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Lot Long
by Gary E. Andrews - 11/10/26 11:20 AM
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Prayers soar through the sky
Hurricanes are nature's way
Of trying man's soul
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Ben, this is very good. Does this mean you wanted more submissions? If so, here's one:
The cowboys rented
Some new X-rated movies
The sheep are frightened.
Joe
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Joe, I wrote this several months ago...when I first heard of haiku and just ran across it in some old mail. Wasn't even sure if it was done properly, but I see yours is similar, and, I might add.............hil-freakin'-LARIOUS!  Ben
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Here's the only one I ever wrote... Haiku? Gesundtheit! Haiku? Well I like you too! Haiku? Oh, Haiku! Scott
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I've written some haiku. I once had some published in a newspaper but it wasn't because I was special--they just asked people to send in haiku to celebrate the local Cherry Blossom Festival. After that I got into writing it some to relieve stress at work.
I liked yours but when I read it I thought prayer was two syllables which would mean you had six. The dictionaries I found had it as one. I had to get in the habit of counting syllables correctly. Took me a while. After all, once I get past two, counting gets harder LOL.
I did some internet research and it can get pretty complicated. I still can't figure out if it is right or proper to make clauses extend beyond one line. I don't worry about it much though. I liked yours.
When I am oppressed
Songwriter forums like this
Are my sweet relief
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I think you need one word change to make 'er great, Scottie. Instead of: Haiku? Oh, Haiku!...go with...Haiku, NO, Hai ku! I've actually heard people down here where we live use 3 syllables, eb. As in..Puh-ray-er. Well, one thing positive about this haiku stuff....it sure gets some quick responses. Guess the man was right..."Brevity IS the soul of wit!"
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Dis be a Moan-day
I sho hates to sees dem come
Deys overwhelms me
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deys overwhelms me too. Loves the haiku.
"And, in the end, the love you take is equal to the love you make." Paul McCartney
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Humm,
Someone correct me if I'm wrong but I thought Haiku required seven lines.
Ray E. Strode
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Too funny-- I used to run a weekly haiku contest on my writing website, but took it down due to lack of participation. Now we play an "Apples to Apples" type of word game instead. (Which I need to go out and update... I've been badly delinquent lately) Linda
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Haiku is three lines, with the syllable pattern 5 - 7 - 5 in the lines, respectively. True haiku is typically about art or nature and such topics, but you can write them on anything.
As we've already discovered here.
There is a Japanese poetry form with seven lines, but I forgot its name. It's not Sudoku. LOL.
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Well let me try one
Only like sushi
On the days ending in y
Why I sure don’t know
don't you jusr love the use of internal rhyme here?
(ducks tomatoes)
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I think technically - which we are not here - haiku is not supposed to rhyme but I don't worry about it. I think it's neat to rhyme to the 5-7-5 rule. I also like to do one sentence for all 17 syllables.
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Hi eb
I was just being silly lol. That's why I put myself ducking the tomatoes. All the time on lyric board three people talk about the use of internal rhyme so I thought I might do it on a haiku for fun lol!
Sincere Blessings
Derek
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Actually, it would be fun to do a Country Music Haiku where every line *did* have to rhyme. (It'd probably have to have a bridge, too.)
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John, Paul, George, Ringo
Cash, Stookey, Strait, Lorne Green song
Fooled ya, didn't I?
John, Paul, George, Ringo
Liverpool At JFK
Beatlemania
Been A Hard Day's Night
Paul Is Dead, Goo Goo Ga Joob
Dig that funky hair
Revolution, Help,
Long And Winding Road, Get Back,
My top Beatle picks
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I was wondering what you meant when you said "duck tomatoes"
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I think you need one word change to make 'er great, Scottie. Instead of:
Haiku? Oh, Haiku!...go with...Haiku, NO, Haiku!
An excellent suggestion, Ben. I will use it in any future posting of my sole haiku. Would edit it here, but it's just too long  Excellent thread by the way - am enjoying all the responses.... Yeah, I wouldn't have guessed, eb Scott
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Melancholy night
As I sit here and I write
Somber at twilight
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Hey EB
Nice Haiku I really enjoyed it!
