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(10/10/24 UPDATE) -- I posted this song 10 years ago here. It was a song that I wrote just goofing around and thinking about a "stage production" song. I'm digging deep into the JPF achives here, but thought it might be fun to bring this back as well as see some of the old comments etc. On the earliest post, I sang both parts which is why some of the comments joked about that before I had recorded my daughter singing the girl's part). My daughter is now 24 years of age who did kind of inspire this song as she becoming a young teen at that time and I knew what was coming--yikes!


UPDATE: 10/21/13 I FINALLY GOT MY DAUGHTER, CARLEE, TO "SING." SHE WAS APPREHENSIVE, AS THIS WAS HER FIRST TIME BEHIND A MICROPHONE SERIOUSLY. CARLEE IS 14 YEARS OF AGE, AND HER VOICE MIGHT SOUNG A BIT TOO YOUNG FOR THIS CHARACTER--BUT I'M PROUD OF HER AND THINK SHE DID A NICE JOB. I WOULD HAVE LIKED TO SEE HER INSERT A BIT MORE CHARACTER EMOTION PERHAPS SINCE THIS IS REALLY A "STAGE" TYPE NUMBER. I MAY HAVE HER RECORD THIS NEXT YEAR, JUST TO SEE THE DIFFERENCE IN HER VOCAL GROWTH, BUT WILL ALLWAYS TREASURE HER FIRST RECORDING!

This is a "fun" song that I wrote mimicking the late 50's/ early/ 60's music and "time era" with the song idea written for a "Father/Daughter scenario" about a young girl's first date. Of course the Father is apprehensive about seeing his daughter enter the "world of romance" and the potential heartaches, and is ambivalent.





Daddy's Girl


DAD:

Sweetheart I, love you more than I can say, you know
I'm only asking for you to take things slow-o-ow
Young love is fragile this I know

GIRL:

Daddy dear, I know you mean well, but, he's so sincere
He'll never leave me in a thousand years
I can see it in his eyes

DAD:

Believe me girl, I'm not try'n to rain on your parade
I guess you could say that I am afraid
I know how broken hearts are made

GIRL:

Daddy dear, I'll be sixteen in a week or two
Can't you see that I'm a woman too?
Won't you look into my eyes?

DAD:

Darling girl, when I look into your eyes I see
You're Mother when she was about twenty
That's why I know he'll wait for you

GIRL:

Daddy please, I can't think of anything, but him
Won't you reconsider, let him in
You know he is a lot like you

(Bridge) It seems like yesterday, in the leaves we played
Birthday parties and roller skates, now you tell me
That you want to date!

(Saxophone solo)

(Repeat 1st vs). (Dad & Girl parts "both" together)

Dad-Girl: (Conversation ending song)

Hey Eddie,

I LOVED this. Any father who has a daughter can relate very well to these lyrics. The music was so well done and I loved the sax. The staggered last verse with dad and daughter singing together was awesome as was the speaking parts at the end. I really love everything about this song. Very well done. By the way your vocals sound great, including the daughter part, though I cannot wait to hear a version actually sung by your daughter. I think that would be brilliant. Kudos. No nits from me. My favorite that I have heard from you. You NAILED the 50's groove btw. Congrats.

Dave

eddie,

Dave said EXACTLY all the things I was thinking... so...

I LOVED this. The music was so well done and I loved the sax. The staggered last verse with dad and daughter singing together was awesome as was the speaking parts at the end. I really love everything about this song. Very well done. By the way your vocals sound great, including the daughter part, though I cannot wait to hear a version actually sung by your daughter. I think that would be brilliant. Kudos. No nits from me. My favorite that I have heard from you. You NAILED the 50's groove btw. Congrats.

floyd (stealing Dave's words...)

.... took out the relating part... I don't have a daughter...

Hi Eddie,

Very nicely done, smooth and cool.
We have 2 daughters so I certainly like this one.
But even IF we didn't have em I'd like it.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

She may be pretty, but she sounds kind of butch. Very cool, Eddie.

