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She came from New York On a train Threw away her dope Suddenly there's hope She thumbed a ride on 21 I thought alright Ain't got nothin but time Tonight
We traded stories for a while But this one had me beat She grew up on the streets I said "let's stop and get a drink" Shook her head I appreciate that man, But no way I sure appreciate that Man, no way
I'm lookin for an Antibody, Antibody To help me fight a soul disease I'm lookin for ya Anybody, Anybody Don't wanna lose control of me And I'm so sick waitin on the fading dark Tonight I'm seekin someone who'll provide The Human Spark
"There ain't no poison worth it's weight" She whispered in my ear "hope you're stayin clear" It took me 15 years to learn Learned it all today So, mister whaddiya say? So, mister whaddiya say?
I'm lookin for an Antibody, Antibody To help me fight a soul disease I'm lookin for ya Anybody, Anybody Don't wanna lose control of me And I'm so sick waitin on the fading dark Tonight I'm seekin someone who'll provide The Human Spark
I'm lookin for an Antibody, Antibody To help me fight a soul disease I'm lookin for ya Anybody, Anybody Don't wanna lose control of me And I'm so sick waitin on the fading dark Tonight I'm seekin someone who'll provide The Human Spark
I like the beat and the musical melody. The voice sounds like a not-disguised Springsteen. The rasp is there and inflections are there. The knock-off sounds unmistakable to me. Overall, sounds ok.
Springsteen's early stuff that launched him was dynamic, energetic and unique. And his lyrics were earthy stories of relatable lives. As time went on, it seemed like he was mostly charting songs with star power. I doubt that songs like "I'm on Fire" would have gotten noticed, if done by a lesser known or unknown artist. That's where I see this song. It's okay, but nothing that really catches a person's attention. It starts off about a female riding a NE train, getting off and thumbing a ride. A female thumbing rides in today's urban environments would be a death wish in action.
Thematically, it seems like a less clear and descriptive incarnation of "Bring Me To Life." Amy Lee put that song in the first person, rather than the 3rd, and with her massive vocal, put the listener inside her head.
QUESTION: What listener would be interested in this story? Why would they be interested?
And who wants to hear a song like lou reeds wild side, talking about transgenders
Who wants to hear a song like Brown sugar talking about slavery.
Who wants to hear ANY song.
Love songs bore the shite out of most usually hokey and contrived
Pointing at other songs, that for one reason or another became well known...does not de-legitimize the question, and it answers nothing. I don't know why Lou Reed caught on. Brown Sugar was the sound and vibe of the song and the Stones star power. Paul McCartney would clearly disagree with you about love songs.
Whatever the reasons were that made people like those songs are not the reasons that people would like your song.
The question specifically regarding your song is legit...why specifically, would a listener want to listen to your song?
Desperate characters?
What makes this desperate character interesting? And interesting to who?
I liked Born to Run, a lot. It put him on the map. It was dynamic, powerful with relatable lyrics.
Springsteen and McCartney have star power. Some of McCarty's solo stuff bored me. After Springsteen's first couple of albums, I lost interest.
This thread is not about Springsteen's song. It's about your song.
Imagine this scenario, You are a staff writer for a significant label or publisher. The top guy stops by your desk to see what you have going on. You start in about Springsteen and Lou Reed. He interrupts you and says...
"There is a big nut to crack here, every month and every year. If I don't make rent, payroll and expenses...all of this ends. Everything needs to work in order to get that nut cracked. I don't rep Springsteen or McCartney. I rep you and what you write.
Who would this song appeal to and why would they stream it, download it and go to a concert to hear it? And want a tee-shirt with the title written across it?
I liked Born to Run, a lot. It put him on the map. It was dynamic, powerful with relatable lyrics.
Springsteen and McCartney have star power. Some of McCarty's solo stuff bored me. After Springsteen's first couple of albums, I lost interest.
This thread is not about Springsteen's song. It's about your song.