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I was kind of impressed by my "melancholy night" haiku myself. I acomplished the rhyme thing I wanted to do. The "night" and "write" was fairly easy though I had six syllables in the first line at first. The only part of the three lines I didn't like was that the last line didn't actually sound like a sentence ending, which is what I was trying to accomplish. I couldn't come up with any other five syllable line that made sense.
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Hey eb
Yes I can see that. It's hard to bring a line a song or any other writing to a close. I know me personaly I just want to keep writing. I think what you did here was rathe succint though. I don't think it needs to have a true ending. It put me in a spot to imagine you sitting there writing and that sense pulled a whole story together. To do that in 17 syllables is genius in my opinion!
Sincere Blessings
Derek
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Okay, I'll give her a whirl:
When does Derek snooze?
He posts every five minutes
Let's kidnap his muse
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I'll try another, while it's on my mind....
My foot is broken
My arm and ankle are too
No, I aint jokin'
or how about...
Red Sox won again
Pennant fever's running high
Thanks to our bullpen
or how about:
I love Halloween
Kids bundled in their costumes
All want to be seen
or how about:
Lyrics make me groan
Haikus do not need music
They can stand alone
Time to leave this thread
Must get back to my writing
May just go to bed
Fun thread, thanks!!
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Whenever I die,
I will walk from this meat sack
And scare my ex-wife
A required bridge
In country western haiku
Seems reasonable
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I've never written a haiku..is this along the correct lines?
rain is falling down
as the clouds darkly roll by
i'll stay till its dry
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Yippee, I'm so glad I found this thread...I really need to "get out" more (from Lyric Feedback Forum 3, my home away from home!). Kathy, according to the parameters described above -- and those I recall from Campfire Girl days ; ! -- that most definitely meets the Haiku criteria. Lovely. I'm also thinking that these haikus are a great writing challenge in their own right, as you do need to get a clear message/image across in a mere 17 words. For those who know me, they are probably impressed I even ventured into this thread. Anyway, I may even do some more! Like.... Caramel apple Draped in brown gooey goodness Pulls out a loose tooth Oh my, this could keep me occupied for a while....  Beth
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shadows on the wall
desklight over a keyboard
i'm writing to you
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Fingers grow lazy
Words bob and weave on the screen
Time for the night shift
Later, have a good one all...
Beth
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Mother, trucks, trains, farms,
Prison, dead dogs and Christmas--
It's country haiku.
Have a good night, y'all.
Joe
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Hey Joe
Nice country Haiku lol. If you play it backwards does everything come back? lol jk
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Ok time for another Haiku (clears throat)
I don't write for change
I write only for dollars
Got any spare change? lol <=== not part of the haiku
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Hey Mz Beth
Now you want to kidnap my muse aye? What you don't realize is a plot more sinister than any screen play writer could ever develop is about to unfold mu hahahaha!!! To be continued....
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I liked that Derek...
Slept with wife's best friend
Really! All we did was sleep
She snores really loud
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JFK, Johnson,
Nixon, Ford, Carter, Reagan, Bush
Clinton, Bush, stay tuned
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Statlers, Elvis, Hag
Hank the first, Beatles too
Manilow my faves
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who will tickle me
nothing better then laughter
when i feel silly
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Escaping chilly
Would be easier with chili
Wife says you silly
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Laid back Sunday morn
Reflectin' and relaxin'
Soothingly awake!
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Oh no this one has fallen time to raise it back up!
poodles in puddles
Dachunds eating donut holes
Sure sounds wierd to me
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sometimes I feel blonde
Can't figure out what's going on
Thoroughly confused
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Ok Joe here is an all haiku country song had to take the challenge!
Country Haiku (She Left Me Lonely)
1st Verse
We were so happy
When we were together then
Now we’re only friends
Chorus x2
She left me lonely
Wondering what to do now
My one and only
2nd Verse
Left me feeling sad
I’m crying now in my beer
Wish she was still here
Chorus x2
She left me lonely
Wondering what to do now
My one and only
Bridge
Wish she would come back
See her there on my door step
Like she never left
3rd Verse
I need to move on
Get myself out of this rut
Fore the door slams shut
Chorus x2 out
She left me lonely
Wondering what to do now
My one and only
Copyright November 17, 2007 Derek Hines All Rights Reserved
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A new haiku thread
Kemosabe said okay
Competition good
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Boxers hit the trail
Japanese start their haiku
And the months March on
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A, E, I, O, U
and sometimes W, Y
f_ll _n _ll th_ bl_nks
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Ice is slippery
Got retractable crutch cleats
Now fall down in style
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Forgot to wind watch
Going to be late for work
Think they will miss me?
