Hey, Bobbie,
Don't see anything drastically wrong, so I'd have to get a bit "nitty"
I stumble on Guiness for a different reason=--Guiness refreshes---doesn't roll off my tongue too well. Tex's fix would work or 'stout" instead of Guiness either.
Maybe another word, 'stead of wildness in L 8--V 1, since it's used later on.
I'd like to see "beguiling in the C, probably mainly for the 'chime" back to 1st line--C
Reassuring seems somewhat of an odd choice, maybe partly done for rhyme. I'd rather see
______,never choosing, would need a set up word though.
V 2--You can decide whether it's valid or not but at ;east one of my "evaluators" whould probably say ---"What things? and who are "them'. I guess line 2 kinda' explains line 1 to some extent, but I'd like to know who they are at least. Maybe in line 3 something like---Do you have the fairy foresight" or something.(Fairy" has had other meanings here but in an Irish orietned song, don't see a problem.) "Leprechauns" would be good, but hard to get in.
All in all a good write.
More coffee
P S, Om "things' and "them" The Irish would probably understand all right, but it's pretty hard to beat the Irish at writing an Irish song (OK so an Englishman wrote Danny Boy, exception <G> ) I guess I mostly think marketing, so on my own, I generally try to write it so others can understand it too. If it's a good song, should appeal to more than the Irish.
Wy
(Did I say that I thought you were a better writer than even a year or two ago? No,? --Good ,I wouldn't wanta' say anything like that <G> )



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