Sometimes those I rhymes can work real good as the i sound is pretty well suited to end phrase sounds, but yep. I think. I would be looking at a few changes. heart to let go, could be a thought.
cease/peace could come in handy.
One final kiss then leave me to cry alone, seems it may work somwhere here.
Have fun Bill.
Graham


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