Imagine this scenario, You are a staff writer for a significant label or publisher. The top guy stops by your desk to see what you have going on. You start in about Springsteen and Lou Reed. He interrupts you and says...
"There is a big nut to crack here, every month and every year. If I don't make rent, payroll and expenses...all of this ends. Everything needs to work in order to get that nut cracked. I don't rep Springsteen or McCartney. I rep you and what you write.
Who would this song appeal to and why would they stream it, download and go to a concert to hear it?
Go see the biopic he's the only one who wanted to release it. Widely regarded as a cult classic or low fidelity masterpiece
You don't equate to Springsteen or Billy Joel except in your own mind. I asked a question. I am not looking for fanboy info on Springsteen. The question is legit. Read this and answer it, if you have an answer.
I liked Born to Run, a lot. It put him on the map. It was dynamic, powerful with relatable lyrics.
Springsteen and McCartney have star power. Some of McCarty's solo stuff bored me. After Springsteen's first couple of albums, I lost interest.
This thread is not about Springsteen's song. It's about your song.
Imagine this scenario, You are a staff writer for a significant label or publisher. The top guy stops by your desk to see what you have going on. You start in about Springsteen and Lou Reed. He interrupts you and says...
"There is a big nut to crack here, every month and every year. If I don't make rent, payroll and expenses...all of this ends. Everything needs to work in order to get that nut cracked. I don't rep Springsteen or McCartney and I wish that I did. I rep you and what you write.
Who would this song appeal to and why would they stream it, download it and go to a concert to hear it? And want a tee-shirt with the title written across it?
You have not written hundred of dark songs that you want to equate this to. You have written a specific song with specific elements.
I am asking you to explain why a listener would be specifically interested in exactly what is here.
And if a big time publisher asked you that very question and you answered diffusely with references to stars that you are not and songs that you did not write, he'd prolly be deciding that you weren't going to work out.
Can you answer the question about the elements, characters, context cited in your song?
I don't know how much appeal that it has, but if I was writing it and needed to justify it to someone.
It's a bit outrageous. The beat and other musical elements come at a listener hard in an attempt to grab their attention. It's conforms strictly to a genre that is known to sell. "Say whut" is a well known phrase and is designed to be a mnemonic device that I hope stays in people's heads for a while.
You have not written hundred of dark songs that you want to equate this to. You have written a specific song with specific elements.
I am asking you to explain why a listener would be specifically interested in exactly what is here.
And if a big time publisher asked you that very question and you answered diffusely with references to stars that you are not and songs that you did not write, he'd prolly be deciding that you weren't going to work out.
Can you answer the question about the elements, characters, context cited in your song?
The appeal is in the humanity and in the frailty. People don't know what songs will be about until they hear it.
Songs are three minute movies. The hope is they connect. Feel empathy for the woman and how in God's name does somebody get to that point.
She has a natural metanoia finally quits drugs on her own realizing that drugs are not the answer, people are.
She's looking for somebody to fill the void as unorthodoxed as she may be
Great answers.
Movies are based on feeling for the characters in it
We traded stories for a while But this one had me beat She grew up on the streets I said "let's stop and get a drink" Shook her head I appreciate that man, But no way I sure appreciate that Man, no way
Interject some sad irony...
Said she paid the coyote But the snakes wanted more The streets have no memory Of what she's working for I said let's have a drink She said no way I appreciate that man, But no way
We traded stories for a while But this one had me beat She grew up on the streets I said "let's stop and get a drink" Shook her head I appreciate that man, But no way I sure appreciate that Man, no way
Interject some sad irony...
Said she paid the coyote But the snakes wanted more The streets have no memory Of what she's working for I said let's have a drink She said no way I appreciate that man, But no way
Not bad, but I already let you cut up one of my songs already lol.
The artist ? Well go to a studio and sing one to an acoustic guitar , its almost like recording studios are a dirty word with AI in the picture. See how it turns out.
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