Bill

This is fab and your voice sounds like David Bowie to me...I totally enjoyed it, hope your daughter will relent, but you make a fine sounding gal anyhow...LOL!!

Tammy

Dave--Thanks much!

Floyd--Thanks for the kind words by Dave!

Calvin--Thanks for checking this one out!

Bill--Thanks, maybe I shouldn't have said anything, then people may wonder ehh?

Tammy, Thanks for stopping by and your kind words--or is that a compliment????? LOL.

steady-eddie.

Post deleted by E Swartz--deleted duplicate post!

Ah yes,the days of daddy's little girl goin' out,what a nightmare!A very cool song Eddie!I'm thinkin' you're soundin' a little too comfortable on the girl lines though,LOL!Can't wait till you find your girl singer for this as i'm sure the feeling of it will be a bit more intense.Mike

Hi Eddie,

This is as CUTE as can be! It's sweet and tender and loving and caring and so...human, in the finest sense!

One thing -- as I was listening, I was remembering back to when I was 16, and I remembered my friends and I counting down the hours, minutes, seconds the year we turned 16. So the fact that she said she's going to be 16 in a "week or two" -- that stood out for me, because when she's that close, I think she'd know if it's a week or two away. I thought maybe something like, "I'll be 16, so trust me like you always do." I don't know -- something like that!

This is really adorable, and I was surprised at how well you sung the girl part! Not that I didn't always have faith that you could sing a female lead, and not that you sounded like a girl at all -- but your inflections were really good and you pulled it off so we could enjoy the song with you as the "fill-in!"

Lisa

Hi Lisa!

Good to hear from you. I had an older sister and remember her going through that period which wasn't pleasant for my dad. Of course now I have a 14 year old--yikes!

My thought on that line you mentioned was teens always think they're more grown up than they really are, and she's just now entering the area of her life where "trust" becomes more of an issue--that's why she's saying, "look at me! I'm not a little girl anymore. Dad knows, yet is reluctant to see or accept this fact.

I've enjoyed being involved with community theatre for many years--so there is a little "ham" in me Lisa--"ok, where are those lavender slacks.........!" (Not)
Thanks for checking this one out.

steady-eddie.

Mike,


Thanks man, and for that remark that made me laugh. I was a bit reluctant to post me singing this, but said what the heck, it's still a work in progress.

steady-eddie.

Erm - my daughter will turn 16 in a few weeks - LOL! :-))
(BTW, she sings a lot and much better than her father ;-)

Well, as a father I can relate to this song (and this type of conversation) VERY well. Lyrics are perfect for me ("I'm not tryin' to rain on your parade", "I'll be 16 in a week or two" or "Seems like yesterday, in the leaves we played" - and the final dialog - great!). The idea to have this as a duet is good and if your goal was to mimic the early 60ies the musical performance works very well, too. Personally, I think this period is a good choice for carrying the light and funny tone of the song (it wouldn't make a good dubstep-title ;-)

Sounds good Eddie! I like the new saxophone parts. I have a friend here who just went through this phase with his daughter so can relate. The song is well thought out as a duet and you do a stellar job of playing and singing....brought out the woman in you nicely. If C won't sing her part, there are a couple of young gals on JPF who could probably do it well.

EDDIE--

VERY COOL!

Write and sing on--

Mackie

Charlie, Thanks much for your interest and kind words!

Colin, Thanks to you, I found a better saxophone--appreciate your keen ear as always!

Mackie, "Now that Macki---ie's back in town-own!!!!!!! Look out ol' Mackie's back! -- BD circa 1960 Thanks, Mackie!

Hey Eddie, I couldn't stop smiling through the whole tune... then at the end i laughed audibly. Not at the song, the song is real good, I just feel like I know you a little better now. singing both parts revealed something real and very likable in you. Thanks for doing this song.
doug

Way cool. After raising two girls I totally related. Loved the feel and the sax. At first I thought I was hearing that song Stay…just a little bit longer. Same chord pattern, but then you went and made it your own. Very nice.

