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Howdy all,

Thought I'd get back into things after the holidays with a new song. Hope everybody is well. It's funny how the weeks pass. I've been back from Nashville for nearly a month, but with the holidays it sure doesn't seem like it. I'm ready to go back though. What a great experience... Geez, where have I been all my life. For a songwriter, Nashville is certainly THE place to be. I fell in love with the place.

Anyway, enough about that. Here is the song. Hope you like it.

Audio link is in the title.


If Every Second Was Ours
©2003 Vaughn Daniels/Brock Goodwin/Curtis Cameron

Verse 1:
These miles I put between us
Get longer every day
And the time we spend apart
Costs more than this job pays

Build:
Something’s got to give
Lord knows we give enough
While precious moments pass with each white line
We’re losin’ time

Chorus:
IF EVERY SECOND WAS OURS
You’d be here in my arms
If I only had the power
We’d never be apart

Wouldn’t life be so much better
If we could stop and count the hours
If a day lasted forever
AND EVERY SECOND WAS OURS

Verse 2:
I’d never have to call you
From a thousand miles away
You wouldn’t have to act as if
Everything’s okay

Build:
Something’s got to give
This clock is tickin’ in my heart
As weeks, and months, and years keep flyin’ by
We’re losin’ time

Chorus:
IF EVERY SECOND WAS OURS
You’d be here in my arms
If I only had the power
We’d never be apart

Wouldn’t life be so much better
If we could stop and count the hours
If a day lasted forever
IF EVERY SECOND WAS OURS

Bridge:
I can see it now, the road is clear
I know the change is near
I’m gonna close this space between us
Make these miles disappear

Chorus:
‘TIL EVERY SECOND IS OURS
And I can hold you in my arms
Girl we’ll have the power
We’ll never spend a day apart

Won’t life be so much better
When we can stop and count the hours
Our love will last forever
AND EVERY SECOND WILL BE OURS


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Curtis,

This is a very good song. I like the vocal, I like the sound. There are some very good things in the lyric, but IMHO, I'm not sure the lyric as a whole rises to the level of a great song, assuming you're competing with songs to get cut. I hope I'm wrong, and I wish you the very best of luck with it.

Bill

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We too often throw around the word "great" like it was a frisbee, instead of the manhole cover it should be.

Hi Bill,

Thanks for looking at this. I actually agree with you and I said as much to Brock before he recorded this!

I think it's well written, but not necessarily ground breaking. Having said that... After multiple listens, it's really grown on me and I enjoy listening to it quite a bit.

Thanks for the look and the honest opinion.

Curtis

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Curtis and co.

very nice romantic song; but to the side, not at all realistic, too much time together is a terrible thing lol, but hey this is show biz, where fantazy rules.

nice and romantic. only one confusing thing;

While precious moments pass with each white line

what does the white line represent?

I think this is a song about someone who works on the road and is gone from home alot.

losing time= little behind schedule for a road job and being away from home and losing time to spend together

hence the phone calls from a thousand miles away.

further apart with each "White Line" on the highway

please correct me if I am wrong
thanks Willie

Hey Curtis,

I read some of your other lyrics. IMO, you're a pro level writer. Best of luck to you.

Bill

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We too often throw around the word "great" like it was a frisbee, instead of the manhole cover it should be.

Hi Curtis,

The words are nice but it's probably the melody that makes the song special, and I can't get audio on Songramp for some reason. Wish someone could enlighten me!

Many times I hear songs on the radio and hate them! Then, after many listens, they grow on me. However, as a rule I think publishers/producers/artists have to LOVE a song on first listen before they'll consider it. So if the writer doesn't LOVE his song on first listen, could be a problem. Maybe you'll get lucky! Hope so.

I like the simplicity of your lyrics on this one...Curtis...

the melody works well....

vocals are wonderful as usual..

nice one...Vaughn, Brock and Curtis

best wishes,
Kaley

Hi Curtis,

Really like this lyric...sweet and simple. But I am one of those for whom SongRamp isn't compatible with my computer for some reason so your autolink did not work. I tried Brock's SoundClick site and this one isn't there. Can you offer an actual URL to where I can have a listen? I really would love to hear this...you know I am a fan of you and Brock both. Hope we see you back this way soon!

Bobbie

Hi Guys,
Very nice. But I expected that
When I saw the lyrics I thought it was a little simple but the melody and Brock's sweet voice really makes up for it. I also think the hook is clever. Songs dont always have to have intricate lyrics to be touching.
take care
Ria

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Hey Quality,

Thanks for the look. Willie has it right. The white lines refer to the white lines on the road.

Thanks to both of you for taking the time to comment on this!

Curtis


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Huh!!?? What do you mean? You mean you don't like to be smothered by the person you love?

lol, seriously, I know what you mean, but I think most people would like to have more time to themselves... "to themselves" probably being the key word. You're probably right, but what the heck, isn't romance fantasy after all?

Thanks for the look and the comments.

Curtis

Bill,

I appreciate the time you spent looking at my other work and really appreciate your comments. My goal is to write at the pro level, and although I'm not sure I'm there yet, I'm sure trying to get there. Your assessment and encouragement is MUCH appreciated. Thanks a lot.

Curtis


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Hey Songbird,

Thanks for the comments on this. I think it is the melody on this. I might be able to help you with your audio.

What is your default media player right now, and what happens when you click on an audio link to Songramp?

