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Fast, contemporary praise and worship song.

VERSE
Lord of the universe
And all of creation
I am humbled
Just to think that You know me.

I am one of a million
But unique before my maker
I am taken by a love that lasts
For all eternity.

Lord, I stand before You now
In awe and wonder.
Oh, I wonder where You see me in Your plan.

I stand before You now
In praise and hunger
It's a hunger to see more of You
And less of who I am.

CHORUS
Carry me, carry me
You are strong when I am weak
You know everything I need
All my worries I release them, Lord, to You.

Carry me, carry me
From this world
Where I will fly on eagles wings
I am nothing without You, Lord,
Carry me.


(repeat verse and chorus)


BRIDGE
Lord, I stand before You now
In awe and wonder.
I stand before You now
In awe and wonder.
Yes, I stand before You now
Here I stand...

CHORUS

ENDING:
I am nothing without You, Lord,
There is nothing without You
I am nothing without You, Lord,
Carry me.

©2003 ThinkHaus Idea Factory

Okay, looking for one review. Anybody?

Great message! That is who carries me. Fo' Sure. Did you intend to have a rhyme scheme on this one? Also, at the end, the message gets repetative. Was that so that you could emphasize your point? Great start to this song!

Leslie

Thanks, Leslie.

This one is meant for group singing. As with most praise and worship songs, the message has to be simple, easy to sing and easier still to remember. The repetition you see is in the bridge, which simply sets up one last round of the chorus.

Rhyme scheme is last line of first verse, last line of second. The build up to the chorus happens in "Lord, I stand before you now..." But there again, the rhyme happens with "wonder" and "hunger" and with "plan" and "am".

So, it ain't your typical rhyme job, but the song sings pretty well.

Thanks for looking and making notes.

[This message has been edited by thinkhaus (edited 06-20-2003).]

[This message has been edited by thinkhaus (edited 06-20-2003).]

Hi thinkhaus,
Some thoughts:

Carry me, carry me
From this world
Where I will fly on eagles wings
I am nothing without You, Lord,
Carry me.
Bit confusing here, could read carry me "to" where, or that you will fly in this world on eagles wings, or where you fly on eagles wings you are nothing.

I am taken by a love that lasts (with instead of by?)What would you think of opening the song with the "I am one of a million...." and then going into "Lord of the universe"?

"It's a hunger to see more of You
And less of who I am."
Like that line a lot!

Thanks Char.

I'll have to think on those a little. But like the perspective.

Thanks for reading.

I don't have a clue how to write a Christian song but it looks well-written to me.

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Thanks for looking Duke.

This one has played and been received well with my band and church congregation. I might tweak here and there along the way, but this one is probably pretty much complete. I hope to start shopping it for commercial purposes soon.