Neil, the lyric's basically finished now. wink

Lisa, I love it when folks discuss some tiny little - though significant - element in a lyric. wink At least no one seems to have come to blows regarding that pesky housefly. wink (BTW, nice possible connection between the singer and a 'lost fly'. wink )

Mike, I had to smile. smile

In fact, I to- and fro-ed for several minutes between 'shiny' and 'shining'. I agree, 'shiny and new' are a natural pairing. I wanted, though, not to repeat 'shiny'. I hope I've resolved it by using 'shining like new'.

Thanks, as always, for the extra nudge. wink And I've an extra line to the chorus, plus made small changes in the verses for a smoother flow.

Donna

Originally Posted by Michael Zaneski
Hi Donna,

Did you purposely avoid re-iterating the title in line three of the bridge, with "I'll be at home in it, shining and new" ..?

Cuz it seems (to me) like it would be a stronger line with "shiny," but I'm thinking you've avoided that on purpose. "shiny and new" sounds like a natural pairing, to me.

Mike



Mike

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