I've never found a good way to give a negative critique. They always sound negative.

This is actually quite catchy, although it'd need a fuller arrangement to be pitchable.

However, the lyric is so weak it kills the song. Wait until you have a memorable title, then write TO that hook. Make your bridge a pithy couplet that sums it all up, or resolves it.

If your idea doesn't easily lend itself to development in the 2nd verse and a bridge, you don't have an idea.

And avoid complaining, if at all possible, unless you go the route of Before He Cheats...witty etc. This ain't that.

Nashville demos etc:

https://www.soundclick.com/bands3/default.cfm?bandID=431939

other demos:

https://soundcloud.com/wabash-cannibal

Amazon Kindle books by Robert George you may enjoy:

1) Americana

2) Teenage Graceland

3) The Will to Be

4) Fort Mystery

5) Wheel Sea

6) My One True Love