A substantial rewrite of an old, much longer, piece from 2009. I might have posted it then, but with another title.)

Meanwhile, I've tightened it up a bunch. It calls for FEMALE vocals. I'm thinking simple acoustic singer-sonwriter (guitar or piano), along the lines of Kimya Dawson, Regina Spektor, etc. Mid- to uptempo.

Constructive critique welcome.
Go for it! smile

Donna

12.09: Thanks to feedback, more tweaking. wink

Shiny

V1
I'm fumbling at the curtain
On a hot summer morning
I'm pretty certain
The funk that I'm in
Has gone beyond sorry
...The dead fly on my windowsill
Could write my life story

Pre-chorus
Oh hey Mr. Sun
Won't you send me someone

Chorus
I want to be shiny
All starry and bright
Glow like a beacon
In somebody’s night
…I'll drawn him into my light
I want to be shiny

V2
I'm restless at the window
On a hot summer evening
I'm here in limbo
And desperate to leave
This bleak panorama
...It's gone and got me aching for
A little love drama

Pre-chorus
Oh hey Mr. Moon
Won't you let it be soon

Chorus
I want to be shiny
All starry and bright
Glow like a beacon
In somebody’s night
…I'll draw him into my light
I want to be shiny

Bridge
I know he'll be funny, loving, and kind
His heart like a room with a breathtaking view
And I'll be at home in it, shining [color:#3366FF]like new[/color]

I know he’ll be funny, loving, and wise
A room with a view, a wide-open door
That’s who I long to be shiny for

Chorus
I want to be shiny
All starry and bright
Glow like a beacon
In somebody’s night
…I'll draw him into my light
I want to be shiny

©2015 Donna Devine

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