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IRAN
by Fdemetrio - 04/15/26 12:27 PM
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PETE
by Fdemetrio - 04/14/26 06:57 AM
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Mike Leblanc has great imagination and ideas for songs. He sent me this idea a few days ago. There is an hibiscus flower of this name which changes colour through the day from white to red and then dies. Legend says it soaked up the blood of dying soldiers during the US civil war. The original lyric has changed drastically but Mike's original idea is still there. Another one for the history theme CD. I'd love to hear a fiddle on it (sigh). NOW ADDED. Thanks to Floyd Jane. SEE LINKWould be nice to hear what you all think? Vic Listen here: hi fi Soundcloud http://snd.sc/17ZHZDPhi fi WITH FIDDLE http://snd.sc/1c5lTUZlo fi Soundclick http://sclk.co/s7hordConfederate Rose V1 In a corner of this battlefield a pretty flower shines My eyes are drawn from shot and shell that pounds our staggering lines I see the rifle aimed at me between the blossoms fair We fire together him and I and close our eyes in prayer V2 The battle rages through the day. We cause the foe to run. We catch our breath and walk around to see what we have done. I come across the hedge of flowers splashed with crimson stain The young boys eyes are closed. He'll never open them again. Ch. Confederate rose changes her clothes and turns from white to red. She soaks up the blood that runs like a flood Through this valley of the dead Inst. as verse 2 lines V3 The autumn comes around again and to this valley, I Now gold and yellow leaves have covered where that young man died I place a white bloom on his grave and pay the tribute due to my brother who was dressed in grey when I was dressed in blue Br. Mama died of broken heart but forgave me I suppose. And Daddy still tends the garden and that old confederate rose. Ch. Confederate rose changes her clothes and turns from white to red. She soaks up the blood that runs like a flood Through this valley of the dead Tag She forgives me I suppose, and you confederate rose. Copyright 2013 Vic Arnold & Michael Leblanc
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hey Vic,i couldn't be more proud of this song!You put some strong images in it and what a nice sad one.I must go plant me another confederate rose in the yard now.Thanx for working this one out!Mike
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GREAT lyric! Really enjoyed it!
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Hey Mike.
I'm really pleased you're happy with it. I am working on a the fiddle track now.
Vic
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Indeed i am!A fiddle sounds nice Vic.Mike
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Vic/Mike,
Beautiful music and co-write, really tugs on one's heartstrings. These lyrics kept me rivoted with this tragic story.
I wouldn't mind hearing a little "pause & go" to better launch the Bridge--without following the lyrics it may not stand out as it should--I like it's melody and lyric substance with the Bridge--just needs a slight little "power injection."
One other alternative small lyric sug that may or may not be any better--at the last line in verse 3, I was thinking that saying that line as so: "to my brother who was dressed in grey, AND I, was dressed in blue." In my mind, "AND" emphasizes the "connection" between the two soldiers more strongly. Either will work--an idea to "use or lose."
I truly enjoyed this one guys!
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Hi Vic and Mike,
What an awesome job of storytelling in and of itself, not to mention how great it sounds put to song! It gave me the chills...wonderful!
Lisa
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Hi Fred.
Thanks for the nice comment.
Vic
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Some great storytelling here guys. One to certainly be proud of.
Stevie
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Great stuff guys. Regards, Bob The Confederate Rose ![[Linked Image]](http://i40.photobucket.com/albums/e222/DunnellonOnline/Rebel-Rose.jpg)
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Thanks Eddie.
I'm still tinkering with it.
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I love this series of songs you guys are doing. Great job, again.
Bill
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Agreed.....throw in that fiddle (or mouth harp)....well done, well written...and the vocals provide a sense of historical provenance that is perfect for this song.
Well done, you two!!
Write on, Man,
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Mahatma Gandhi
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Lisa. Thank you so much. I'll throw another log on the fire.
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Mike, the fiddle's there now.
Thanks to Floyd.
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Superb. no other words needed
me and Helen love it and its so moving
God Bless Roy and Helen
'You Have To Kiss A Lot Of Frogs To Find A Prince'
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Yup...! The fiddle fits perfectly!
Well done!
Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"
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Hey Fred,we really appreciate you taking this for a spin!Yeah Vic went above and beyond on these lyrics i think.Thanx,Mike
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thank ya Eddie!Appreciate your time and thoughts as always!Mike
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Thanx Lisa,Vic has a way with words that give a chill.Mike
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Thanx a bunch Lil' Stevie!Mike
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Hey Bob,thanx for the photo,i have two of the bushes about ten feet tall and just now are losing the blooms in the front yard.
Thanx for letting the others see it who may not know what they look like.And we thank you for the listen and kind comment!Mike
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Thanx a lot Bill,it's a blast for me,i'm grateful to Vic for letting me climb on board.Mike
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Hey Riff,so glad you liked this one.Yeah that fiddle works just fine.Mike
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Thanx Roy and Helen!We're happy you took a listen and thanx for the nice comment!Mike
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Where y'at Floyd??? Cool job with the fiddle!i think it gives a nice feel to this song.Mike
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Outstanding musical piece. I had never heard that story. Thanks guys. Dave 
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Geez, man! I've been busy! You guys both did a great job on this. A terrific story song with a good "singing" chorus (a lot of story songs lack that). The prefect vocal to carry the story, too. Enjoyable, start to finish. floyd
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Thanks Stevie. I love a good story.
Vic
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Hi there Bob. Yeah, that's her.
Thanks for showing.
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we appreciate stoppin' by Dave!Mike
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mornin' Calvin,thanx man!Mike
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Hi Bill.
Yes, a couple more and we'll have a theme CD.
Thanks for the thumbs up.
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Done, Blues.
Thanks for joining in.
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I love the lyrics, but i think the music is kind of sing songy for a serious subject. Sounds more like a love song to somebody named confederate rose, not a homage.
All about prosody, but you guys could make a good writing team.
Keep at it!
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Hi Roy. Glad you two liked it.
Thanks for the comment.
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Dave.
That'll do nicely.
We're happy it worked for you.
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Hi Floyd,
Thanks for that, and the fiddling. Smooths it out nicely.
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Calvin, that's nice of you to say.
Glad you liked it.
Thanks,
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Thanks for listening, Bugsey.
Seems like we have different views on prosody.
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thanx for taking this for a spin Bugsey!I appreciate your time and thoughts.Mike
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Hey Vic and Michael,
Yeah, it's all working for a work tape. Especially like the non judgemental theme about war itself, and the focus upon healing.
Technically ? it's all fine production/EQ wise, but needs musical phrasing, especially with the drum phrasing. Builds, lifts and die backs would help it in it's delivery. Likewise for the vocal line as well. It's all sounding a bit "flat" in the delivery. Easy fixed.
With some thought to arrangement and vocal presence, it will come up well. An enjoyable listen from me.
cheers, niteshift
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Vic and Michael,
These war songs are wonderful, you have tapped into a special market and I am loving them, great stuff!!
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Thanks for tuning in Niteshift.
Yes, drum loops do need a bit more work. I'll take another look at the vocal although I don't want too many dynamics in the arrangement.
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Tammy.
Thank you for listening and glad you liked it.
Never thought of them as war songs, though. More of a reflection on times of great sacrifice, sorrow and hardship.
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Thanx for your time and kind words Niteshift!Mike
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Hi guys, this is really gorgeous. I agree with Ed that the bridge could stand out more...to really polish it up and make it more poignant.
Kimberly
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