mmmmmm....sounds like your coach read the posts on this board!!

I agree that the chorus/hook is very good. Your coach describes V2 as novelty and that's what I think of when I hear "ain't the sharpest tool in the shed" and "ugly".

All you need to do is find different ways to express those same sentiments.....

homely instead of ugly?.......

He's not the sharpest guy that I know,
Shoulda figured this out weeks ago


Colin

I try to critique as if you mean business.....

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