WOW....what a good song...Fun? Yes....but, awesome, as well!!
I really enjoyed this....this is something I'm going to pass on to my little girl. She's getting there!!!

Teriffic writing, Eddie....and truley loved the performance.....buuuuuut, you gotta get a girl to sing this with you, man!!
;-) Tom

Hey Doug,

Being a fan of yours, if I made you laugh and entertained you a bit--then it was worth embarrassing myself a little! Thanks!

Iggy,

I appreciate you taken a listen and love your music. I'm sure there were quite a few songs in that time period with that chord structure. The sax player "Swanee" plays a lot of "Du-Wap,' so this was right up his alley. My daughter's fourteen and a little less innocent than the girl in this song I'm sure--but not in a bad way, just a different era--but I sure can relate already!

steady-eddie.

Tom,

Thanks much for the spin! You are right! I will get a teenage girl to sing this duet, hopefully my own daughter. Does your daughter sing? Enjoyed your last tune!

steady-eddie.

Hi Eddie,

I love this track! You definitely nailed the 50's groove, especially with the sax part!

Just one suggestion - for some reason, this sounds like this is asking a chorus - maybe something that will somehow change meaning and perspective as the song goes on, maybe a play with "Daddy's Girl"?

Nice work!

Karen

Hey Karen!

Thanks for checking out the song! Most of my songs do have a choruses; this one doesn't as I wrote it for a Demo "Show-Tune" example for a "music number for a specific scene," and not a chorus number within a show. The "dialog" as is, is already close to 4 minutes and there just isn't time for a one chorus, not to mention two or three. The Bridge offers the only break which also is the dad's reflecting thoughts as well. I could create a chorus and have it inherent within the story but felt this tender scene between Dad & Daughter needed to be kept more personal. No question, musically what you are saying would work however, and I thank you for your thoughts!

steady-eddie.

Hi Eddie....no, my daughter doesn't sing......it sure would be a cool keepsake to work with your own daughter on this....something to cherish!
Have fun!!
-Tom

- Got the era nailed - sock hop vibes
- Very cool sax
- No daughters here but enough family and friends with them to appreciate the lyrics
- Cool ending with the conversation

Thanks for posting.

Very unique Eddie- I can tell how you thought out every aspect of. I loved the sax. You got a believer here........

Janice/Bud - Thanks for the spin, I went to a few sock hops in the early 60's as young teen.

Bobby - Always appreciate you stopping buy and appreciate your comments!

steady-eddie.

Hi Eddie,

Liking this a lot! Di and I write and record a lot of music set in the 60's. It was a great era for music.

Loved the song and the performance. Great job! My daughter is 41 but she was once 16...as best as I can remember! Loved my listen!

Al

Also meant to say...but forgot...I loved the the call and response near the end...really nice!

Al,

Great to see you back in the forum, it's been awhile. Thanks for the spin--I really liked that era of music as well. I could have a daughter 41, but got married later in life, and got a little "frisky" when I was 46!

Regards,

steady-eddie.

Hi Ed, I remember hearing this before when you shared it, sounding really good. I hope you are able to find someone to sing the female part..You really captured that old timey feel from back in the day

Great job Ed!

Kim

Thanks Kim!

Good to see you back in the forum--I really liked your recent song post! I'm counting on my daughter to sing this duet with me! "Dachshunds Rule"

steady-eddie.

