Lovely story here, Lisa! I think you painted a descriptive story, though I too wonder why they can't be together. Then again, I like that it's left up to the imagination of the listener so they can put their own spin on it. smile

My only suggestion would be in the chorus:

Romance landed tonight
On a red-eye flight
Though it's grounded in love
He knows she can't stay
'Cause the very next evening
She's gonna fly away
On another red-eye flight