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Real Deal
by Brian Austin Whitney - 05/07/26 01:38 AM
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by Gary E. Andrews - 05/06/26 05:36 PM
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I AIN'T DRINKIN' BEER ANYMORE
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I ain't drinkin' beer anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer is too risky so from now on It's whiskey Makes my fool head damn sore I ain't drinkin' beer anymore
VI I ain't trying to impress some nights I drank to excess My buddies once dragged me home Dropped me in bed like a stone My baby showed me the door I ain't drinking beer anymore
c2 I ain't drinkin' booze anymore since my baby locked the door I've been on water all week it gives my liver a tweak Sat in my favourite bar even drive home in my car
v2 Cop saw me leavin the bar YEP saw me get into my car Said,I'm gonna prove your pissed deep breath and blow into this Was clean as the driven show I said,Something you should know
B Could tell he was seriously annoyed when I revealed I was the designated decoy
chorus 1
I ain't drinkin' beer anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer is too risky so from now on It's whiskey Makes my fool head damn sore I ain't drinkin' beer anymore
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I AIN'T DRINKIN' BEER ANYMORE
chorus 1
I ain't drinkin' beer anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer is too risky so from now on It's whiskey Makes my fool head damn sore I ain't drinkin' beer anymore
V My buddies carried me home I dropped in bed like a stone I ain't trying to impress some nights I drank to excess My baby's showed me the door I ain't drinking beer anymore
chorus 1
I ain't drinkin' beer anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer is too risky so from now on It's whiskey Makes my fool head damn sore I ain't drinkin' beer anymore
V Drinkin' iced water all week to give my liver a break A cop stopped me in my car said, saw you leaving the bar Want you to blow into this gonna prove that you are p-----
BRIDGE.SPOKEN PERHAPS?
Blew hard into his bag breath pure as virgin snow. Boy did he get annoyed. Cos I'm- the designated decoy
c2 Ain't drinkin tequila anymore last night fell flat on the floor Tequila makes me forgetful my baby called it neglectful oh boy my heads STILL sore ain't drinkin' tequila anymore
Last edited by Travis david; 11/22/14 02:45 PM.
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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Fun, but the second verse doesn't go with the twist of being the decoy for the cops...maybe I'm missing something here? Looks like you thought of the twist as you came to the bridge but didn't go back to reread the context.
Good idea ...needs a rewrite.
Last edited by Neil Cotton; 11/22/14 12:46 PM.
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Umm I've altered the first two lines of v2 but I'm not sure what you mean exactly?
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It seems the being put to bed is the key point in V2 when your key point is the excess and hence he becomes the designated decoy.
I ain't trying to impress some nights I drank to excess My buddies once dragged me home Dropped me in bed like a stone My baby showed me the door I ain't drinking beer anymore
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The part you said is verse 2 is v1 as the lyric begins with the chorus.I like your take on it better than mine though so I've used it.Cheers Neil thanks for your help, I appreciate it
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also the chorus is not leading to the twist...
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Done a couple of rewrites in fact more than I've posted.Does it work better using Neil's suggestions Travis
Last edited by Travis david; 11/22/14 02:28 PM.
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I don't think you have to start with a chorus but..
I AIN'T DRINKIN' BOOZE ANYMORE
I ain't drinkin' booze anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer was too risky Even worse when it was whiskey Made my fool head so damn sore I ain't drinkin' booze anymore I ain't drinkin' booze anymore
VI I ain't trying to impress some nights I drank to excess My buddies once dragged me home Dropped me in bed like a stone My baby showed me the door I ain't drinking booze anymore
c2 I ain't drinkin' booze anymore since my baby locked the door I've been on water all week it gives my liver a tweak Sat in my favourite bar even drive home in my car I ain't drinkin' booze anymore
v2 Cop saw me leavin the tavern I had Jumped in my ol' Mav'rick Said,I'm gonna prove your pissed deep breath and blow into this Was clean as the driven snow I said,Something you should know
B Could tell he was seriously annoyed when I revealed I was the designated decoy
chorus 1
I ain't drinkin' booze anymore one night fell flat on the floor Drinkin' beer was too risky Even worse when it was whiskey Made my fool head so damn sore I ain't drinkin' booze anymore I ain't drinkin' booze anymore
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Fancy a crack at the music? Maverick doesn't rhyme lol
Last edited by Travis david; 11/22/14 03:28 PM.
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Sure can try...do some drunkin honky tonk...?
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the rhyme LOL was trying to avoid reusing bar and car...
Put the emphasis on the first syllable.
TAV'rin...MAV rick
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See what you come up with?
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It's a fun song, at least until it happens in real life. I gave up all alcohol, August 16, 2012. Now I don't have to fear the cops.
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On Elvis' anniversary Jim and you a big fan of the King.A story there maybe? Cheers Travis
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On Elvis' anniversary Jim and you a big fan of the King.A story there maybe? Cheers Travis
We are all in the gutter, but some of us are looking at the stars. Oscar Wilde
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