Heya Nite!

I absolutely suck at loglines. I know what they're supposed to do, but I just can't seem to make them behave.

In this case, I think the romance can be downplayed, or left out completely. It seems like her troubled past is the biggest obstacle?

The advice I've read(tons of it, as I'm sure you have too) all seems to say that we can leave the names out...So, what we're left with is:

Who is it about..."Who" singular, preferably.
What do they want?
What standfs in their way?
What do they have to do to overcome it?

With that in mind, here are a coupel of edited suggestions:

After moving to The City, a small town girl must overcome her troubled emotional past, and deal with a budding romance, in order to redefine herself and pursue her musical dreams.

A small town girl with a troubled past is forced to reinvent herself after moving to The City to pursue her musical dreams.

Yeah, I know, they suck:-)

Congrats on the traction and Good Luck, Dude!

Midnite

Satchel was right. Something is gaining on me.

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