Hey Fran,

Comments/suggestions below, keep or sweep smile

V1)
Mini skirts with tiny shirts & mood rings
All our younger days seem to just slip away
The concerts in the park, loving in the dark
I remember your ponytail s & the cut off jeans

rings and jeans are near rhymes but would work great if you rhymed lines two and four...so what about this:

All our younger days seem to just slip away
Mini skirts with tiny shirts & mood rings
The concerts in the park, loving in the dark
I remember your ponytail s & the cut off jeans

V2)
Building her castles in the said & playing
See her little ponytail s flipping in the wind
Sand all over her legs & the cut off jeans
Our daughter looks just like you back then

Chorus)
Remember the first time I ever saw you<<--It's been in too many songs!
Our grade school playground was filled
But you were the girl that caught my eye
Jumping rope, singing & playful things
You were such a cute girl standing there
With your ponytail s & your cut off jeans

V3)
As we walked down the sunny beach today
Me in the guitar shirt & my mullet hair do
We'll never let these memories slip away
Still look gorgeous in your cut off jeans

Rearrange to fit the ABCB rhyme scheme:

Me in the guitar shirt & my mullet hair do
As we walked down the sunny beach today
Still look gorgeous in your cut off jeans
We'll never let these memories slip away


Repeat chorus)2X's

Tag)
We jumped on my new red iron pony
Quick ride down the beach you & me
(not needed since you already said "we")

“I usually start with a title or maybe a little rhyme or phrase.” - Harlan Howard

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