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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Hi all...this is my first lyric post in quite a while. I know I still owe an explanation/excuse/reason/description for/of my hiatus/sabatical.  Until then....here is something maybe ya'll can get me back in the swing of things with. There are areas I'm not satisfied with...I'm curious to see if those are the areas that stand out to everyone else too. Thanks in advance. ~Bree Time To Say Goodbye ©2008 Bree Griffith, ASCAP I finally lost count of the number of days since I saw you yea, since I saw you Still remember how it felt and the words you wouldn’t say you refused to said they hurt you But the years have flown by and life has moved on even though what I feel still seems so strong Chorus It’s time to say goodbye and stop running from the truth I’ve gotta face up to the lie that life won’t go on without you Neither one of us could say it Maybe we were just afraid it would be the end to what we set aside when it was time to say goodbye. Sometimes I find myself wondering if I will feel your touch again softly on my skin Seems like every day you walk right through my mind no matter what I do I still think of you Still the years keep passin’ by life just moves along I realize it’s time to end this holding on Chorus It’s time to say goodbye stop running from the truth Time to face up to the lie that life won’t go on without you Neither one of us would say it Maybe we were just afraid it would be the end to what we set aside when it was time to say goodbye. Part of me will always love you I just can’t live my life this way I have to let go of these dreams I’ve held inside it’s time to chase away the hope that we’ll survive Chorus It’s time to say goodbye stop running from the truth I’ve gotta face up to the lie that life won’t go on without you we’ve reached the end of all we set aside My time has come…time to say goodbye
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Hey Breeny! Gotta run, so I'll comment as I read. The "words you wouldn't say"...love? commitment? How would that hurt? Singer's lost track of the "days", but then you're talking years flying by? No wonder she can't remember the exact number of days.  I must be thick as a brick, as I can't decide what "saying" they're so afraid of in the chorus. Not saying "I love you" because it was predestined that they would eventually split up? You have what almost seems a double negative with... "I’ve gotta face up to the lie that life won’t go on without you" Aigh't, hang on. I'll reverse it.... I've gotta face up to the truth That life will go on without you Okay. It DOES make sense, but why'd you have to be so convoluted with it, Breeny?  OK, this'll take me too long! The part I'm having trouble with is all the YEARS flying by, with her just now owning up to the facts. I mean, I know from personal experience that that one love that didn't reach fruition for any reason other than you lost that "feeling" is one you never fully get over. But to ruminate across that many years with a kind of urgency that seems currently palpable is kind of a tough sell. Wouldn't hurt to throw us a bone with some personal event specific to this couple to get us involved. As always, well written, with some good rhymes. Even though I don't fully grasp it, this is a good one... "Neither one of us could say it Maybe we were just afraid it would be the end to what we set aside when it was time to say goodbye" See ya, B, Benaby
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"Part of me will always love you I just can’t live my life this way
I have to let go of these dreams I’ve held inside
it’s time to chase away the hope that we’ll survive"
Hey sweetie, it's really good to have you back with us.....I missed you.
The lines above say it all for me......
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Hi Bree Welcome back ! I definitely get the sense this one gives, that the singer has gone through the motion of carrying on, but now is realizing it's time to really GET to getting on... I think however having the advantage of reading it again helps clarify. I'm not so sure in singing this it will be that easy to understand what's going on for the listener as is..... For me there's confusion in the first verse setting it up. Also, it sounds a little presumptuous to say ' the words you wouldn’t say' how does she know what they are if he didn't say them ?... Once you clear this up then I think the chorus will make more sense. and maybe months gone by might be better for a time line. I think this is a good one brewing. jm
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Hi Bree,
I think you have something going here...just maybe needs some more details to flesh it all out, imo. I pretty much agree with the comments already. I was going to mention the double negative in the chorus also that is confusing:
I’ve gotta face up to the lie
that life won’t go on without you
I'd like to know what they did say to each other, or weren't willing to do before they "set it aside" and then I can understand her more when she decides to say her goodbye.
Good luck!
