Originally Posted by John Voorpostel
We used to laugh, stay up way too late
Dream about forever both fully awake

after that...more pictures IMO ...lots\too much of "this happened"

Hey John,
I like the lines you suggested.

What you write makes sense - thanks for pointing that out. I think I leaned into telling the story as it happened, so I can see how it comes across that way. I’ll work on adding more imagery to make it feel more lived-in.

All the best - Robert