Low expectations
Keep me from being upset
When things don't work out
One two three four five
How do we get to seven?
Need another two
Dentists scare me bad
what with all their drills and such
Want a gentler touch
Two plus three equals
Five plus two equals seven
less two equals five
Cultural icon
Vast array of gadgetry
MR Ron Popiel
Ok that's enough for now lol
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Two plus three equals
Five plus two equals seven
less two equals five
Derek, is this Haiku Law? If so, I can understand it. Just curious. You guys are good at it.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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One thought and three lines
And seventeen syllables?
Not enough fingers...
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Good one, Joe. Okay, I get it now.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Here comes the New Year
Resolutions to be made
Hell, I'll Ignore 'Em!
The Wife's in a Funk:
Lots of Bills remain unpaid..
I guess I should care..
Let's end with A Laugh:
So, "Knock Knock,(Well) Who is There?"
(Nobody I've known..)
End of One-More-Year:
I'm A Walking-D.U.I.
(Time to sleep it off!)
Happy New Year,
Big Hugs,
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Let's end with A Laugh: So, "Knock Knock,(Well) Who is There?" (Nobody I've known..) Is that known in the BIBLICAL sense, big StanLee? Happy New Year & ROLL TIDE!!! (Coming on ESPN vs. Colorado Buffaloes in 10 minutes) Ben
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G'Mornin' Bro-ster!
What can I say...I've been too-faithful to be A Wild-&-Crazy Guy for Some Time Now...(Much as I do enjoy reminiscin' a Wee-Bit about the Bad Ol' Daze...)
Here's an Ol' Guy's Almost-Haiku for the Day Ahead..heh!
'Day After New-Year's
& Throughout our small house
Tired Party-goers had best "Shut-Yo'-Mouth!"
Happy Hangover, Amigo,
& Best to Ya in '08, Buddy!
Big Guy-Hug,
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Haven't had coffee Can't count the syllables So that one had six. Good morning
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It's been snowing all night here in Vermont so I'll give this a try:
lightly falling snow
soft white blanket of silence
till an owl hoots
(unless owl is only one syllable then it would be: until an owl hoots)
Take Care,
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That's nice and cozy, GB. Think owl is 2 syllables in most parts of the country. Of course, if you wanted to set up the nice imagery and then destroy it with bathroom humour, you could have it as: lightly falling snow soft white blanket of silence till a moose poots 
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lol Ben, if I saw a moose I'd get my rifle and shoot they taste very good
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Hey boys,
Thought I'd pop in for a sec....know the Brattleboro area very well, Goldenbird....drove that 91 a million times it seems...
Anyhoo, here are my thoughts on the aforementioned moose:
If I saw a moose
I would take comfort knowing
It weighed more than me
or
Hunting for pleasure?
Just say "I coulda shot ya"
The sport's in the chase.
Anyhow, off to la la land. This 2008 is killing me, man!!
Happy New Year!!
Ciao for now,
Beth
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If hiaku is art
also form of poetry
why's it so easy?
Yesterday all my
troubles seemed so far away
oh I believe in
Fish in pond swimming
baited hook is now waiting
Fish fry for supper
Penquins sure can't fly
Niether can ostritches fly
Must be too heavy
Violence on TV
Takes young innocence away
We should pull the plug
Everyday I wake
Except for one coming day
Then I'll sleep no more
Whether Democrat
Or they be republican
I don't trust either
Soft gentle breezes
Through Euclaylptus branches
Brings thoughts of spring time
One more then I go
Is I'll one or two silly's
If two then I'll change
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Whether I'll is one
Or two syllables depends
On where y'all are from
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I'll take that under
Consideration then joe
thanks for the info
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Seventeen silly
Bulls, three lines, and one rider
Sounds like rodeo
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sake on your lips
undulates gracefully in
the ambulance light
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This cold weather sucks
Pretty snow doesn't cut it
Ice ain't fun neither
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But snow ice cream, Beth Aspartame and fat-free milk Choose any flavor
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Go for it Tricia
They can be fun or thoughtful
Easy either way
Calvin might like these
He could write a whole new song
Using just three lines
One, two, three, I'm thru
It's eleven twenty two
Catch ya tomorrow!
xoxo
Beth
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Country song haiku
Very, very hard to do
Got to make rhyme, too.