Curtis

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Hi Kaley!

Thanks for stopping by on this. Yup, simple lyrics, simple melody, this one sticks with me for some reason. Thanks for the comments.

Hope all is well with you and yours!

Curtis

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Good one, Curtis. It took me a little ways into the song to really get into it, but it had me before the end.

Has it already been a month since you were in Nashville? Time does fly, but it was good to meet you when you were here. You've got my permission to come back whenever you like.

Randy

H Bobby,

No audio on Songramp! You don't know what your missing. There's a lot of great songs there and some great writers. I made an offer to help Songbird with her audio. Maybe the same will work for you. Let me know if you need any help, I MIGHT be able to help.

Thanks for the look at this. I'm planning to come back in February. I was going to come in January, but decided to go to the BEAMS seminar. Should be a lot of fun.

Thanks Bobbie!

Curtis

Ooops. Sorry, double post.

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Hi Ria!

Thanks for the look at this. You're right about the lyric on this. For some reason it didn't come out like some of my other stuff. It's sorta nice to do something different though. And like you said, Brock's voice makes up the difference. Thanks for listening. Hope all is well with you.

Curtis

Randy,

Yeah, a month already. Can you believe it? I do plan to come back though. Hopefully in February. I appreciate the okay on that .

This song was slow to suck you in huh? Dang! Have to work on that. Glad it got you in the end though.

I'll give you a call next time I'm in town.

Thanks Randy,

Curtis

Hi, Curtis. I started the audio and then read along with the lyrics. Just now getting into networking on the board myself, but I think the song definately has something going for it. It wouldn't suprise me to find it moving up the charts if it was being played. (Don't ask me how I know that, sometimes I just feel it about a song I like and it usually happens.) I've always been a sucker for mellow songs and this one plays well on my mind...great job.

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Hi. This is a women's song. I like it and I'd be proud as punch to post something like this. You'll be ok with this one, I'm thinking, since women buy most of the cd's anyway.

Hey Steve,

Thanks for your comments on this. Wouldn't that be great if this got cut and worked it's way up the charts? One can always dream!

Thanks for your comments and welcome to JPF. I'm sort of hit and miss here myself. I've really had to curtail the amount of time I spend on boards like these, otherwise it becomes a full time job. It's a great place to hang out though. Lots of great people here.

Thanks Steve!

Curtis

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Hi Curtis,

I would so much appreciate it if you could help me get SongRamp! To answer your questions, I had to click your link again. This is what happened: CompuServe warning "Current playlist has no valid files in it." My player is CS Media Player.

Curiously, sometimes I CAN get audio on SongRamp. But certain sites I can't get.

I hope you can figure it out! Thanks for offering.

Curtis,

I was just listening to this again. Man, this is good. I liked it the first time, but turned it up and had a better listen this time around.

I did figure out why I was a little slow getting into it the other time, though. I think it's the pauses between lines in that first verse. They seem a tad long, so it kinda breaks the train of thought in middle of a phrase. That's probably nitpicky, but food for thought...maybe. Once the chorus comes along, though, it grabs me enough that I don't really notice or mind the pauses in the second verse.

At any rate, this is great writing...better than I realized the first time around.

Randy

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Dang double post again!

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Hi Songbird,

I was going to e-mail you, but couldn't find your e-mail.

Do you know if you have Windows Media Player installed on your computer? Or Real Audio?

Let me know which and we'll see if we can re-set your preferences and set one of these as your default media player to play mp3's.

It oucl dbe something that simple... maybe.

Curtis

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Hi Trica,

Glad you like this. I know what you mean, and it's nice to hear a woman's POV about that. Thanks for the "inside insight"!

Curtis



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Guys,
I have to tell you, this song has been going through my mind ALL DAY!! I think you have a hit.
Ria

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Thoroughly enjoyed this song!

Very nice vocal too.

I had to hear the ending of the build a few times before it stuck, but now I like that too.

Thank you for sharing it!

Vash


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Hi Curtis,

Nice song! I like the chorus', "every second" analogy, but of course the two "ours" sounds only look different in print.

Songramp listen . . . no problem.

Just wanted to point out to Bobbie that
Songramp should work seamlessly on her Mac if she is using Quicktime 6.0.3,
and has Quicktime Plugin 6.0.2 in her Internet Explorer "Plugins" folder.

Theres a "Quicktime Updater" in her Quicktime folder that will take her onto the web for the appropriate download.
Quicktime application is in her Applications (OS 9) folder.

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Howdy all,

I just wanted to say thanks for al the positive comments on this.

Randy and Ria,

Thanks for the second look at this and for taking the time to come back and let us know that it's working. It helps a lot to get that sort of feedback.

Vash,

thanks for looking at this. I had the same feeling about that minor chord at the end of the build, but it's grown on me and I like it now.

Terry,

Thanks for the listen. I know what you mean about the hours/ours rhyme, but I think Brock does a good job with the pronunciation, singing "ours" as "ares". I think it helps.

I agree with you about Bobbie's audio problem. I think she's running Winamp right now, and if she were to choose Quicktime, or possibly even Real Audio as her primary media player the files should stream no problem (theoretically).

The same for Songbird, although on Windows, I personally prefer Window Media Player to Real Audio because for me it's simpler to organize the music files using Windows Media Player.

Thanks so much for the comments folks. They are much appreciated.

Curtis


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