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by Gary E. Andrews - 06/21/26 10:51 PM
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Hard-Fi
by Gary E. Andrews - 06/19/26 06:43 PM
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Karen Maquilan posted a wonderful song here a few days ago that brought back memories of three songs I've written. This one was with Jeff Hinton, a Utah singer/songwriter, and the first quality composer I got to work with in 2002. Jeff is singing this one. http://www.soundclick.com/player/single_player.cfm?songid=6183152&q=hi&newref=1GOODBYE (verse) You marked it on your calendar in April By August, you'd have thought I'd be prepared But when I saw that taxi through our office window "Goodbye" was just too much for me to bear (chorus) I wish I would have said I'm happy for you But I couldn't even bring myself to try My heart was feelin' awful weak My lips were too afraid to speak And my eyes couldn't let you see them cry Please forgive me, but I could not say goodbye (verse) I know you've got a brand new job there waitin' An apartment with a great Pacific view And we should watch for postcards in the mailroom Maybe somethin' from the San Diego Zoo (repeat chorus) (bridge) I never said I loved you I couldn't find a way You thought you were just a friend Leaving me today (repeat chorus) Bill Osofsky and Jeff Hinton copyright 2003
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Hi Bill,
It's beautiful! It's definitely reminiscent to the song I wrote...bravo!
Karen
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Hi Bill,
It's beautiful! It's definitely reminiscent to the song I wrote...bravo!
Karen Thanks, Karen  Bill
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Very nice, Bill. Thanks for the listen.
Regards,
Bob
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Hey Bill,
What a sweet song man! This one flows like butter, nice performance/production/arrangement/lyrics! This is a "perfect" example of how a Bridge should digress musically and lyrically make a dramatic statement.
Jeff's vocals remind me a little of John Denver when John sang serious. Well done!
steady-eddie.
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Hi Bill,
This is SO sad and lovely and touching....sounds awesome....my 10-year-old always seems to walk in while I'm listening to your songs (or maybe your songs draw him over?). Anyway, he just walked in so I asked him for his critique. Here you go:
1. It is very good.
2. That song had strong emotion to it.
3. It is very touching.
4. All I was wondering was, where was he -- which state was he in?
See, he found a FLAW that Eddie missed! You didn't say which STATE he was in! Laughing!
Lisa
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Hi Bill,
This is SO sad and lovely and touching....sounds awesome....my 10-year-old always seems to walk in while I'm listening to your songs (or maybe your songs draw him over?). Anyway, he just walked in so I asked him for his critique. Here you go:
1. It is very good.
2. That song had strong emotion to it.
3. It is very touching.
4. All I was wondering was, where was he -- which state was he in?
See, he found a FLAW that Eddie missed! You didn't say which STATE he was in! Laughing!
Lisa Gotta catch him before bedtime. He was in Maryland [/quote]
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A good well written mid-tempo ballad.
Ray E. Strode
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Bill,
THAT is a cool song. Every step of the way.
And a wonderful g/v demo - needs nothing more.
A terrific write.
floyd
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Top Notch writing Bill. Awesome job, I loved it!
Write on, Man,
Michael W. Brown, f.k.a. "bluesriff"
"The best way to find yourself is to lose yourself in the service of others."
Mahatma Gandhi
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Just the right voice for this one, Bill.
Vic
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Very nice, Bill. Thanks for the listen.
Regards,
Bob Thanks for dropping by, Bob Bill
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Hey Bill,
What a sweet song man! This one flows like butter, nice performance/production/arrangement/lyrics! This is a "perfect" example of how a Bridge should digress musically and lyrically make a dramatic statement.
Jeff's vocals remind me a little of John Denver when John sang serious. Well done!
steady-eddie. Thanks, Eddie. Yes, Jeff has heard the John Denver comparisons Bill
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BILL--
MY HAT'S OFF TO YOU--THIS ONE IS A REAL 1ST CLASS COUNTRY SONG--I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT IT!
WRITE ON--
Mackie
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A good well written mid-tempo ballad. Thanks for the listen, Ray Bill
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Bill,
Killer song all the way around. Great melody, great lyric and great performance. WHy wasn't it or why isn't it a hit!
Dave
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Bill,
THAT is a cool song. Every step of the way.
And a wonderful g/v demo - needs nothing more.
A terrific write.
floyd Thanks, Floyd. I got some blowback about the San Diego zoo when I wrote it, but that seems to have quieted down Bill
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Top Notch writing Bill. Awesome job, I loved it! Thanks, Mike. Appreciate it Bill
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Thanks for stopping by, Calvin Bill
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Just the right voice for this one, Bill.
Vic Thanks, Vic. Yeah, Jeff did a fine job on the vocal. Bill
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BILL--
MY HAT'S OFF TO YOU--THIS ONE IS A REAL 1ST CLASS COUNTRY SONG--I LOVE EVERYTHING ABOUT IT!
WRITE ON--
Mackie Thanks so much, Mackie. Bill
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Bill,
Killer song all the way around. Great melody, great lyric and great performance. WHy wasn't it or why isn't it a hit!
Dave Thanks, Dave. It hasn't been a hit because some guy on the internet wrote it, lol Bill
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how'd i miss this one Bill?Man this is awesome!Maybe the guy will move west now!Mike
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how'd i miss this one Bill?Man this is awesome!Maybe the guy will move west now!Mike Thanks, Mike. Hey, you've got me thinking. Maybe it could have been a girl. We'll have to get a lady singer Actually, someone who can play guitar, too, cause I don't have a track. Maybe a tag at the end, with her saying "goodbye Mary Alice" Bill
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oh yeah,a guy was singin' this huh,LOl.Well there ya go Bill,you have another version to work with.Mike
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Top Notch writing Bill. Awesome job, I loved it! I agree with all the positives about this song. "Top Notch" seems to cover it the best. I could not say it any better. Please keep on keepin' on
I can tell you what I am not
I just can't tell you what I am
I am just slippin' down this road
no longer with any plan
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Top Notch writing Bill. Awesome job, I loved it! I agree with all the positives about this song. "Top Notch" seems to cover it the best. I could not say it any better. Please keep on keepin' on Thanks, Stoney. Appreciate it Bill
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Nice combo of great lyrics put into a country commercial vibe...how often does that happen now days?
Check out our new album Janice Merritt "Am I Blue Enough?"
on Spotify, Apple Music, Pandora, Amazon and others.
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Nice combo of great lyrics put into a country commercial vibe...how often does that happen now days? It happens a lot. Just not on radio so much, lol Bill
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