Thanks for bumping this, Brian.

I was looking at this lyric this morning, troubadour, and it struck me how it's similar to a Stephen Sondheim song that was a fairly big hit - "Losing My Mind".

I don't know if you know it, but it starts out:

The sun comes up,
I think about you,
The coffee cup,
I think about you.
I want you so,
It's like I'm losing my mind.


I think it's an excellent lyric, and yours has a lot of those same qualities - simple phrases with a direct connection to the gut.

I'm not sure the hook is well-tied to the lines that precede it, though. It kind of feels to me like it hangs out there by itself on most of the verses.

The lines leading up to the hook are very strong, though. Lots of emotion and a direct honesty to them.

I hope you record this and we get a chance to hear it.

- James

You can really only please one songwriter at a time. Might as well be yourself! :^)


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