Joe
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© words by C. Stewart ( Jan 5, 2008 ) Daggers in your breath Is mankinds devestation Hate times hate is death Math that's never new The perfect calculation Love times love is two http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Okay, Cal, now you're just showing off. I KNEW you'd be all over this format. You've managed to put in the whole story....sad commentary about the world, with a whiff of hope at the end. PLUS, they're a great quick mental exercise, in between full-blown lyrics...WIN-WIN. (See, that wasn't so scarey, was it? ) Beth
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All right, I found one of mine:
slipping away
(c) Linda P. Adams
we move on through time
slipping through and between its
liquid silk edges
I have some sillier ones somewhere that I wrote when I was sick once and craving hot Jell-O in a mug. If I find it... I'll post.
Linda
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Nver written haiku before...
So, heres a first attempt (be nice :))
You told me dreams mean something
I dreamt I saw you
Dancing in the purple rain
Into the caverns of tomorrow with just our flashlights and our love, we must plunge.
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OH and, I LOVE yours Linda!!! It gives such a wonderful image!
Ettie
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First Love
She floats on your promises
Dances on your dreams
Her skies are paved with ideas
This haiku thing is a little addictive!!
Into the caverns of tomorrow with just our flashlights and our love, we must plunge.
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Haiku way too much fun
Way too short--when one is done
Must write 'nother one.
Joe
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Quick way to say, "Hello, Joe"
Postcards from the edge
Quicker than Pony Express
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Here Comes The New Year:
Three-Hundred and Sixty-Five
Broken Resolu (tions!)
I Like The Police
Especially When One Says
"I have The HANDCUFFS"...
I Gave Her My Heart
"Handle-with-Care" I told Her
(NEXT-Time: "BUBBLEWRAP".)
She Loves like a Squid:
A Control-Freak, 8-Arms-Strong
Squeezing Out My Ink
God I Believe-In
Doesn't Look a BIT like Me:
(She's Still Evolving)
Yes, We Have Problems:
You Won't Listen to Me &
I've Nothing to Say
We Quest for Beauty:
You Like to Probe My Soul's Depths
I Settle for Thighs
Here We Are Again:
SHOULD Sweep You Up in My Arms
But I've Gotta Pee...
I Like Fresh Popcorn
& It's EXTRA Fun When My
Cat Thinks It Wants Some.
Haikus Get Boring
Guess I'll Turn On The TV
& Get Me a Life!
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Uh Ben
I think we are losing format here! I counted 19 silly's I think some have switched to 7 5 7 instead of 5 7 5
Derek
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yuck another year
What happened to the last one?
I need some more sleep
Volkswagens on ice
Not a show disney puts on
Fun to watch it though
Pigeons ate my brain
And even though it's now gone
They are stil hungry
Violent pixels
Blood gore on nineteen inch screen
Computer games kill
News commentary
Filled with wrong speculations
It's the New York Times
Shave and a haircut
Two bits sounds a trifle small
How bout ten dollars?
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Shave and a haircut
Two bits? I think from now on
I go your barber.
Joe
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A japanese poem
filled with detailed images
in precise format
Putting so much thought
To seventeen sylables
Not an easy task
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This one is for Derek:
Salem, Oregon...
such a small world isn't it?
the paper plant stinks
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Hey Jack
You bout summed that one up to a tee. The paper plant maybe closing from what I hear. The city of Salem wants to turn it into a park. I used to work for boise at the corrugated plant. We did deliveries all the time to fine paper. And yeah it stinks rofl. Yes a small world tis. Got one for ya too
Guitar playings cool
Whether one or two capo's
Always a good time
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Ok time for a few more
Apathetic muse
Gets lost after jumping tracks
five dollar reward
When you were young and
Your heart was an open book
Say live and let die
Blood sucking vampires
Draining your life force away
I.R.S Agents
Takes one trigger pull
To change a life forever
Use fire arms with care
Father, son, spirit
Unity in trinity
God so loved the world
majestic oak tree
your leaves covering the ground
Like a persian rug
Glass is half empty
How do I know this is true?
I drank more than half
Poetic movement
Dance of metal and rubber
It's Nascar racing
Done for now
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