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Hi Stan,

Just sent the mp3 to your wife's email so you can let me know if you get it. So far it hasn't bounced.

Peace,

Rachel

Hey Stan!

This is awesome! A message we all need to listen closely too.

One of your best IMO!

Charlann

HiDee Mz Beth!

True..I might've penned more than one about Vibrators..I've done several about Electric Fans--both of which sorty qualify as The First Electric-Motored Appliances..along with Sewing Machines & Dental Drills. But..an Article in "Slate Magazine" had the first In-Depth look at the inception of Vibrators last week, & that fired me up enough to pen "Good Buzz", which I EXPECTED to be a Wee-Bit Controversial. (As Our Culture is SO Hung-Up on anything Pleasurable. I'm kinda surprised there isn't a Sin Tax on Vibrators..but guess they get off the hook since they're still good at relieving Muscle Pains.)

I'll forever kick myself for not spendin' $75 on that Hand-Cranked Model, since I've never seen Another..since! (I own 2 complete Civil War Era "Shoo Fly Fans" & Motors to 3 others that I'm still restoring..that are Electric Fans' ancestors. Wasn't all THAT Interested in Vibrators over the years..tho I've made use of some of the early electric ones on my messed-up Neck Vertebrae from time-to-time.) Some of Hamilton Beach's Early Ones'll probably still be running 200 Years from now, they're made SO-solidly! (Just Rich Folks originally HAD Electricity..& they wouldn't buy shoddily-made appliances..partly due to Fear of the whole house burnin' down.)

9th B-Day Parties sound like a BLAST! (I still remember my 4th!)
"20 Kids?"..Wheee!..Betcha never had a Dull Moment! We head off to my Fan-Collectin' Buddy & his wife, Don & Nancy Taussig, havin' their 20th Anniversary Party in Sarasota today! SO at 2 this aftynoon, there'll be a bunch of us Fan-Collectin' Grownups actin' like Kids today! Invite said "No Gifts" but La Femme found a Card that plays "You're Still The One" that should be a Hit!

Ah..to be married Only 20 Years again..heh! (Our 37th was in July.) It's Don & Nancy's 2nd Marriage...(Long Story)..they're Both Redheads..She's been Fan Club's Secretary over a Decade..Peach of a Gal..even LIKES Ol' Electric Fans (What a KEEPER!)..& makes her living as a Justice-of-the-Peace, Marryin' Folks! (Lots of great Wacky-Weddin' Annecdotes!)

Gotta Scoot..Rachael's Melody Awaits..& it's Rush City to get Flea Mkt Over with & Head off to Sarasota!

Happy Sunday & Hope you're Healin' Up Fast...& The B'day Party didn't wear ya out..20 kids at One Time makes me tired just to Think About It these days..heh!

Big Weekend Hugs & Thanks for da Kind Visit & Words, M'LadyChum!
Ol' Stan

WELL-Done, JamaicaLady! (I Be Jammin'!!!)

Your Vocals are Beautiful..Arrangement is goin' WELL!

In my version of Head Melody "Ripple-Effect" was sung like-so:

"Ripple..Ripple....(1-2-3)....Ripple-Effect"

Currently it's "Ripple..Ripple..Ripple.....Effect"

Which is NO Problemo...(But try it once...see if it's an improvement or not.)

And.."can" can be eliminated in Lyric, last Chorus Line..."can see" I think..if you'd like.

You Sing SO Well/Music's CERTAINLY On The Right Track..this is Going' Beautifully-Along, & I'm well In Your Debt!!!

Thanks for Making this a Great Weekend..& Beyond!

BIG Weekend Hugs, Kind Lady..(& Thank Your Hubby TOO!)
Best Wishes,
Stan

G'Mornin' Mz C!

It felt Awesome when That Hook Arrived...& feels Even More-So with Rachael's Music now!

Just Wait'll Ya HEAR it!!!

Thanks for Your Kind Visit & Words, M'LadyChum! Hope All's Going Wonnafully for ya Down Nashcity Way!

