Originally Posted by Rob B.
Dave,
this is a beautiful, heartfelt love song — simple, pure, and full of genuine emotion. It already feels timeless and personal, like something written straight from the heart (and honestly, it has a wedding vow kind of energy).
Your lyrics look a bit different from what I usually write, which I really like. I noticed you repeat the hook line (“You’re my person”) at the end of each verse. Often when that’s done, a song doesn’t need a separate chorus — but it looks like you’ve included one too. If you don’t mind, I’d love to share an idea for how that could actually work really well together.


What do you think? I really love the heart behind what you wrote — it’s got so much warmth and sincerity. This version just trims and balances a few spots so it flows a little more naturally if you ever decide to record it. Feel free to use any of these ideas.

All the best - Robert

Thank you, Robert! Your suggestion has definitely given me an idea or two on how to tweak this.
I truly appreciate your read and feedback, sir!

Peace,

Dave

"Where there's a Gill, there's a way"