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Real Deal
by Brian Austin Whitney - 05/07/26 01:38 AM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 05/06/26 05:36 PM
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The Other Side Of Love i am the picture you see in the dictionary next to the word confidence i am the swashbuckling man you have dreamed of i am the other side of love worry fear and failure are not in my vocabulary i am the moment at last, your leading man satisfaction guaranteed everthing you'll ever need your innocence is mine for the taking your heart is mine for the breaking i am experience above the covers i am your fantasy we will be lovers slowly i will teach you how to fly your wings spread eagle no pretence no longing for the ever after you and i will live off our laughter your innocence is mine for the taking your heart is mine for the breaking i am experience above the covers i am your fantasy we will be lovers i am the swashbuckling man you have dreamed of i am the other side of love satisfaction guaranteed everthing you'll ever need tingling intermingling interwined destiny discovered in our own time © 2004 by ritt ® 2004 by random noise music ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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Ritt
I really like the angle but can't figure out how all the repetition will fit into the picture, choruses, bridges, builds etc.
Real good writing though and as I said a great angle.
Eric
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Eric i don't believe i ever write a build or a lift or a pre chorus unless for the fun of it, the way i see it if the lyric doesn't naturally progress than it ain't happenning. in this song i picture the last two verses as a double chorus leading the music to soar into a dramatic come down into the the last two lines which are a mini bridge, bridging nothing, but it really doesn't matter as long as it creates musical drama. Got that, quiz in the morning! ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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Oh M'God, I understood that!
Eric
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Hi Ritt, you have such a unique way with words I sometimes feel I have no way to even critique your stuff ...it can be pretty much put to anything you choose. My take on this one..my fav line.. "i am experience above the covers" really like this en! I think this one is a real goer. ![[Linked Image]](http://www.justplainfolks.org/ubb/smile.gif) Liana Ps I cant remember the name of the lyric of mine you said reminded you of rolling stones, I was going to look it up if you knew the name, but Ive been so busy that I didnt get a chance to ask you. http://www.soundclick.com/bands/9/katziismusic.htm
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Hey Ritt,
I had this picture of you as Johnny Depp in "Pirates"
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We too often throw the word "great" around like it was a frisbee, instead of the manhole cover it should be
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Hi Liana
All ya gotta say is way to go Johnny Depp. k
[This message has been edited by sweetjoyce (edited 05-18-2004).]
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Hi Bill but but but, I am Johnny Depp flood control is so wonderful, take a ride to sommersville, and shoot the little birdies, teach'm to make dirty turdies on my turf. ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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ooohhh johnny depp! I loved it before knowing you're johnny depp-really I did!
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Mornin' Ritt,
I love this hook! But...the other side of love in my mind (such as it is) means the wrong side of love. And...if he fits the image of a swashbuckling man (!), that sounds about right to me! 'Course, the rest of it fits the hook to a "T."
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Hey Sweet,
I've been working on something in a similiar vein called "Mr Arrogance Is Here TO Save The Day" this one reminded me of that a little. Overall not a bad job I wasn't a big fan of the "teach you how to fly" verse though. Best of luck with I'm sure you'll get it to where you want it to be.
Later,
Kevin
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Ok if its not plastic surgery keeping him looking like he does, then the inescapable conclusion is that he goes tanking in formaldehyde.... As for this guy, he does have the right touch of confidence with that pinch of arrogance, which makes that verse Kevin pointed out stand out as "ordinary".... I think you have to move the character forward somehow.... ask yourself...wwjdd (what would johnny depp do?)
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i hate to skip over, but John and Kritter, I tend to agree, but also think that verse has good sexy growl to it, that should make it sing and fit well, but still up in the air with it. hmmm reading again, maybe it does suck lol, well i'll fix it later after sleep, hmmm swashbuckler, nipples/ripples rhyme comes to mind, lol damn John, I am Johnny Depp ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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How's this The Other Side Of Love i am the picture you see in the dictionary next to the word confidence i am the swashbuckling man you have dreamed of i am the other side of love worry fear and failure are not in my vocabulary i am the moment at last, your leading man satisfaction guaranteed everthing you'll ever need your innocence is mine for the taking your heart is mine for the breaking i am experience above the covers i am your fantasy we will be lovers bamboo curtains swaying whispering windchimes echoing every breath incence and scented candles purify an affair soon forgotten, remembered till we die your innocence is mine for the taking your heart is mine for the breaking i am experience above the covers i am your fantasy we will be lovers i am the swashbuckling man you have dreamed of i am the other side of love satisfaction guaranteed everthing you'll ever need tingling intermingling interwined destiny discovered in our own time © 2004 by ritt ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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this one is so wonderful. great bit of writing here.
This makes it all worth the read:
your innocence is mine for the taking
your heart is mine for the breaking
i am experience above the covers
i am your fantasy we will be lovers
I endeavor to change one heart and one mind, one word at a time.
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Song are you saying a swashbuckler is akin to a family man? somewhat confused. ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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Ok so where are we going Johnny!!!!!, I had in my mind this new image, and was thinking swaying latern in a dimmed cabin smelling of old whiskey and oak...... and there you are, Im captured...raptured...I give up LOL
So where did this asian Island flair come from?
"bamboo curtains swaying whispering
windchimes " hmmmmmmmmmmm
Johnny Johnny Johnny..........!
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Liana c'mon girl this is a high classed pirate with diamonds from sunken treasures, and a plume in his hat, no dark dingy dungeons or sweaty filthy galleys for Johnny Depp; just lie back and capture the rapture lol ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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Ritt, you haven't been talking to those cyber women again, have you? Ha! Confidence. Well, ok, I'll buy it.
"Grits is one of those country-boy words that is both singular and plural-like deer, elk and sheep. I think the singular is appropriate when there's a modifier that makes it clear one is talking about something specific. Like, 'Grits are good for you, but these here grits is tasty.'"~~Joe Wrabek
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Tricia I swear, three chatrooms, three marriages, batting a thousand lol. My bro calls me the web Don Juan; damn just write a complimentary poem, and walla the alter!!! Well let it be known third time is a charm!!!!!!! ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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Thanks Leslie Welcome to Ritt's law of averages; some time ago a singer mentioned to me that for every 50 lyrics you write you have a ratz chance in hell of sniffing one hit song, so ever since I've been writing three lyrics a day; until thousands have piled up. Sooner or later (hopefully before i complete my quest to deplete the rain forest) I just may get lucky!!! ------------------ http://www.ampcast.com/music/26305/artist.php
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