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Bayside
by Gary E. Andrews - 10/19/26 10:48 PM
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Joined: Feb 2018
Posts: 52
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Many thanks for the feedback and comments, much appreciated. Kevin, I really like the concept of this song, getting older and having the same soulmate for so long, like when, sometimes, the stories we tell each other give us pause as to who said what or even who did what...was that you or me that happened to? At least that's been my own experience.  What I'm not sure about is the end. That final verse followed by the chorus doesn't fit together like the other ones. The last verse almost feels like a bridge, because it tells us where this relationship and all these memories have led them. Maybe that last verse could be something more similar to the other verses, some other memory that he may or may not have gotten right? Anyway, if this is a first draft, it's really good in concept, just needs a little more thought to the ending. Just my opinion, of course. Ricki Rick, thanks for the comments. What I am trying to express in this song is a story about someone who's aging partner is now very ill ( possibly dying). He is at her bedside, remembering how they met and fell in love. He knows he is probably looking back through rose-tinted glasses ( he may have some details wrong) but nevertheless is expressing his eternal love for her.
Last edited by kevinism; 02/09/18 07:08 AM.
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