Big Weekend Hugs,
Stan

Mornin' Stan,

Had quite a day yesterday, for sure...and one of the little chitlins who couldn't make the party is due over here in a half hour -- she's no fool, she'll have first access to "the loot". Then soccer at 2:00, then likely more birthday cake!

Yes, I am a bit weary this morning...I didn't use my crutches during the party, just sort of hobbled around, so my feet hurt, and my left arm I picked up too many heavy things with, and just the spot where it's broken is bothering me mightily today. I'm just going to ice it and hope for the best.

Sounds like you have quite a day planned as well. Just one little clarification from my post....I didn't mean you had written a vibrator song already (as in, a second one)...I just meant that between the time you wrote your post to me about possibly writing one, and me READING that post, you had gone ahead with GOOD BUZZ. It's too bad a certain naysayer hadn't read the accompanying history to that piece. Is does not surprise me that you are surrounded by such a colorful group of friends.

Have a great day, and see you around town soon. Remember going to a really great little restaurant in Sarasota on our honeymoon (long story -- first week in Aruba, second week was supposed to be in St. Martin, but a hurricane blew the island away about two days before the wedding...needed to find someplace fast with connections from Aruba...nutty, but ended up meeting more people from around the world in Sarasota than in Aruba. Aruba was a veritable hotbed for Bostonians!) Anyway, wish I could remember the name of it, it was a little converted house...and while we were there, there was a couple celebrating their 50th anniversary...so they challenged us to come back their for OUR 50th! If poor JJ makes it to 50 years with this old broad, he deserves a medal.

Anyway, one quick scoot around the boards, then need to get myself ready for the kiddie company!!

Ciao for now,
Beth

Hi Stan,

I am thrilled that you really like what's going on so far. There is always a moment of trepidation when I send off a first draft of music with words because I never know for sure if the lyricist will like it but so far.....so good.

I think I instinctively sang "RIPPLE RIPPLE RIPPLE EFFECT" straight because you already have the break and syncopation in the verse lines and this was one way of differentiating the chorus more from the verse. It is also easier to sing straight and certainly with the chorus you want that 'singability factor'. All that being said I did try it your way but I still prefer it the way I sent it to you.

I am still playing around with tempo but I think this is about the right speed, any thoughts there?

I am blushing with all the compliments about my singing here but I did want to tell you that perhaps if we produced a finished version, I would probably want a male vocal since the lyric tends to suggest a male perspective (especially the verse about knives and guns!

My weekend is more than made here and thanks for a great lyric to work with. Reggae is to a large degree 'message music' and you are on the money with that lyric.

Peace & Best Wishes,

Rachel

PS. I thank Billy everyday, can't do all of this without his input.

Hi Again Mz R!

I'll defer to your Better Judgement..since "Singability" makes or breaks Many-a-Song!

Looking forwards to Billy's (or whichever Male's Supplying the) Vocal..you're probably quite correct a Guy oughta sing that kinda-Violent Verse. (But I DO like Your Vocals!!) Let me know what kinda Song you'd like me to write for YOU & I'll give it a try.

Keep up the Good Work, Kind LadyChum!

Happy What's Left of da Weekend!
Big Hugs,
Stan

Hi there again Stan,

I will have to find a male reggae singer....not hard to do in Jamaica....when we come down to a finished version. Billy is many things but not a lead vocalist. My vocals are fine for a trial demo but male vocals is what this song will be best served by.

I'm flattered that you want to write something for me to sing and the truth is that I am probably best suited to Adult Contemporary /Jazz songs....Diana Krall, Norah Jones etc. I am ok with country and am told that I have the voice tone but I don't and will never have the 'down home southern twang'.

Lucky me has a whole 2 more days in my weekend, tomorrow is a Public Holiday here in JA and I have the day off on Tuesday for some weekend work in the past.

