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"Captured" tells the story of a person who has become trapped inside his own version of reality. Every contradiction becomes another justification. Every challenge becomes a conspiracy. Every criticism becomes an attack.

The song asks a simple question: What happens when the prison bars are made from the lies we tell ourselves?


Captured
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[Instrumental Intro]

[Verse]
I’m smart but you won’t see my grades
I’m clean but I don’t change my ways
I’m right when I say that I’m right
And it turns to truth when I say it twice

[Verse]
I’m innocent but I won’t testify
I stay quiet but I never say why
Release all the files unless I’m inside
If I’m in the story then the truth gets denied

[Pre-chorus]
Don’t ask me to change what I believe
I build my truth on what I see

[Chorus]
I’m captured, captured, caught in my mind
Captured, captured, running out of time
It’s a witch hunt when it’s not my way
It’s fake news when they don’t obey
I know it all - I don’t lose
I make the truth fit my views
Captured, captured, what I’ve become
Captured, captured, nowhere to run

[Break]

[Verse]
I’m successful but my business fails
I win every time when I tell my tales
If it helps me win, it must be right
If it hurts my name, then it’s out of sight

[Pre-chorus]
Don’t show me a mirror I don’t agree with
I rewrite the world till it fits my script

[Chorus]
I’m captured, captured, caught in my mind
Captured, captured, running out of time
It’s a witch hunt when it’s not my way
It’s fake news when they don’t obey
I know it all, I don’t lose
I make the truth fit my views
Captured, captured, what I’ve become
Captured, captured, nowhere to run

[Bridge]
If you come for me, I’ll come for you
In ways you can’t imagine I’d do
I built this world and I built it to win
And I can’t see the cage I’m in

[Interlude]

[Final chorus]
I’m captured, captured, caught in my mind
Captured, captured, running out of time
It’s a witch hunt when it’s not my way
It’s fake news when they don’t obey
I know it all, I don’t lose
I make the truth fit my views
Captured, captured, what I’ve become
Captured, captured, nowhere to run


[Outro]
I’m captured, captured, nowhere to run

I'm gonna say you for surer have a style....

Guess I ought to keep my mouth shoot, don't want to start anything, but I agree with you.

Nice Job.

LOL Rob, being all bad together again I see.

First off, love the premise....the setup...the prison of the mind...locked inside storage rooms full of baggage

BUT IMO far more powerful if you make it timeless, applicable to those "in their own shadows", the "hidden", UNABLE to function because of what they deal with every day.

In more general terms....anything in this vein is now risks being seen as a simple pile on and only something clever, original and compelling will cut through the noise.

OR, like our Pay For It, rise up a little higher for a broader overview. We tackled all elites and decision makers

KOS as always.

Hey Tex,
"You have a style" - I'll take that as a compliment!

And coming from Arkansas, I wasn't sure how you'd react to the underlying message, so that made me smile.

I don't want to start anything either. I was really just exploring how someone can get trapped in their own narrative and end up believing only what they want to believe.

Glad you enjoyed it, and thanks for the kind words!

John,
First, I have to say I'm pleasantly surprised. I honestly thought JPF was on life support. I post a song and within an hour I get thoughtful feedback from two fellow songwriters. No insults, no attacks, no politics - just honest reactions and constructive ideas. That's refreshing.

As for your comments, I think you're onto something.
What interested me most when writing Captured wasn't any particular person. It was the idea of someone becoming trapped inside their own narrative - a prison of the mind where every contradiction becomes another brick in the wall. The current lyric may point people toward a specific interpretation, but I agree there's a bigger, more timeless song hiding in there.

I like the direction you're suggesting - something broader, more universal, applicable to anyone wrestling with their own shadows, baggage, fears, ego, or self-deception.
If the idea interests you, consider this an open invitation. Feel free to take the lyric as a starting point and change whatever needs changing to get where you think the song wants to go. I'd be interested to see what Captured looks like through your lens.

Thanks again for taking the time to listen and offer thoughtful feedback.
Rob

Take it to the starfish workroom...

Can't get to it for a bit....tied up with business and some stuff....but there we can keep track of it

Done. I agree. It's probably going to be ripped apart here. I've listened to it a couple of times now. Man, that chorus is awesome.