Hi Brian,

I really like this one, though the structures a bit confusing. You do the last line/hook refrain on verses 2, 4, and 6. Then basically repeat the 2nd and 6th verses much like a chorus with the exception of "Later on" and "At that time".

I really like the read and hook as well. I'm not quite sure how the structure would effect any commercial aspirations, but thought it was worth a mention. Good write!

David