It 'hooked' me.
As the first listener I got attached to the Melody and emotion and felt I had to rescue it from the obscenity that made it only suitable for singing in the privacy of my own home.
We can be 'hooked' by the pleasure of emoting a Song's execution and fool ourselves that others will be hooked too. But I think this hooked me for the right reasons, Structure, Lyrical Storyline, Melody.
It's not a 'destined to be classic', maybe, but it's entertaining to me for right now.

The creation of the Singer Character and Love Interest Character in Verse 1, Line 1, sets up a 'reality'. As the listener we're eavesdropping on their conversation, or his side of it anyway. A first Line generally hooks my interest, makes me wonder what the Singer Character is starting to tell me, and wanting to know where the Story might go.
The 'next door' Line is scene-setting 'furniture', and 'Hard Rhyme' 'fighting you/writing to you' reinforce it for the listener.
The very conversational prose communicates well. He's simply talking to her.
The commas in the Title Line, THE Hook, indicate the 'rests' that I think make the delivery effective.
'Now I, Ain't Got Time, For Loving You'.
He laments that time has moved on, the ever-elapsing moment of now, the only time there is, and life's circumstances now mean it's out of his control. Even the 'Maybe' in the Bridge is a lament, a longing for what he knows won't happen.

Verse II is explanatory, explaining how this change in what the Singer Character thinks he 'should have' done, 'walked away' and the repeat of the 'instead' idea, the Hard Rhyme 'talked and stayed', and 'we should be there in bed', are 'furniture' of a sort to reinforce the idea of their previous relationship, separation, and his regret.

The Bridge, brief, expresses a hope that they could stop fighting, and get together.

I decided to repeat Verse I after the Bridge, and I think it expresses the unresolved situation.
I timed it but I forget the exact time. Under 3 minutes I think. Simplicity works.

Last edited by Gary E. Andrews; 12/26/25 01:08 PM.
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