UPDATE: 10/21/13 I FINALLY GOT MY DAUGHTER, CARLEE, TO "SING." SHE WAS APPREHENSIVE, AS THIS WAS HER FIRST TIME BEHIND A MICROPHONE SERIOUSLY. CARLEE IS 14 YEARS OF AGE, AND HER VOICE MIGHT SOUNG A BIT TOO YOUNG FOR THIS CHARACTER--BUT I'M PROUD OF HER AND THINK SHE DID A NICE JOB. I WOULD HAVE LIKED TO SEE HER INSERT A BIT MORE CHARACTER EMOTION PERHAPS SINCE THIS IS REALLY A "STAGE" TYPE NUMBER. I MAY HAVE HER RECORD THIS NEXT YEAR, JUST TO SEE THE DIFFERENCE IN HER VOCAL GROWTH, BUT WILL ALLWAYS TREASURE HER FIRST RECORDING WITH ME.

steady-eddie

Well worth the wait Eddie!Carlee is amazing!I don't think this song could be done any better,i loved it.Keep her at that mic!Mike

Wow, Eddie -- no offense to your Girl Voice {laughing}, but Carlee is exactly what this song needed!!! She sounds awesome! I think she sounds exactly the right age for the part and her character emotion sounds very real -- just what I'd want to hear! GREAT JOB, YOU TWO!!! -- Lisa

eddie... and CARLEE!!!

Extraodinary! Superb! Fabulous! No kidding - this is SO very good!

Carlee sounded like a pro! The song was good before... now it's awesome!

Papa should be VERY proud.

floyd

Way cool, Eddie. Carlee has a nice voice for her age especially. Maybe a slight bit of reverb on her voice would fill it out more but that's just a suggestion to KOS. Nice job you two.

Stevie

Back for another listen! Carlee sounds super...has a lot of her Dad's talent! I agree with Syevie that a touch of reverb would add a touch of warmth andc gentle fullness too her voice. But this is super as is! Enjoyed it twice as much second time around!

Al

Very nice Eddie. Carlee sounds good on this.
I imagine a Doris Day film as I listen.
Vic

Well done you two! Carlee sounds the right age to me. As mentioned above, a bump in the reverb when she sings, but not when she speaks might be good. The sax is excellent.

Reminds me of All I Have to Do is Dream by the Everly Brothers.

Mike, Lisa,

Thanks guys for your kind words--Carlee will be thrilled!

steady-eddie.

Floyd, Stevie,

Thanks guys for coming back to check out the "chick!" Stevie, I added a bit more reverb on Carlee, even though I had a fair amount there--thanks!

steady-eddie.

Al, Vic,

Thanks for coming back around Al,(added some reverb to Carlee vox singing, removed a tad with speaking part-per Colin's sug).

I'm always thrilled to hear from my cowboy friend from Wales! Thanks Vic! That era you describe is exactly what I was trying to convey--I had aspirations of writing a musical production about a Father/Daughter relationship someday--but real work and life seems to always get in the way of dreams ehh? Thanks!

steady-eddie

Colin,

Thanks for coming back to my old friend, "also" from across the pond,(not that you're old--the friendship) and reinforcing what a couple others suggested--took your advice on the speaking line as well!

steady-eddie.

Hey Eddie,

I am loving this. As I said earlier, it is my favorite of yours and now with Carlee's addition it is even better. She did a great job. It is a favorite of mine on Soundcloud. Carlee's spoken parts tells me she is likely a mighty fine actress as well.

Dave

It has a great 50s/60s feel to it which you've really managed to capture Eddie.Excellent collab thanks for the listen I enjoyed it
Travis

I am glad your daughter did the duet with you. I know at that age it is hard to get them to agree to do much...sounds nice!!!!

Kim

wow----go Carlee go, you two made a real special piece of music, thanks for sharing.

Calvin


http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart

Dave, Thanks much, I'll share these thoughts with Carlee as well. She has been in the chorus in several musical productions--I'd think she could handle a larger role, no question.

Kim, Yes I'm so glad to get rid of my "sissy female vocal interpretation" on this one! You are right about kids her age being, shall we say "difficult at times?"

Thanks, guys!

steady-eddie.

Travis, -- sorry about getting you out of order with Kim--"ladies first ehh? Thanks for your listen from the "Mother Country!"

Calvin, I always appreciate your ears around here! Everyone's support with Carlee will hopefully motivate her! Thanks!

steady-eddie.