Hi Tricia

I fear that the thing a listener will remember most about this is "Don'T" ....there are six in the first two verses alone out of nine. Maybe if the chorus with the make it simple part is really memorable it will overcome that, but maybe you should call it Don't.

I like this verse the best. Wondering if you considered "our" boundaries here.

Anyway, just my thoughts. Take or leave. smile jm

Don’t make love to me tonight
Then go back to calling us friends
My heart can’t tell the diff’rence
Where your bound’ries start or (omit where they) end


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