Muchas Gracias Senor Stan,

Rachel

I enjoyed the read...Stan..and it will be super neat to hear what Ria's come up with for it!!...

best to you this mornin'/hugs to ya
Kaley

HiDee Mz Beth..sorry I zoomed On By yesterday...but it turned into a bit of an Inferno. I'd been paintin' away, trying to get the Last Cast-Iron Street Light painted before we had to set off to Sarasota. Got it 80% finished (GREAT Warm Paintin' Weather...no Rain is sight!) Zoomed off with 1 hr to get to Sarasota...8o MPH on the Interstate... Got as far as Riverview..engine made noises/heat guage went thru da roof. Pulled it over...about 3 mi. away from Nearest Gas Station...AND I'd forgotten my Cell.

DID get a Hitch after 10 minutes of walkin'...did have enuf to buy 4 Gal's of Water, in plastic bottles..AND call my Chum/Apologize for bein' No-Shows, & then Triple-A.

Counted 150 cars that passed me by On The Way Back, INCLUDIN' a Tampa Police Car...'til finally a Nice Mexican Family picked me up/delivered me to da Car..where Do was waiting. AAA guy showed up...we discovered the AAA Card of the Year WASN'T AAA-Plus, so after 25 Miles it was $4 a Mile. I, of course, glared at La Femme for Her Oversight...(They'd billed us for a card that'd expired/she'd goofed I'd thought.) $72 wortha fun, got a ride back from Closed Jag Repair (Wouldn't re-start,even With Water...busted Hose to the Heater, said AAA Guy.) in our Van that likes to drive with Oil Light Lit..so we gave up on a Sarasota Re-Run early in the late aftynoon, alas. (DID get Street Light painted..at least!)

BUt AAA Guy DID tell me the White Van just needs a Battery Replaced (La Femme kept insisting it had a NEW Battery...but New Battery has One Dead Cell/won't crank it/I thought it could just sit since we got a Very Functional Vermillion Van, too...& Starters run $200+ which we Don't Have at the moment. So..I take Reciept + Dead Battery back today & we at least get back to TWO Vehicles a-runnin'...while I hie off to get the Jag Quote later today.. AFTER I chat with New Accountant & see Why we gotta send IRS $3K+ when we made Same as Last Year & IRS got Zilch. Ah..life stays Exciting Around Here, lemmie tellya!

We once went to Aruba...sand blew in our faces ALL Day Long..15 MPH...'Trade Winds" they never tellya about. So...for about $100, ya take a flight to Caracas, Venezuela, and have a BLAST~!
(Just don't let ANYONE at the Airport take your bags for ya...ya won't SEE 'em again, unless you're good at the 100-yard Dash~)

Hey..Good Luck at seein' That 50th...(We'uns got 13 years to go..Damn, we're OLD!) & EVERY YEAR seems More Fun-Filled, Too!

If the Jag Mechanic says More'n $3K, he can Have It for $2K & we'll pay that bomb off...& stick with the 2 dillapidated Vans...at least Toyotas got an Idiot Light when the buggers run HOT!

Big Monday Hugs...I'm off to exchange Batteries & get Fresh Amberbocks--Definitely a Fun Week Ahead! You Too, sounds like!

Thanks for The Kind Visit & Words,
Big Hugs,
Stan

HI Again, Mz R!

I liked that line you penned, "I Couldn't Do It Without Him"--DEFINITELY a Song In That!!! ("Him" may end up as "You")

Feels Billy Ocean-esque...bear with me while I get a Head Melody & Da Words begin to Flow! (Today's kinda hectic...(To say Da Least)..but I WILL do something with that Fine Hook/Your Name's On It~)

Big Hugs Back to My Island LadyChum,
(& No Rush on "Ripple"..make it a Dandy!)
Stan

Stan,

Once again really flattered that you can find a hook in my reply and want to write a whole lyric based on that line. Very cool and I am looking forward to what you come up with.

Increased the tempo again on RIPPLE and it is now truly danceable and more importantly still SINGABLE. Managed to get most of your words in about 3:30mins which is about right for a reggae song.

Cheers,

Rachel