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When you feel pain, does it burn deep inside
Do tears run free as the smoke clouds your eyes
Is the hard bitter truth becoming all too real
Can you rise above, is your fate already sealed

Long ago when your life was so much fun
You knew it would never be the same
Now as you look into the eyes of your son
How does it feel to be shot down in flames

Will you pick up the pieces, does it matter anymore
Was it worth all the trouble that you went through
After winning the battle, then losing the war
Tell me, who carries the blame, and who dies a fool

Sam, You know I have felt this way so many times in my life, struggle so hard to win that battle to really be the loser in the end. And you can't turn back time, yes your fate is already sealed in a way. But , we have to pick up the pieces and hold our heads up and keep moving on, like you told me about the sun, find it and stay in it. And the pain is so real and it does hurt way down deep inside, and the tears, man -it's like you're reading my walk of life. I know we've both had different paths in life, but in the end , they're alot like each other. And we can't relive it, one chance at this life thing, and i've made choices and I think dear God what was I thinin on this one..But it's gonna be alright, and we can pick up the pieces and head on , cause there's more to see and more to live and man, i'm gonna do the rest of my life alot better and i'm gonna smile all the way....love you Sam, glyn

Well, my friend, it's your own path....there's nothing else that you can do but to reach for the light.

The moral to the story is simple......Freedom isn't free, but humanity is.

I love you, too.....

Bump.....

I do wish that someone who hasn't yet replied to this one would.....

Reflection through your eyes is how I learn about my own writing.

Hi Sam.
Snake it is a neat piece of work. Deep but OH so true. I only wished you added a last verse with a bit more optimism and happier conclusion.

Whoever wins the war is not always a worthy winner or indeed fighting for a just cause. They just happened to have won. They probably cheated anyway.

"Whoever wins the war is not always a worthy winner or indeed fighting for a just cause. They just happened to have won. They probably cheated anyway."

That was metaphorical......It means that after the life that you intended for your son hasn't turned out like you might have envisioned that it would...

I understand Sam. I was being metaphorical. I meant that power is not always right and goes with corruption.

I'm sorry Sam, but I'm not sure I understand it.
Maybe I'm more shallow than others here.

The first verse stands on its own.

You explained to Jim what it meant, but just reading the lyrics,

I get the impression that a father is not getting
any action because he's a single parent. Maybe the
singer is saying "I told you so" to a boy that didn't take precautions?

The third verse tells me maybe he fought a bitter custody battle
over his son, and now that he's got custody, he can't find a new
wife and mother for his child.

Or I can see maybe picking up the pieces after becoming a young father,
but I don't know how that relates to winning a battle and losing a war.
Did the singer say he was to young to have a child and the subject say, no I'm not, and father a child?

Its amazing how we can misinterpret songs without a clear
frame of reference, but I guess all art is there to be
interpreted by the viewer and listener.

DannyM

That has got to be the most interesting misinterpretation that I have ever seen.

You really wanna know what inspired this one?

My brother came out. Mom freaked. I wrote this piece about her reactions and her words, attitude, and set in a questioning format, just not specifically directed towards her, or anyone else.......

Now you know.

Sam,

Point me to a few other songs, and I'll try to do amusing
and interesting misinterpretations of them too.
I can be a pretty shallow guy sometimes.

Hope you aren't offended, and that your brother and mother have come to terms.

Do you feel comfortable explaining the line,
"After winning the battle, then losing the war" in context?
I'm still a little confused.

BTW, check your myspace friend requests.

DannyM

After raising a son to be, as you think, a real live human being who believes in God, and fully intends to marry a wonderfully beautiful woman and give you scores of grandchildren.

Deviate from this, and Mom starts to feel like she lost everything that she tried so hard to instill during all those years.....

Damn, I never went so deep into any of my works before....

I always revisit my works, have conversations with myself,
and often see deeper meaning in what I write that I didn't
know I was even thinking when I wrote it.

Self analysis is priceless. Never avoid it.

DannyM

Sam,
Our songs are extensions of our souls. Marvel at them no matter what stage of growth....no matter how others see them. They are all beautiful creations.

Heidi

Misinterpretation is all part of life. It is what songwriting is all about. Leave enough blank spaces and people can put their own unique OR SPECIAL TO THEM interpretation on the piece. It is all part of the fun.

An artist paints a picture but does not place a written explanation of what his painting represents. He leaves it up to the imagination of the viewer. Most artists do not explain anything.... that is the critics job. He just laughs when they get it wrong.

That said it is up to the writer to provide enough info to convey his message clearly or provide a little info to get people thinking. His choice.

Some might say "It was snowing in the forest"
Whilst others would describe each individual snowflake on each individual leaf.

Sam, thought I'd responded on this!......

What's good about this ..it is relatable on different levels..
regardless of the initial intent.....

Many of us can see this piece differently and it still works because it's a more open piece

best...
Kaley

THANK YOU ALL!!!!!

I thought this was a poem, not a song lyric. Am I wrong???

Sam, very good descriptions, very nicely written.

Wellll,.......I suppose it is a poem, but easily adapted into a song, so how about givin' me a hand with finishing it?