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Last Song

I'm writing you my last song,before my mind moves along
It's true what the doctors say,though know my heart's still strong
No matter who i'll be tomorrow,please see me as i was
Cause somewhere inside this hollow shell,is still for you my love

The years we spent together,was the life i've always dreampt
And the words in our wedding vows,we honor what they meant
I only wish it wouldn't end,in a world i don't want to go
But as a lover and a friend,my love for you still grows

For some we age with finesse and grace
That's why they're golden years
But for others like us each passing day
Is rusting from our tears

I'm writing from my thoughts,and the words are easy to find
But there will be tomorrows,i'll only draw blanks from my mind
And when you put your hand in mine,i hope that i know why
But i don't know if i'll wonder,why i smile as you cry

I'd just like to thank you now,for the love you always gave
I always bragged you were my saint,your heart's so strong and brave
I hate to put you in this place,it's not how a love should end
But when you look into my empty eyes,i'll see your love shine in

For some we age with finesse and grace
That's why they're golden years
But for others like us each passing day
Is rusting from our tears

Mike, a touching song about the cruelest final fight. We all know the ending. You've captured the heartbreak of facing and preparing for the battle.

You have managed to convey this well Mojo.Nice sentiments and ideals
Travis

i appreciate your time and comments Dan.Going out like this just isn't fair.Mike

Wow Mike, very emotional and strong. That disease afflicts so many. It's such a cruel end.

Great write. Really, great.

Dave

thanx for that Travis.Mike

thanx for the read Dave,yes i'm sure it's very heartbreaking for a family.I don't know anyone who has/had it but something similiar happen to my dad at the end of his cancer battle but a lot of it was the meds that made him forgetful and talking a bit out of his mind. Mike

Hi Mike,

I can probably relate to this as much or more than most folks. My mother died from Alzheimer disease. She was first diagnosed when she'd forget little things, like turning the water off after washing dishes. It was several little things like that. The day after she was diagnosed, the family got together and was told. We were all very scared not knowing what was to come. In the next 6 years I watched my mother mentally fade away. It was only 2 years after she was diagnosed, that at times she couldn't remember who I was. I can't tell you the pain. A year later she never knew who anyone was, or who she was. When or if she looked your way it was if no one was there at all. I mean nothing at all. There's no way I can describe it. The ups and downs were gone. My mother was truly gone.

She lived a couple of years like this, needing to be taken care of like a newborn. She passed one night, and the doctor said her brain was at a point of not being able to sustain life. He explained it best by saying her brain could not ever tell her body to breathe. I posted my lyric (Life's Now Passing Her By) about a month ago I guess. A lot different than yours, though about the same thing none the less. Enough about my story.

Your lyric is great. It feels heartfelt like you have been there. Since you haven't you say, it makes this all the more impressive. Excellent write my friend!

David

hey David,i'm sorry to hear about your mom and what you guys had to go through.i wasn't sure if i wrote this right or not being the closest i came was what i said about my dad.i just thought this is what i would do if i knew this was going to happen to me.I would want to tell them things before it was too late.Anyway,thanx for sharing your story and your kind words.Mike

Hi Michael,
This is beautifully touching!
Lisa

thanx for your time and comments Lisa!Mike

No matter how wonderful things were and how much love you had, your life still ends. Makes it all seem futile, doesn't it?

well you may as well be stillborn Jim if you look at life that way.I'd like to think you make the best of it while you're alive.who knows,death could be better.Mike

Howdy Mike, sweet sentiments expressed with care. I have had a small taste of this from seizures caused by scar tissue, resulting from a stroke 5 years ago which manifested itself as retrograde amnesia..With the right meds, I'm good 2 go now.....Gus

i appreciate your time Gus!Sorry to hear about your health issues but glad you're okay now.Well of course two weeks after i posted this one i seen where Glenn Cambell released his song on this matter titled"I Won't Miss You",a touching performance.Mike

Howdy Mike, reading thru all the comments above, I notice there isn't even one suggestion....that's the sign of a good song! I'm only seeing one place where it is slightly vague and could maybe made clearer. V1 L4 consider replacing "somewhere" with "the heart"
.......KOS...........Gus

thanx for the sug Gus!I've been taking my time on this one,i keep looking at it just to make sure it's good to go before i set some music to it.Being it's a serious subject matter.Thank ya.Mike

Heartfelt write about a difficult subject...love these lines-
"No matter who i'll be tomorrow,please see me as i was
Cause somewhere inside this hollow shell,is still for you my love"

Nicely done!

thanx for your time and thoughts Jen.Mike