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...for nuts like me
Tree Acrobats © joice marie 2007

Hurry, hurry, hurry...
Ladies and gentlemen.....(spoken)

circus music intro.... maybe I will try this in 3/4

Toying with danger as they scale great heights
One, two, three, four......five, six.....
Frolicking vertical with quick tail flicks
Then racing toward skylines and birds in flight...

Branch to branch, roll and sway...
In their dangerous dance
Tree Acrobats...
Breathtaking, to look at
A crazy performance
They prance and play...
Tall timbers don't hinder
The Tree Acrobats....

Few cares in the world, limb to limb they strut
Jumping through air... all grace and ease...
It's a chase to the end, fur catching the breeze
Dangling they reach out for one ripe nut....

Branch to branch, roll and sway...
In their dangerous dance
Tree Acrobats...
Breathtaking, to look at
A crazy performance
They prance and play...
Tall timbers don't hinder
The Tree Acrobats....

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red, gray or brown just having fun
nesting with beechnuts or basking in sun
then fearlessly gripping a twig as they plunge

Branch to branch, roll and sway...
In their dangerous dance
Tree Acrobats...
Breathtaking, to look at
A crazy performance
They prance and play...
Tall timbers don't hinder
The Tree Acrobats...

circus music.....
tag
Ladies and gentlemen
Save you seat for the closing act
And hold your breath as you watch
Those Amazing Tree Acrobats

Hi jm,

Ok, I'll be the 1st nut.
Funny write.

gotta love this part...
It's a chase to the end, fur catching the breeze
Dangling they reach out for one ripe nut.

Thanks for the chuckle.

Calvin

http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Hey Joice!

This is such a fun read. Brought a huge smile to my face!

Charlann

Very well put together. Not sure it commercial, but hey, it's darn fun. Maybe sell it to a travelling squirrel circus?

I guess with nuts it has to be Squirrels, but all the while I was thinking Gibbons...fun write, can feel the jumping with first and forth line rhymes, amazingly I used that approach earlier today...like nuts, screw around the same....lol

Hi Joice,

This is cute, cute, cute!! I kept thinking monkeys, though...

I like that line:

Tall timbers don't hinder

Lisa

Hi Joice,

I like this. Well done. Okay it's not commercial in the pop sense but it gets high points for different subject matter, well rhymed and lyrically descriptive of our furry friends. Perhaps a kid's tune. I love the idea for the circus music in the intro and outro (perfect idea) I for one enjoy looking out into my backyard and watch them do exactly what you describe and I think of them as acrobatic and graceful. They almost fly!!! I also like how you never mention the word "squirrel" at all and you don't have to. This would be great w/a complimentary video. I can really see it. Clever lyric!!

Best,
Lynn
Loved "tall timbers don't hinder" line!

Hi Calvin

Thanks for the visit. You know this may have sat dormant in my mind much longer if you hadn't posted "It's a Nutty Kind of Love". Now that I wrote it there's some evidence of music in my head now too...funny how the goofy stuff can manage to take priority.....I'm glad you had a laugh! jm

HI Charlann

Thanks for stopping in and commenting. I'm glad you can smile with me about this. jm

Hi Joice,

That's really neat what Rittman noticed about the first and fourth line rhymes giving the feel of swinging from limb to limb. I wouldn't have noticed otherwise. Really great fun writing there. Have you ever seen one of those 'flying' squirrles? My brother found one that had been abandoned somehow from the nest as a baby when he was about ten. He kept it in a cage for a while. Not sure what ended up happening to the the critter. Seems he gave it to a local naturalist of sorts. Anyway, the baby squirrel had that skin stretched between his limbs that helps his kind to glide from tree to tree. Fascinating creatures they are.

Vanessa

Could make it as a kid's song.

Hey Joice Marie -
I will say it too,,, FUN!
Initially was ready for a monkey lyric ... SQUIRRELS?
I am with Shane .. I think you could easily turn this into a children's song.
All the best
Joanne

Hi Wolvman

Thanks for checking out the fun...yeah, it just had to be written at some point.....maybe it'll work for a puppet theater piece. jm

Hi rittman

thank you for stopping by...it could have been gibbons...are they just black white and gray?....I think I've already called you a nut you know in another post lol jm

Hi Lisa
Thanks for the cute vote. Also thanks for commenting on hinder...I wasn't so sure about it. I glad you stopped by to read! jm

Hi Lynn

Thanks so much for the vote of clever and your approval of the rhymes and all. I appreciate your time....Yeah, it's the lazy mornings i watch out the window from my bed and enjoy their games....I was tempted to add the word squirrel in the bridge, but thought the same as you. I didn't need to. So I'm glad you wrote that comment.

Have a nice day! jm

Hi Vanessa

Thanks for your visit and comments. Yes, I have seen flying squirrels believe it or not in my house! Little devils were interested in a straw broom I had near the chimney. They're noctural. So one night I was sitting in my living room hearing this rustling noise, but every time I'd go to look it would stop. Finally I got a glimsp of the cute little guy and ended up capturing him with some big gloves....he had a strong black line along each side where the skin stretched between his legs. Very interesting. I let him go and removed the broom. I think he wanted the straw for his nest. Thanks for sharing your story with me. jm

HI Shayne

thanks for reading and I think you are right, it would have an appeal to kids. jm

Hi Joanne, glad you enjoyed this too! I appreciate you stopping by. jm

Hi JM

This was a fun read. Very descriptive.
I was thinking monkeys too but the antics didn't quite fit
Then I got to this line
fearlessly gripping a twig as they plunge
and thought vine would be better.
That's when I realized it was squirrels.

Good one.
I think it would work well on a children's CD.

Hi Bill

Thanks for checking this one out. Glad you like it. jm