Tammy, I liked it. Got the metaphors easily enough. I personally think songs should have gobbs of metaphors. It makes the listener think. Songs like this do make you think. Perhaps the listener can apply your met. to their story? Tough for me to nit as my only child, a son drowned 5 years ago so any thing having to do with drowning is hard but I might say; "...Left bruised and battered by the waves of fate" or "Left bruised and battered on this ship of fate" or leave it alone cause it's no big deal !! I enjoyed Tammy !!