Kristi
A musician must make music, an artist must paint, a poet must write,
if he is to be ultimately at peace with himself. What a man can be,
he must be. -- Abraham Maslow, American Psychologist
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Hi Bree, Good to see you & good to see you writing. Lots of nice suggestions already but here's one more question... I finally lost count of the number of days since I saw you yea, since I saw you Still remember how it felt and the words you wouldn’t say you refused to said they hurt you Shouldn't it be saying.... I finally lost count of the number of days since I saw you yea, since I saw you Still remember how it felt and the words you wouldn’t say you refused to (SAY) they hurt you ps........ I like this part.... Neither one of us could say it Maybe we were just afraid it Good luck. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Heya Benaby! Always good to see ya. Ok...the words he wouldn't say would be "goodbye"...he refused to tell her goodbye when the time came. I see your point (& the point of others) on the days/years issue. Granted, I have to admit...there has been a relationship I've had at one point that I could tell you how many days it had been since I had seen someone even though the # of days was well past a few years. Kinda where this came from actually. Chorus....still "goodbye" (you can now remove the brick wall that was blocking this out...lol) As for my double negative...I was just being clever. Ya gotta make 'em actually think every once in a while ya know. It's not ALL fun & entertainment. They need to use their brains. Ok...the "personal experience" connection you were longing for...lol. Here goes... As I mentioned earlier...the relationship I could count the days of even though it was years...there was this guy (don't they all start out that way??). He and I were best friends. He lived(s) in Texas...I was in NC. We visited each other when we could, talked EVERY day, emailed EVERY day...got each other through alot. The last time I saw him was at the Dallas airport...I told him goodbye & he said he would never say that to me. It was too final and it would just hurt too much to say it. That was 7 years ago. Eventually we both moved on...somewhat. We still talk about once a month, but there comes a time your heart just HAS to say goodbye to TRULY move on. This song is about when my heart got to that point... hope it makes more sense now. Of course...this is all about me & I want the song to be universal to everyone...so revisions are needed I now know. Breeny
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Thanks Sam!!! It's good to be back & nice to know I was missed. Glad you like those lines...they came pretty easy actually. Guess they were just meant to be there.
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Joice.....YES! You got it...you really got it. Time to REALLY move on. Ben had some of the same hang ups...so I'm going to revisit that aspect and see if I can make it a bit more on the crystal side of clear. Thanks so much for the look...I always appreciate your POV. Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Kristi, Thanks for the crit. I think everything you stumbled on can be cleared up by reading my reply to Ben. That way I'm not boring everyone by retyping the same thing...lol. However, with what you said I have come to realize that I definitely have to clarify this story more. In the event it ever made it to the airwaves...there won't be anyone to explain it before it's heard. Thanks again! Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Hey Calvin! Good to see you too. So glad ya stopped by. Good point on that line. Maybe I need to change that to " you said they hurt you" I'll mull that one over when I get a solid melody going (right now it's in the liquid stages)...it'll be easier to flesh out then I think. So far I'm surprised at the lines people like & the ones they seem to stumble on. The ones others have issues with are not the ones that I had issues with. hmmm.... Thanks again for stoppin' by...always nice to hear from ya. Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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ok....here's the deal....the part that "I" am just not feelin' works is the very last chorus. More specifically the last two lines.
Anyone else think that? If so....any suggs?
Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Yowza...What a Fine, & Powerful Lyic!
Too Time-Crunched to do a Real Nit-Pick, but this feels Very Complete..& Hit-Worthy, Mz Bree!
"KUDOS" for a Good'n' & as always, Good Luck with it, M'LadyChum!
Big Hugs,
Stan
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Kaley, thank you for the warm welcome home. It's nice to be back even on a limited basis. Thanks for the feedback...I know sometimes it can be hard to get a rhythm just by reading. I do have a tune in my head, but I can't seem to iron it out enough to sing it & be satisfied. Maybe soon. Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Stan-O-Rama Coming from you that is a huge compliment. Unless of course it's just because ya didn't have TIME Thank ya kindly my friend! I appreciate the thumbs up. hugs, Bree
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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PS Breeny, you mislead me, shug. "Goodbye" is ONE word! (But, what the hey, Stan already has it scooting up the charts as is, so no worries. Benaby
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LOL Benaby... I'm so sorry... didn't mean to be "misleading"
The ideal poet has a genius for making the things we see every day seem new. ~ Samuel Johnson I write because I breathe, I breathe because I write. ~ Me www.soundclick.com/breeg
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Hell;o.. Bree. it;s really a pleasure to meet you...
and A big welcome Back to you....
Bree,,I get You...'':) This Piece''Time To Say Goodbye''..
Contradicts..''and love contradicts..all the time....
That;s my basis''for being sooo drawn to this Lyric..
and Bree you have a keen ability to speak from the heart..
i;m diggin ''where youre coming from with your thoughts..
logic and reasoning don';t always walk with the same
truths,,:)
It's a joy talkin to ya..Bree:)
keep your Lyrics coming we need
more,,like this...:)
See you in a few;o
Shirl;o
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ps.. And Please call me Shirl;o Speak Soon~~ Shirl;o
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pssss.. I wonder why your name lights up in a bold print..
hmmmmm..lol..it;s all good....;o
See you in a few;o
Shirl;o
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Strong meaningful lyrics. Everyone gets it.
Thank you
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