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IRAN
by Fdemetrio - 04/15/26 12:27 PM
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PETE
by Fdemetrio - 04/14/26 06:57 AM
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Hey guys.. I hope everyone is doing well! I had this idea for a hook a while back and sort of wondered why I'd not used it, or heard it used before. It's not done yet but wondered it any of you think it's too vague. Here is a link to a scratch so you can sort of get the feel for it. Thanks!, -S https://drive.google.com/open?id=0B-JzL6S0a2PqQ3hLQTBhSUh2emMLyrics- I'll plead the 5th (S.Horton) © 2015 V1 2 cans o’ gasoline and a pedal on the floor, A full load o’ memories You don't want no more V2 pull off and soak em’ down In the first field I come to, Tip a cup, light em up Show the world for miles around we’re through RISE And if the cops show up flashin’ blue CHORUS I'll plead the fifth, Won't tell em’ how u left me black and blue, I’m just get'n lit, So i can clearly see, What's left o’ me and you. I’m gonna tug on this bottle, till the crazy all makes sense. You left me with only one defense, So I’ll plead the fifth... V3 So here's to our smolderin’, pile of history, Here’s to all them things I never was, That you always hoped I'd be. V4 Im gonna drown this pain in whiskey, Till it’s ashes on the ground, Until then, If I hear the Sirens sound.. Repeat Chorus Bridge Even in this state o’ mind I know, You and I are through, But my heart’s still hooked and jonesin’, to go another round or two. At this rate I might be on the evenin’ news.. Repeat Chorus
Last edited by Steve Horton; 03/30/16 08:15 PM.
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Hey Steve, Yeah, that's down and dirty, with a good hook. Just needs a small bar, cold beer and some smoked ribs, and I'm in.  It's got a good feel to it, keep it going, throw in a bridge, and you're nearly home. cheers, niteshift
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Very clever hook, Steve. You definitely need to keep going and finish this. Could be a tad faster (not much) to make it rock...
I'd change the "if"(s) to "when" - 'cause they will certainly be coming...
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whoa Steve,ya got a hot one here in the makin'.For sure keep at it.I like that 3rd verse a lot.Mike
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Thanks Niteshift! I'll bring the sauce for those ribs Thanks for checking it out! -S
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Very good point Floyd! I'm going to change the lyrics as you recommended. Thanks for the input and i'll finish it this week -S
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Thank Mike for checking it out and i'm for sure gonna finish it now!
Thanks,
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Sweet
Got that cool Muscle Shoals vibe.
Dig'n that hook.
so far so good
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Steve, you've built some solid lyric writing around a real good guitar hook. It's a dark storyline well told. I can almost feel the seething angry emotion of the protagonist as he plots his revenge. I think you've got a good one. It's certainly not too vague.
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Hey Steve,
Really good tune. A touch reminiscent of Kenny Wayne Shephard's
Blue on Black, except I like this much better! Done up in a rockin' bluesy style, rather than a pure country style, would be the way to go with it in my humble opinion. It will be killer. Already really is.
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Hi Steve, I love what you're doing with it so far, looking forward to the completion. Calvin http://www.soundclick.com/bands/0/calvinstewart
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Hi Steve, Nice southern rock sound, guitar and vocal both shining. Definitely keep working on it--it's sounding great. Mike
Fate doesn't hang on a wrong or right choice
Fortune depends on the tone of your voice
-The Divine Comedy (Neil Hannon)
from the song "Songs of Love"
from the album "Casanova" (1996)
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Dude! You're killin me here...finish this sucker!
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Sweet
Got that cool Muscle Shoals vibe.
Dig'n that hook.
so far so good
Thanks Nelson for checking it out!
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Steve, you've built some solid lyric writing around a real good guitar hook. It's a dark storyline well told. I can almost feel the seething angry emotion of the protagonist as he plots his revenge. I think you've got a good one. It's certainly not too vague. Thanks Dan! It's a dark one for sure. I'm glad to see the hook's not too vague.. that was my primary worry with it. -S
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Hey Steve,
Really good tune. A touch reminiscent of Kenny Wayne Shephard's
Blue on Black, except I like this much better! Done up in a rockin' bluesy style, rather than a pure country style, would be the way to go with it in my humble opinion. It will be killer. Already really is.
Dave Wow Dave.. thank you for checking it out and for the kind words! Stylistically I was thinking the same thing. Thanks for the listen! -S
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Hi Steve, Nice southern rock sound, guitar and vocal both shining. Definitely keep working on it--it's sounding great. Mike Will do Mike thanks for checking it out! -S
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Dude! You're killin me here...finish this sucker!
Ricki Haha Thanks Ricki.. I was gonna do just that Tuesday but something came up and I couldn't get into the studio. definitely gonna finish it soon. Thanks again for the spin! -S
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