Well, I dont see a dang thang wrong with it IMO. Fact is, I like it pretty much AS IS, and think the hook-title is unique enough to make a go.
Excellent country song, I'd say. I do think the "half past two" o'clock works better than 30 past two. I can hear this one in my head, and could almost know the melody, I felt. Jake


"Kneedeep in harmony"