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The gist is that you are drawing attention to the shortcomings of how I write.

While on the subject of writing, could you re-phrase whatever is stated here into something comprehensible?

Gotta go. Will check back tomorrow...maybe.

[VERSE 1]
When we parted ways, that was long overdue.
All we did was argue, there was no me and you.
Years went by ,I found new love and moved on with my life.
I quickly forgot you, and all the endless strife

So first of all, this is so dull and unpoetic, and not a single good line in it.

All your trying to do with it is get to yourr chorus.

Songs ate like women they need foreplay.

Its not a bad opening line, because it gets right to it, you know what happened.

But its just so far and away from good writing.

Hope that helps

The verse wasn't an attempt to win a Nobel Prize.
It described a situation and a state of mind...reasonably well.

Your critique style is...


Your sister is ugly.
She could be pretty.
But she's ugly.


That's empty and goes nowhere.
It just serves the purpose of delivering a diminishing insult.

You put a song up and I gave it a genuine critique.
You are thin skinned, and these empty insults are your reflexive coping mechanism.

Don't expect an adult to take it seriously.

Gotta go

But dont you think to give a harsh, genuine critique, you should be better at writing thsn this, piece?

I mean how do you know,what's good if you haven't written good?

I don't think that's the real issue here.

I don't claim to be a great writer. I claim to enjoy writing. However good I am is however good I am.

I think that if you were actually better at writing,

all these insults would not be going on. Neither would all the self-proclaimed greatness of your own songs be going on.

People would compliment your writing often enough that you would be satisfied with that.

But they don't, and you cope with it by tossing out empty insults.

And you think the quality of the song in any way matters who responds here?

Ive posted excerpts from some if the greatest songs ever written, and gotten no response here.

Nobody is here.

If the few active members could come together for a common cause, it might be something.

But im already considered the bad guy here, all ive ever done was talk music here.

Lack of response has nothing to do with the quality, and you know it

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You should create a fake person like this guy