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A DATE WITH DESTINY
(C)2/2002 Lyric by Pam Hurley
country

Hey there girl it's been awhile
I sure would love to see your smile
Got somethin' on my mind I can't ignore
Would ya meet me for a game of pool
And take a chance on this ol' fool
Who's hopin' that you haven't closed the door

On a date with destiny
Forever is calling you and me
On a date with destiny
With you is where I truly want to be
If you're ready to make some new history
All I have to offer you is eternity
And a date with destiny

Few years back, we made a pact
To just stay friends and that was that
I didn't want to ruin what was great
Was afraid that if we got too close
I'd mess up what I treasured most
But this time honey I won't hesitate

On a date with destiny
Forever is calling you and me
On a date with destiny
With you is where I truly want be
If you're ready to make some new history
All I have to offer you is eternity
And a date with destiny

You knew we were a perfect match
You told me it was fate
Now I'm prayin I didn't take too long to ask you

On a date with destiny
Forever is calling you and me
On a date with destiny
With you is where I truly want to be
If you're ready to make some new history
All I have to offer you is eternity
And a date with destiny




[This message has been edited by Hurley (edited 02-27-2002).]

This is pretty solid, Pam. Not too much jumps out at me as needing a change. "Hey there girl, I was wrong" makes it seem like he did something bad that he needs to apologize for, so that makes for a misleading beginning. Also, "The only place I know now I should be" sounds a bit awkward, and though there's a few less-than-great rhymes in here, the only one that really falls short to me is "close/alone." Same vowel sound, sure, but totally different finish after it. And "gate" sounds kinda forced, since no one would ever say "shut the gate" like that in conversation.

But those are all minor things. Tweak those, and you'll have yourself a really fine lyric. Good luck with this one!

Anthony

Morning Anthony,
You caught me writing with my eyes half shut last nite. LOL By morning I realized some of what you'd mentioned and had made a few changes. Not sure if I'll change line one yet...it is a bit misleading but hey..he WAS wrong. Thanks for the comments and advice.
Pam

[This message has been edited by Hurley (edited 02-26-2002).]

I like it!

~Elizabeth

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"Yesterday,all my troubles seemed so far away,now it looks as though they're here to stay,oh I believe in yesterday..."-the Beatles

*You may say that I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one,I hope someday you'll join us and they world will live as one.*-John Lennon

Elizabeth---where ya been??? Thanks for the read.
Pam

Hi Pam..minimal sleep...worked on one that wouldn't let me alone last niight....so if
i'm totally off base..just ignore me.....

this is good..
i have problem with one line
don't get that one.....


Few years back, we made a pact
To just stay friends and that was that
I didn't want to ruin what was great
Was afraid that if we got too close
WE'D END UP LOSING AND ALONE?
But this time I won't hesitate

kk




[This message has been edited by Kaley Willow (edited 02-26-2002).]

Hey Kaley,
Meaning if they were MORE than friends...and something happened.say a big fight..they'd lose the friendship they'd built.So rather than move forward, they stayed friends and now he regrets that decision. Yes pain in the butt when you're creative at night huh??
Hope that helped.
Pam

Pam, sounds about right for someone with a second chance and realizes it. Don't know I can say there's any nits until I hear it with its' melody. That may make a whole lot of difference on how it perceived by the listening audience. Good luck

Sharon,
Appreciate the read and comments. You're right any music can add or kill a lyric.
Pam

Oooh,you remember me?! Cool! lol. I've been really busy lately. Still writing though,and working on a web site! Hoping to post some brand new lyrics tomorrow! =)

~Elizabeth

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"Yesterday,all my troubles seemed so far away,now it looks as though they're here to stay,oh I believe in yesterday..."-the Beatles

*You may say that I'm a dreamer but I'm not the only one,I hope someday you'll join us and they world will live as one.*-John Lennon

Gosh, Pam, you came up with more words than have visited my brain in the past month!...in one song!

It's a cute idea, I like the way you handled it. Perhaps a few extra words here and there, but I'm usually scarce with words (not always, though!).

Just a thought.....the word "pacing" to me says "back and forth", so it seems a tad redundant. I might say...."Been pacing all night long" or even "Been pacing in my room all night long" or something like that. JMO

Good job!

Elizabeth,
Sure I remember you!!! I'll be looking for your lyric tomorrow! Great news on the web site...that's what I need to do, I started one a few months back but never finished it. Talk soon.
Pam

LOL, hi Pam, first I wanted to say, been a long day, cause I read your lyric, then I read Anthony's comments, and I'm thinking to myself, where are those lines/words he is talking about, not realizing right away, you edited your lyric after his suggestions...LOL.
No nits from me, I like your storyline, and very converational thru-out.
Love to hear it when it's done.
Keep on writing and re-writing.

Marilyn

Sunny,
LOL Yep lotsa words. I had written another partial lyric which had the same verse set up of which I had a melody in my head but I could never get a good chorus for it so I kept the set up and just changed the story around.
So if the extra words you see are in the verses ...that's why...to fit the melody...LOL YEAH BUT I don't have the foggiest idea on a melody for the chorus Go figure. Thanks for the look!
Pam

[This message has been edited by Hurley (edited 02-26-2002).]

Howdy Mz Pam,

Had a few ideas for you to think about..sent 'em in an email though. Song has a lotta potential.

Bobbie

Marylin,
It wasn't you lol yes I had made some edits early this morning. Appreciate your time and comments.
Pam

Thanks Bobbie got it! Will take a closer look in the morning.
Pam

Hi all,
I've made some line changes hoping this'll read smoother. What do ya think?
Pam

Hi....Gal...

Yep...Yep..Yep..

on that line I questioned before...
I put the accent on the wrong word...and the
entire phrase..didn't..make sense...

i like the change there..and the whole thing look good...

Kaley

Hi K,
Glad you are able to read those lines better now. Thanks for coming back
Pam

Hey Pam,

I really like this one. It's very melodic, I think. I was singing along with a tune. I like the chorus a lot and I like your rhyme scheme for the verses. Obviously, you've already been foolin' around with it. I think you've got a keeper.

Ashleigh

Hey Miss Mamma Ashleigh,
Good to see you back on the board! Glad you liked this..I've changed it around some since yesterday and was hoping it read better.Talk soon
Pam

Hi Pam!
I am really late to the party, there's not a nit to pick. Look forward to hearing it when you get it demoed.
Ria

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http://angelfire.com/amiga/riassonglyrics

Hi Ria,
Never too late. Always time for your comments. Good to hear from you!
Pam

*****QUICK QUESTION

IM WONDERING WHAT YOU ALL THINK ABOUT IF I DELETED LINE 5 OF THE CHORUS???

If you're ready to make some new history
Thanks.

Pam,
I like that line. If you need to delete a line, I'd rather that you deleted line 6 JMO.
Then the chorus could end something like;

If you're ready to make some new history,
Make a date with destiny.

But what do I know?
Bill

Bill,
Now there's a thought! Thanks..will think about that.
Pam