job! Clint
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Hi Scott This one feels like a classic all the way to me... like it could have been around for a lot of time and will work for a long time to come.... I love every word Scott. Nice job ! jm Thanks Joice - glad it has that feel for you! Scott
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Scott,
I guessed I missed this one along the way. Well I am glad I found it. Just a classic end of summer song. The viewpoints expressed by the inanimate objects were quite insightful -- OK, you had one animate thing in there: "...boys to the stream...".
Well played, well sung and just another great one. This will go just fine on your "Theme" CD.
Kevin Thanks Kevin - wasn't sure it would work. I mean inanimate objects can't think, let alone speak. Just hoped it was presented in such a way that no one would think it was stupid Appreciate it! Scott
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Hi Kaley: Nice to see you again..... Yeah, you have a point. I should have done better with that line. I want to keep fleet because of the rhyme with feet. Also it has, to me, a slightly different connotation than fast - kinda like fast but also nimble.... However, it's not different enough from fast to use both of them - so I should probably replace "fast". I liked the alliteration so I used it - but I can probably do better. Thanks for making me think Kaley! Scott
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Hi Scott, This is just terrific - though a bit sad for me here in the Northeast where summers are very short - I'm not happy thinking about it ending . It really has a Bradbury feel to it. My favorite work of his is "Dandelion Wine" and this captures the feeling in that book. Wonderful job! Clint Hey Clint! Nice to see you back. Hope your summer is going well. Don't worry - you still have plenty of time yet Glad you liked it - Dandelion Wine is my favorite Bradbury book too.... Scott
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Not much to say that wasn't already written previously. I enjoyed it a lot. I had the same reaction Mike did initially, but by the time the song ended I was sold and wanting more. Great work. Made me feel peaceful with images of autumn flashing in my head. Loved the harmonies as well.
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Thanks, Rob - appreciate the comments. I think I have to redo the first verse vocal to get the pitch more on target. Maybe add a short guitar intro to - that might help get rid of the hmmmmmms Thanks again, Scott
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Scott:
I listened to this at work (where I listen to a lot of stuff but really can't write comments) a long time ago, and it has stayed with me, so I figured I would go find this thread and leave my comments.
First, I like the lyrics a lot...and you get bonus points for the fireworks having a bang up time. The melody is catchy. And the song builds nicely with the harmonies.
This is a good song and I think there may be a market for it. I can picture this one in a movie or TV show. It seems general enough (in a good way) to fit a number of situations. My only gripe with the song is the lyrics do not go anywhere...they sort of stay at the same level (other than the tag summing things up.) All three verses say basically the same thing. So here's what I would do. I would add a bridge to break things up melodically and to say something different with the lyrics and then try that market.
Just my two cents...but I hope you don't just dismiss this one. It stuck in my head for almost a month.
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Scott,
I can't say much more than has already been said, but I really enjoyed this. Harmonies were nice, tune is nice. It made me a bit wistful, but I enjoyed the humor in it too.
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Hey Mark: Was really surprised to see this one pop up again. Just a little history on it: I was looking to come up with a short simple song to end next year's CD - one which follows a loose theme. Never had in mind for it to be a stand-alone song... I have a confession to make - it's not really about saying good-bye to summer. I was thinking of writing a song in which a guy is leaving the summer of his life and looking back on it. But then I decided to have some fun and translate his thoughts into those of inanimate objects who were looking at the end of the real summer. So, for instance, if I had written the song literally, the first verse would have the guy thanking his aging parents both for guiding him but giving him enough freedom as well. Then telling his kids that he is glad they've finally reached adulthood because he's too old to keep up with them Of course I knew that the underlying meaning would be completely lost because there are no clues given in the lyric - still it was a fun way to come up with ideas for the things that say good-bye in the song. I'm going on about this to indicate that it was just kind of a whimsical experiment..... In light of your critique though, maybe I should let my thinking become a little more flexible. I agree absolutely that adding a bridge would be essential in making this a song that could stand on its own. Certainly a better arrangement would be needed as well. Maybe I'll think along those lines! If so, thanks for nudging me out of my narrow way of thinking about it. Scott
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Scott,
I can't say much more than has already been said, but I really enjoyed this. Harmonies were nice, tune is nice. It made me a bit wistful, but I enjoyed the humor in it too. Thanks, Wendy. I just left a detailed reply to Mark that explains how the song came to be. From your comment, it sounds like you felt what I was shooting for... Appreciate it... Scott
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Scott, this is done very well...fresh lyrical approach,which i've come to expect from you...love the change you slipped in right before the tag, nice touch...this one's quite a bit different from "Summertown" huh?!!...you've got alot of pictures packed into these 2 minutes..write on...moker
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Scott, this is done very well...fresh lyrical approach,which i've come to expect from you...love the change you slipped in right before the tag, nice touch...this one's quite a bit different from "Summertown" huh?!!...you've got alot of pictures packed into these 2 minutes..write on...moker Thanks, Moke Yeah, a little different from Summertown. There aren't many advantages to having no musical ambitions but one of them is that I can chase that muse wherever she goes Appreciate it... Scott
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i liked this. nice harmonies. like the lyrics, but could tighten up the phrasing/timing here and there, e.g. "now our magic's gone" - one too many syllables.
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Hi ant:
Thanks - glad you liked it. Yeah, that line is giving me some grief - probably need to adjust it.
Scott
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